I would say that I just read your story, but that was yesterday. Thank you for writing your story, it is probably in the top 25% of stories on this site... Not that it means much from me since I'm new to the site. Ultimately I enjoyed your story despite the frustration it can cause in me.
I liked the Luna teaching the dark fairies scene. I didn't find the dark fairies creating a cult wasn't funny. I think it was part about Scriptures that made me not find it humorous. Maybe I would have found it more funny, if it was more gradual. Not that it matters, since it has already been written and not important enough to warrant a rewrite.
I hope you don't stop writing. This was originally one post, but apparently there's a 500 character limit.
Listen dude. I don't know about the new chapelters since I'm still at chapter 3, but if you just go over those early chapters and replace half of commas into full stops your writing style will much better. Those long sentences are exhausting.
Otherwise great story so far! I had to tell you about this since the fix is so simple in your case.
I want to know... have the last few chapters I've written been blander than usual?
My story is primarily a light-hearted comedy, but recently I've started to include a larger plot. I kinda feel like the plot is making the comedy blander while the comedy makes the plot less interesting, I'm not sure of what's the best way to balance it out.
Ugh... my story just got its third one star rating already.
I know that I should not pay much attention to it, but I can't help but wonder if I'm doing something that's pissing some poeple off, I mean, it's almost 10% of the total ratings, and I don't even have a single two star or three star yet.
It's based on number of views on a certain period of time, the more daily views you have the higher the place you'll have on rating, there's other ratings, readers, favorites, popularity and activity. The default one is Raising, and as I understand it includes all of the above but is more focused on daily views.