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Aiyoki · Jun 15, 2023

Read further! Give the story more of a chance! Try not to take things too literally or with an expectation of "Human" normalcy. There are a lot of fine details you missed by absorbing only the surface content presented within the story.

Sable · Jun 16, 2023

So, what story are you talking about? Anyway, I've read tens of thousands of books, I can get through a novel a day. I'm a pretty experienced reader. That also means my judgement is quite good. When I abandon a story... that is generally pretty well-deserved.

Aiyoki · Jun 16, 2023

Crimson Fields. I wouldn't say 9 chapters was really giving it much of a chance? clear.png

It's rolling along slowly but it'll get there eventually.

Your review is also not exactly what I would call constructive feedback (Feels like trolling tbh) so it ends up being difficult for me to take it seriously...

Sable · Jun 16, 2023

It wasn't trolling. The feedback was extremely constructive. I gave you specific, fixable reasons why I abandoned your series. Your writing has potential, but the decision-making of your protagonists was unforgivable. Once I can't relate to the decisions protagonists are making, or I can't suspend my disbelief, I'm done with a novel. But good news! If you ever decide to do a rewrite, you now have specific things you can improve to make it better.

Aiyoki · Jun 18, 2023

The narrative doesn't fit into the "Demons think like humans so they make human decisions" theme. Also Lulu and Lyssa aren't friends, their relationship is a lot more complicated than that.

Admittedly I'll probly do a rewrite for some of the earlier chapters but that won't happen until after I've finished the story.

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