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Hello eugenio This is the_prophetic_storyteller the creator of "Witch hunter"
Im reaching out because i want to improve my writing and story so if you want to expand on my stories' flaws please tell me.
I forgot there was a 500 characters minimum.
As for other things plot holes, I’m not sure where it is you read up to but some parts, in the beginning, get handled later on, like his past, history and relationships (Hestia isn't part of the harem) and other things but if it seems I’ve forgotten something then I’d be happy if you pointed it out. Thanks for your review and I hope it doesn’t deter you from reading onwards.
Hi, I can’t reply to the review but thanks for voicing your opinion, yes, the first 1-7 chapters were poor grammatically. when I first began my writing, I wasn’t there but since then my writing’s improved. I was updating them through Grammarly (scored above 80) when you wrote your review. Someone else pointed it out in chapter 6, so I have updated them, and they should be of a better quality to represent my work.
Yes a trained female can take down a male, but the odds of her taking down a trained male are different. I'll repeat this but the fights he lost were those were the enemy had powers or he was outnumbered: 1- his mother caught him by surprise and has superstrength and healing, 2- his fight against the 3 bullies, he was outnumbered and had hit his head which weakend him due to concussion nausea. He has literally won all other fights
He has combat experience as shown a couple of times, but his body is weak (that of a trap/femboy) like all males of this new world. Women are physically stronger and taller as a whole. If you pay attention you'll see that when he lost fights he was taken by surprise, was outnumbered, or the enemy had powers. I ask you that you modify your review if I have managed to change your mind.
Did you specifically said that his body changed and become weaker? Even a femboy body is strong if trained as he did( he was qualified to fight the last boss so he had to have enough experience even by fighting humanoid monsters or whatever. And of course, a trained , body is the minimum.)
Look, a trained female with a weaker and smaller constitution can take down a big man if he has none to little experience in fight,even if way stronger. Just imagine a female marine against a big civilian man. You wouldn't bet on the civilian no? It's the SAME thing. A trained veteran hero against a highschool girl,deliquent,stronger, bigger. Doesn't change much.
He is a hero, but remember he lost all the upgrades he had received form the previous world. He also doesn't have the support of the hero organization from his previous world
How is that related to combat's experience?
Thank you for stopping by to read! If you follow you can get update on everything i'm doing! 
So this is uhh... six months late now? Anyways, thanks for the review. It was a great help early on.
Ahaha, you're welcome. I just expressed my opinion
Why after I rate a novel the numbers of votes don't change?why I after I leave a comment it doesn't show? Why it says I registered 27 of something 2020 when I had an account from 2018 or something like that... Well at least I can say cogito ergo sum
Weird post...I like it.
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