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Absorbing the atmosphere as you read this.

Green_Dolphin · Jun 18, 2023

Thank you for the review and support. If it not too much hope I hope you can pointed out some problems that I missed. clear.pngclear.pngclear.png clear.png

SirDogeTheFirst · Jun 8, 2023

Thanks for the honest review. You pointed out some things I didn't see from the authors perspective, like the backstory. I wanted to paint a successful soldier whose carrier is heavily exaggerated by propaganda, like the ones back in world war 1 and 2. I suppose I failed to deliver that message.

LilBreh · Author · Jun 8, 2023

It makes sense if you use that logic, it's just that I don't think it was ever shown to the readers that most of it is propaganda.

Fullname82 · Jun 8, 2023

Thanks for your review. I will work hard to improve in the future !

LilBreh · Author · Jun 8, 2023

I also think the character change seemed extremely quick (at least to me, as a reader). Sure, he had many years to change, but we don't read about them much and so it comes off as a much quicker, unrealistic change. 

LilBreh · Author · Jun 8, 2023

This maybe could have been mitigated if rather than the mc saying "I feel like I was possessed.", he would say that he was controlled to say and do certain things at certain moments, yet somehow was forced to overlook it. It makes the fact that he wasn't actually like that much stronger. Now he went from stupid arrogant young master to absolute genius good guy.

Fullname82 · Jun 8, 2023

It is explained later in the story, what possessed MC made him obsessed but could not control him fully. 

However, I agree with the abrupt character change -without more details-in the beginning of the story.  I will make sure to keep that in mind in the future  

Thanks again for the constructive comments. I really appreciate it

cathe.nor · May 6, 2022

Change to Creative Novels as Scrbblehub always refresh when I'm pasting my story "She Is The Escape Boss QT & Original Counterattack Guide"

LilBreh · Author · May 10, 2022

Thanks

Bristlecone · Apr 25, 2021

Thanks for the review and for commenting, I hope that the grammar errors have been kept to an acceptable level.

Next Sunday “Level system vs Cultivation methods” will end, please leave your full experience in the final notes ?.
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