Yep! Though I would say that you might want to work on pronouns for just about everything. Many references of one character switching between he/she, I think even "it" is there also. Soemtimes even in the same sentence. If you would like help let me know and I will see what I can do.
I am sorry that the story has so many problems with the pronouns, although I try to make the sentences on my own, I also use a translator quite often to write complicated parts that I don't know what is the correct way to write certain sentences.I am aware that there are also quite a few errors.
I appreciate your gesture of help, just leave me a comment about the errors you notice in the chapter is enough for me, only if you want. Anyway, I will try to pay much more attention from now on.