Your welcome! Istas has been quite adorable so far and When I Found Myself seems a bit rushed and telling the timescale is kind of difficult. Would be easily converted to multiple chapters with extrapolation. But, it is your story and you wrote it how you wanted it to be, and it turned out well.
i mean to return to when I found myself some time, but I'm focusing on Istas for now. I've written about a third of the story so far but need to edit all those chapter to publish them but after I hope to fix everything I can on when I found myself.
Well the swear words are alright. From what I have been able to tell they are used in the right context. Though the story seems to be a bit on the rushed side I would guess it will slow down when you get to the main content you are going for. Congratulations on this being your first story! It is going well so far.
Yep! Though I would say that you might want to work on pronouns for just about everything. Many references of one character switching between he/she, I think even "it" is there also. Soemtimes even in the same sentence. If you would like help let me know and I will see what I can do.
I am sorry that the story has so many problems with the pronouns, although I try to make the sentences on my own, I also use a translator quite often to write complicated parts that I don't know what is the correct way to write certain sentences.I am aware that there are also quite a few errors.
I appreciate your gesture of help, just leave me a comment about the errors you notice in the chapter is enough for me, only if you want. Anyway, I will try to pay much more attention from now on.