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Thank you for the clarification.
Thank you for the review. Can you please elaborate on what you meant by "constant pov switch" because the only time I switch pov is to present something that the protagonist cannot see? It's there for worldbuilding. Also, your grammar is on par with mine and you exaggerated "everywhere", please elaborate what you really mean here, thanks.
For writing sequence, I have no idea what you mean, elaborate on this too.
The part about sequencing is more about tempo and description, you begin new scenes and end them very quickly without explaining the scenario making it hard to keep track of what's happening. An example of that would be the chapter around 16-19 i kept getting lost on what you were talking about especially when it comes to dialogue and i wasn't always sure of exactly what was happening in the fight scenes because of the lack of description.
But you are right i was a bit harsh in my rating now that I've reread the chapters it's not as bad is it was. the grammar, the tempo and lack of description is still an issue. plus the story is really quite unoriginal and boring. i can update the rating to a 2/5 at most.
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