Thankyou very much. I will have your review ready in a day or two as I am on break.
I will try my best to improve my grammar and be more descriptive as I prefer to leave info out, proving more information every now and then, leading to some major confusion.
Once again thankyou for the advice and I hope that my story was enjoyable to some extent.
Story of a person, abandoning their dying body. But instead of the intended outcome, their reincarnation puts them on the other side of a long and emotional war.
That is fine, but it doesn't work that way. They is used as the English language lacks an impersonal 3rd person, but it can't be used like you do. You need to be creative and improvise.