I encourage you to keep writing - maybe your next story will be more my taste - but as someone that has written one online novel, I know you don't please everyone - and most by doing are generally a much better writers at chapter 110 than chapter 10.

I wasn't my thing - and yes 11 chapters of reasonable writing (no grammar/spelling mistakes, good sentence structure, paragraphing - nothing bad about your writing style) but very unbelievable MC progression made for a less than enjoyable read. I felt my review was reasonable, and I did make a suggestion in the chapter comments of how it could be improved. 

Thanks for the Kind words. I'm still trying to get used to this as it's my first time writing a book so I'll be mindful that not everyone will like it. Thanks for this. Also, sorry, if I might have founded a bit rude before and thanks for giving the book a read.

I prefer the MC to start weaker than Orion is/will be as if they are OP from the start there is no struggle, no “how will they overcome this situation”, which is a good part of what I enjoy in general, which is why I felt this story was not for me. Your writing is fine, I just think your premise is not going to be of interest.

I didn't give it a bad review - I gave it an honest one. It was 3 starts - writing style, etc. was good, plot/MC was not good. I am reading several dozen books here and on other sites as well. Yours is not for me, and I suspect for other readers as well.

It's cool man. This is all new to me, so I can't expect everyone to lie it. You're right, it was an honest review. Thanks man

I've considered your comments and have altered the review to at least point out you write well, even if I didn't like the plot/content. There are any number of stories here and elsewhere I've started, disliked and dropped others I keep reading - I review many and I try to be honest, giving credit where credit is due, while giving my opinion in them.

Your writing is well-crafted, so keep it up, I am sure that your story will be liked by some readers and you write well enough so that those that like that type of story will be well entertained and not frustrated by the writing.

Thanks for sharing your story - it is well written and continues to surprise.

I've had a look at the latest chapters (210 -215) and while the English is slightly better, each sentence on a new line is still difficult to read - you need to use paragraphs. I read for enjoyment, and unfortunately your story, while based on a few good ideas is just hard work to read and try to understand what you are trying to say. But keep at it, only through practice can you improve. I still have you followed so will look at any new stories of your in case they are easier to read.

Looks interesting so I'll give it a go - I've written 1 story (not on this site) so I know how hard it is to create a story, so admire other author's efforts. 

I'm just writing down the stories I tell myself at work. Sometimes a boring job has it's benefits. If you need a story idea, feel free to ask.

Might give it a go, however horror and rape are distinct turn offs and equally not keen on gender bender and futanari as well.

You've got all the ones I've got and a few I haven't. "Repeater" might as well be one if not actually one. One option for you is :  archiveofourown.org - the author of "Superheroine..." linked to that site and posts under the name of Chastity and has over a dozen stories - from that follow the tag "Gender Role Reversal" and there is over 200 stories (although I've only read a couple, one rubbish but a couple quite good).

Alright. Thank you very much. I will continue on my pilgrimage. Hope you enjoy. 

Thank you

Thank you for writing it. I had a long comment to make but even after editing it heavily I kept hitting the 500 character limit for these posts. Would like to discuss your story with you, let me know if you are interested and I’ll use the SH mail instead.

Sure

In addition I think with smut I expect description pretty much every time, where as adult can be where the author writes they had sex without describing the act where full on description doesn’t add anything. So, for me, if sex happens every chapter or more often but generally left undescribed makes it adult vs describing most times should be tagged smut. I read and enjoy either if well written.

You write very well and I’ve liked the twists you add. Please keep writing as I definitely going to keep reading. A while ago I wrote a adaption of Pride and Prejudice on fan fiction.net called “Meet my daughter, Amy-Jane” but life has not allowed me time to write more, maybe once my youngest is older and less need of care.