Im doing that right now. I do see now that what I suggested would not fit but I would still say you could have slow down how friendly friendly they seems. You could have gone for more of a this is a person I'm currently with and we are currently filling out each other type of feel.
From what I've read so far your story is way to fast for no good reason. For example the portion in the beginning where I decided to drop the store at. It was when he first meets Aurora and they act like they knew each other since childhood. This portion makes no sense. He has zero memories from my understanding, he doesn't even know what's going on. He in that moment just found out what her name was.
Thanks for reading FoF! Sorry that I didn't thank you sooner, but, as you may or may not have noticed, I've been forced by my current circumstances to be away from SH for a while(but I'll be back soon, I think). Anyways, mind telling me what you think of the story so far? Also, nice...weird picture with cockroach eyes
I like the story so far. At times I do wish that you could speed up the story a bit, But other times I think the pace just fit some of the scenes And the pic came from yt meatcanyon railroad.