Ok so I read thru the entire story and I have things to say. First of all it’s a decent story. You definitely labeled it well. The problem is the name turns off at least 80-90% of people who might like the story cause of the title. I mean I don’t have to explain why right? Changing it to Bastard System would work great.
Second you need to give the first dozen or so chapters a revamp. Seriously it was kinda painful to read. It gets better and you really hit your stride around chapter 40 but seriously the first 10 or so chapters are so bad the ~10% that make it past the title might drop like flies after the first 5 chapters.
Okay. I said the bad let’s do the good. You have a good cast of characters. Noah’s journey looks like it will be interesting full of ups and downs. Tessa, Cil, and Bri are fantastic never had any problem telling them apart unlike some other harem novels. I can’t wait for Noah’s encounters with the succubus and the dragon.
Overall the plot and setting are different enough from other novels that the story is compelling. Take my advice however you like I can’t control you. I will be following you and hope that you keep writing ✍️.
Thank you. Yeah, well I know you are right according to statistics of chapters view. It starts with hefty amount of views but then only dedicated go through first 40😵💫. I'll think on all this for sure, I am not stupid enough to think I know what's best, so I am happy to hear advices. 👍🏻
Made the cover page for the Ugly Bastard with AI. Took me 100 tries and it's still not what I wished for. 
You can check it on patreon if you click thag money sign for donation
Maybe put an interesting cover art to grab the readers attention? It can be something comical or just different than the current background.
why did you stop uploading ugly bastard?
will you continue?
Hi, it's beetlesme, read all your work, love them, and the new one too, can I get your guidance even if it's little, thanks
Well, I do have discord ( I am DollyLamb#8094 ), but I don't really use social networks. I mean, I am kinda unsociable and a bit of introvert, so I am not even sure what people do on discord and so on. Leaving comments in the comment sections is the maximum of my sociability usually . But ok here ya go.
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Some of you may have noticed that I started a new story and may think "What the hell man, finish the first at least", but don't worry. I still intend to write 'Ugly Bastard' as my main story. This second one "South North" I intend to write slowly with a big gap rest time between chaps. I just had an idea for a new story and needed to take it out of me and put it to words so that it would not bother me in the head, cos it's been really distracting me lately.
While it was forming in my head I could not get a single word out of me to write "Ugly Bastard" story. Now that I wrote down a few chaos of it, I finally feel better and can continue with Noah's adventure.
hello, when will you continue ugly bastard?
Hey. In a few days I think. I needed a small breather. 🤤 And freshen my...khe-khem...knowledge base. So I made a small study on literotica
Love the story please don't burn out on the pace of releases😀
I think I saw you on a Manga site
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| Readers: | 1,288 |
| Followers: | 29 |
