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[Liana POV]
BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!
PIUNG!PANG!BOOOOOM!PANG!PING!
"..."(Liana)
Whelp...
Falling from the sky isn't as bad as I thought...
That is If no bullets are flying all around me...
I saw a lot of explosions near me...
I look to the side and saw a building beside me...
BOOM!BOOOOOM!
"Woah!"(Liana)
As I looked at a building it exploded right in front of me!?...
I crossed my hands and closed my eyes as I passed through the smoke from the explosion...
WUSSSHHHhhh....
I looked behind me and saw complete mayhem...
The building crumbled as it hit another building beside it...
A car explodes as a result of getting hit by some bullets...
And debris explodes into millions of pieces that hit everything near it...
Yeap...
Definitely mayhem in the sky...
I look in front again to see the Giant Mech crouching...
What is it doing now?...
Pathang!
Pathang!
I could see something opening on the Mech feet...
PACHUSSSSSS!
PACHUSSSSSS!
PACHUSSSSSS!
"You have got to be kidding me!?"(Liana)
What came out of the opening were missiles
Paching!buzz! BUZZ!
I looked at my gun and it was sparking...
"Okay... Let's see what you got! [Jet!]"(Liana)
Wushhh...
The bottom part of my feet lights up with blue flames and...
POOOWWW!
I propelled myself towards the incoming missiles...
As I got close, I swung my feet to the front and aimed my gun at the missile in front of me...
Buzz!BUZZ!
I then pulled the trigger...
POOOOWWWW!
BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!
The power of the Blast or dart isn't like the gun in Railgun form but it is still able to penetrate anything in its path...
I saw five missiles exploding in front of me as they were hit by the dart, afterwards, the dart went into a building leaving a Crater as it impacted...
The cylinder rotated as it reloaded another dart...
Pussss...
Pussss...
I looked to the side and found more missiles coming at me...
I aim my gun there and pull the trigger...
POOOWWW!
BOOM!BOOM!
Wwuuuussshhhhhh....
The missiles exploded as the wind from somewhere flows past me...
I looked to the other side and saw some missiles flying towards me in the distance...
Buzz!Buzz!
Clachik!
As the cylinder finished rotating, I aimed my gun at it and pulled the trigger...
POOWWW!
boom!boom!
The Dart hit the missiles it explodes...
I looked around and I saw no missiles for now...
Wuussshhh....
While the wind blew against me in my free fall, I steadied myself as I saw a building in front of me...
Plaching!...
Puuussssshhh......
I open the breech and looked at the cylinder...
The hole is even smaller than before...
But that's natural since it folded into a handgun...
Now it's the size of a regular rifle bullet...
I made more darts, put them in, and close the breech...
Clachik!
BUZZ!BUZZ!
Well, now that is done...
I aim my gun at the building in front of me and pulled the trigger...
POOOWWWWWW!
The Dart shot out and penetrated the building, leaving a hole and a crater behind...
The hole is big enough for me to go through...
I brace myself and enter the hole in the building...
Wwuussshhh!wushhhh!wusshhh!
Buzz!buzz!buzz!
I can hear sounds inside the building...
Like blue particles and electricity...
Well, the building seems quite big...
Anyway...
"Um, Eli? You haven't been talking until now... Are you okay?"(Liana)
[...um... What am I supposed to say? you don't even need my help at all... You pretty much just did everything yourself without me...](Elizabeth)
Eli looked at me with a dejected face...
Okay, now I feel bad...
I looked in front and see the end of the hole in the distance...
Looks like it's going to be hectic again...
I looked at Eli...
"Hey don't be like that... Eli, can you help me with some coordinates to get to him?"(Liana)
[Him?... Oh! Yes, I can! Leave it to me!](Elizabeth)
Eli put her hand in her chest with a happy face...
Well, that's more like it!...
I looked in front as I exited the hole...
What greeted me was a wave of missiles and bullets flying my way...
"Eli!?"(Liana)
[Ah! Use the debris over there as cover Lia! You should be able to use it to your advantage!](Elizabeth)
I saw the debris and propelled myself there...
Piussss!
Piuusss!
As the missiles followed me, they hit the debris and exploded into millions of pieces which made a cloud of dust around me...
I use that to my advantage and dash forward...
Cling!cling!cling!
I looked at my right hand as the glowing claw formed on my right hand again...
Tiiinnn....
My red right eye began to glow as the claw reattached a little further back...
I stretched my right hand behind me and...
Swung it forward...
SWING!....
PIUSSS!
PIUSSS!
PIUSSS!
The claw came out and flew like a boomerang...
Wushwushwushwushwush!
Wushwushwushwushwush!
Wushwushwushwushwush!
Slice!BOOM!Slice!BOOM!Slice!BOOM! Slice!Boom!slice!boom!
The flying claws sliced the missiles into two and continue to slice more missiles...
Leaving behind a chain of explosions as it flew around the place...
["Woah..."](Liana & Elizabeth)
Okay, I didn't notice that the claws can do that...
I just somehow knew and just did it...
Well anyway...
I looked at my right hand...
The two small ones started moving to the front of my hand and...
Pachus!PACHUS!
BUUSSSSSHHHHHhhhhhhh.....
A Lazer sword came out...
It is as wide as my palm and as long as my feet...
Well, this is something...
BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!
I heard and saw an explosion somewhere in my view but it seems different...
I looked over there and saw three red fireworks exploding in the distance?...
[Ah... Lia, I think that was the aftermath from the claws you shot out?](Elizabeth)
Oh, so it exploded after some time...
I'll take a note about that...
I looked in front again and saw a lot of bullets flying towards me...
Wuunnggg....
I looked at my Lazer Sword and swung it right as the bullets flew at me...
Piussh!piussh!puing!piinnng!
As the bullet made contact with the Lazer Sword it melted into hot molten metal...
Ping!plang!pang!piussh!plang!pang!
I evaded some bullets while I swung my Lazer Sword around me...
Some bullets nearly hit me, causing my skill to immediately activate...
I used that time to slice more bullets that were coming at me...
[Lia more missiles coming your way!](Elizabeth)
I looked at the Giant Mech and saw it firing more missiles again...
BOOM!BOOM!PIUSS!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!
Piuusssss....
Piuusssss....
Piuusssss....
I take a deep breath...
Seems like I'm going to have to deal with the missiles the hard way...
"[Jet!]"(Liana)
[Woah Woah Woah!? What are you doing Lia!?](Elizabeth)
I dash my way to the nearest missile I move my legs to the front and...
Tap!...
Gently put my feet at the nose of the missile and then...
BANG!piuuuusssss........BOOOOM!
I kicked it to the side!...
The missile did a couple of spins before hitting a building in the distance and exploded...
I looked around and saw another missile flying towards me I turned my body to the side and swung my Lazer Sword at it...
Wooonng!SWING!........BOOOOM!
The missile was cut in two and exploded behind me...
Clachik!BUZZ!buzz!
I moved my left hand and aimed my gun at the missiles in front of me and pulled the trigger...
POOOOWW!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!
The remaining missiles explode as I then propelled myself out of there and landed on a building near me...
Step!...
I looked in front of me...
TIIIINNNGGGG......
The falling building was moving straight at where the Giant Mech is...
I take a running position...
Gratak!gratak!....
I saw its flaks aiming at me...
I gripped my gun and stretch my Lazer sword to the front...
Clachik!plang!pachang!
The gun started turning into its original Railgun form...
Step!...
[Lia, you're seriously going to do that?](Elizabeth)
I look at Eli and smile...
Eli just let out a deep breath at me...
[This is going to be hectic... I'm grabbing my popcorn...](Elizabeth)
Platak...
Okay...
Let's just forget what Eli said at the end...
I looked at the Giant Mech...
And...
"[Dash!]"(Liana)
BUSSSSHHH!.....
BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!
PACHUSSSSSS!....
PACHUSSSSSS!....
PACHUSSSSSS!....
I dash my way through the raining bullets and missiles...
I did a zig-zag and I did an acrobatics stunt...
I'm pretty much just testing out my sturdy body and it's quite flexible...
WUUUSHHH!
"Whups!"(Liana)
Piuusssss......BOOOM!
I did a slide and evaded a missile coming towards me...
I also used my time slowing skill so that I can quickly move to the edge of the building...
{AGH!!! DIE! DIE! DIE! DIE! ALREADY!?}(O)
BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!
TIIIIIINNNGGGGGG!
I saw the Giant Mech stretch its right arm that still had the sword at a thrusting angle...
CLACHIK!BUZZ!BUZZ!PACHUS!PACHUS!
I looked at the gun and it just finished turning back into the Railgun...
I aim my Railgun to the front...
And swing my Lazer Sword to the right...
BUZZ!BUZZ!BUZZ!
The crosshair appears on my screen and I started aiming...
As I finally made it to the edge of the building...
The building was right in front of the Giant Mech...
TIIINNGG!
WUUUUSSSSSHHHH!
The Mech thrust its sword at me as I pulled the trigger...
Click!....POOOOOWWWWWWWW!
PIIIIIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNN!!!
The Dart hit the tip of the sword and then...
CRACCCCCKKKKK!
Made a giant crack on the sword until it reaches the Handel...
It didn't break the sword but it still damaged it greatly...
The Giant Mech didn't care though and kept thrusting the sword at me...
Clachik!pachang!pang!
As the sword kept coming closer and closer to me...
The Railgun on my hand turned into a handgun...
And I swing my sword to the front into a thrusting position...
"Ha.......hah"(Liana)
I took a deep breath as the giant Sword was a couple of feet in front of me and...
PACHIIIIIIIIIIIIIIINNNGGG!SWING!PIIIIICCCCCCCCHHHHHHHHHH!
Step!step!STEP!STEP!STEP!
I swing my Lazer sword to the left and the giant sword completely missed me and I am now running on the broad side of the giant sword while dragging my Lazer Sword...
CRACK!CRASH!CRASH!CRASH!
While also breaking the giant sword! I kept running forward towards the Giant Mech chest!...
CHIIIIIIIIIIIIIII!
BREAK!CREAAAK!CRASH!
Halfway through and I saw the Flaks aiming at me...
Like I would let you hit me!...
"[Dash!](Liana)
CHHHHHHHIIIIIII!
BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!BOOM!
BANG!CRACK!POOWW!BOOM!
Faster...
Just a little faster...
Running and running...
I'm getting closer to the cockpit...
WOOOONNNGGG....
Buzz!BUZZ!
The sword and gun in my hands started lighting up...
I arrived at where the handle of the sword was...
Crick!CRACK!
I then focused all my energy on my legs, making a big crack on the giant Sword...
I looked at where the cockpit it...
And...
SWING!....CRASH!
I jump from where I was, leaving a broken sword behind me as I brought my Lazer sword to the front in a thrusting position...
And...
"....[JET!]"(Liana)
POOOWWW!
Propelled myself like an arrow straight through its chest where the cockpit is!....
"HAAAAAA!"(Liana)
BOOOOOM!
Checkmate...
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[Third person POV]
In the cockpit...
"Why...why can't you just die already!?"(O)
PUING!PUING!PUING!PUING!
alarms sounded everywhere in the cockpit...
PIPIPIPIPIPIPIPIPIP!
"Hm?"(O)
O looked at the screen and then...
BOOOOOOOOOOM!!!!!!!
"UGAAAAH!"(O)
O was sent flying to the back of the cockpit as everything exploded in front of him...
BOOM!BOOM!BOOOOOOM!
Pachusss!PACHING!PACHUS!PACHUS!BUZZ!BUZZ!
O looked to the front...
the smokes were blocking his view...
PUING!PUING!PUING!PUING!
He only saw the flashing red light in the smoke...
And a figure slowly getting up...
"HM!"(O)
O stretched his left arm high and scraps of metal near him began to levitate...
He then pointed his hand toward the figure...
And all the scrap flew towards the figure...
WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!WUSH!
As the last piece of scrap flew, O's hand dropped to the ground as he silently stared at the figure in the smoke...
Step...step...step...step
He can hear every step it made...
Close and close until...
Step..step..step.....
He finally saw it...
The kid he wants dead is right in front of him...
"Hehe...hahaha...HAHAHAHAHAHhahahahahahahaha......."(O)
"... What's so funny?"(Liana)
Liana looked at O on the ground looking at her...
"Hihihi.... I was just talking to my self~... To think me of all people was defeated by a kid of all things...hahahahahahaha! Cough!* Cough!* cough!*"(O)
Liana just stared at him...
"Well, you win KID! Haha... I got nothing else"(O)
"..."(Liana)
Clachik!...
Liana aimed her gun at O's face...
"Woah spicy ay?"(O)
"..."(Liana)
"Hehehe well tell you what? I will answer any of your questions, how about that?"(O)
"......."(Liana)
"Not a joke here~"(O)
O raise his hand up...
"...... What happened to Aina?"(Liana)
"Aina? Who is that?....."(O)
".... Echo's daughter...."(Liana)
"OH! That little girl? Well... I don't know~"(O)
"What?"(Liana)
"I didn't know what happen to her~ and that was such a long time ago! I just send that kid to my boss~ what they do to her isn't my problem~ I don't know what they did to her anyway! Maybe... oh! maybe she's already-"(O)
POOOOW!
"AGH! Sun of a!"(O)
Liana shot O's foot with her gun...
The dart tore through O's foot and left a small Hole I the floor...
Blood pouring out from his open wound...
"Hahahaha well, I tried being nice KID!"(O)
Suddenly O's mask began to glow and...
PUING!PUING!PUING!PUING!
Alarms went off inside the cockpit...
Liana looked around and then saw a red screen popping up behind her and there's a timer counting down on the screen...
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
[Core self destruct sequence activated]
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
[Time remaining two minutes]
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
"You got to be joking!?"(Liana)
Liana looked at O again and saw a gun aiming at her...
Now it's a standoff...
Liana's gun was still aiming at O's head and O's gun was aiming at Liana's head...
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
"Hahahahaha! Give it up KID! If I'm going down here then I'm dragging you with me! The explosion will destroy this city and EVERYTHING AROUND IT! There's no way you can survive KID!"(O)
With everything as crazy as it possibly gets, Liana slowly narrowed her eyes...
Then...
"Hehehe..."(Liana)
"Hm? What's So FUNNY!?"(O)
Liana laughed a bit then looked at O...
"Haha...well it's just amazing that you go that far just to kill a little kid like me"(Liana)
She smiled at O...
"It's already overkilled enough attacking me with your Giant Mech now you're sending a nuke at me? hehe..."(Liana)
"Compared to the others... this is the easiest way to finish things off right?"(O)
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
[One minute till detonation]
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Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
Puuuuuiiiinnggg!
Liana looked at O and then looked at Elizabeth in her view...
Elizabeth also looked at Liana with a worried face...
[Are you Sure you are going to do it?](Elizabeth)
Liana just keeps on smiling...
Little did O know Liana was talking to Elizabeth about something behind his back...
"Well... There's no way I'm going to die that easily anyway~"(Liana)
"You are not even cowering?... Even knowing that we're going to die?"(O)
"Hehe... If you think I'm going to die because you're sending a nuke at me, think again"(Liana)
".......hehehe....HAHAHAHAHAHA!"(O)
O laughed out loud as he looked at Liana with his gun still aiming at her head...
"Tell you what kid? I'm very amazed..."(O)
Liana looked at O...
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"You are the craziest KID I ever faced in my whole Goddam career"(O)
"..."(Liana)
Clachik!
Clachik!
Liana and O steadied themselves with guns pointing at each other's heads...
"The craziest KID... But also the strongest KID I ever faced... I've never been so excited fighting someone till now you know~..."(O)
"..."(Liana)
"We'll tell you what? there is someone even stronger than me out there kid"(O)
"Hm?"(Liana)
"I was the top two on the whole team of ten... It's amazing how a little kid like you even beat me... But right now... You're still too weak to face him..."(O)
[10]
O snicker as he looked at Liana...
[9]
"Tell you what kid if you survive... You're going to become a hero you know?"(O)
"Well I'll definitely survive but... I don't think becoming a hero suits me..."(Liana)
"Hahahaha!..."
O laughed out loud as he heard Liana confession with his questions...
"I wonder what will happen in the future with you around kid!... Sadly I don't think I can see it... Well! shall we end this with a bang?"(O)
Liana and O looked at each other guns ready...
Liana laughed a bit at O...
"Hehe... Well...I can say you're right on one thing"(Liana)
"Hm? And what's that?"(O)
[5]
Liana smiled at O...
"Well after coming here..."(Liana)
[4]
"I won't blame myself"(Liana)
[3]
Cling!.....
[2]
The two of them looked at each other...
Guns aiming...
"If I become a little crazy right?"(Liana)
[1]
O slowly smile behind his mask...
As Liana and O pulled their perspective trigger at the same time...
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Thanks for the chapter!~
Whelped...
Whelp...
Falling down from the sky isn't as bad as I thought...
If there's no bullets flying all around me...
Falling down from the sky isn't as bad as I thought...
That is if there are no bullets flying all around me...
I saw alot of explosion near me...
alot => a lot
explosion => explosions
As I looked at a building it explode right in front of me!?...
explode => exploded
I crossed my hands and closed my eyes as I passed by the smoke from the explosion...
I passed by the smoke => I passed through the smoke
I look behind me and
look => looked
Building crumbling as it hit another building beside it...
A car exploding because of getting hit by some bullets...
And debris exploding into millions of pieces and flying everywhere hitting everything near it...
The building crumbled as it hit another building beside it...
A car explodes as a result of getting hit by some bullets...
And debris explode into millions of pieces that hit everything near it...
The bottom part of my foot light up With blue flames and...
foot => feet
With => with
I propelled my self towards
my self => myself
As I got close I swung my feet to the front and aimed my gun at the missile in front of me...
got close I swung => got close, I swung
The power of the Blast isn't like the Railgun form but it still able to penetrate anything in its path...
The power of the {blast or dart} isn't lime the gun in railgun form but it is still able to penetrate anything in its path...
I saw five missiles exploding in front of me as it hit the dart, afterwards the dart went through a building leaving a Crater as it impacted...
I saw five missile exploding in front of me as they were hit by the dart, afterwards the dart went into a building leaving a crater where it impacted...
The cylinder rotate as it reload another dart...
The cylinder rotated as it reloaded another dart...
I look to my other side and saw some missile flying towards me on the distance...
I looked to the other side and saw some missiles flying towards me in the distance...
As the cylinder finish rotating I aim my gun at it and pull the trigger...
As the cylinder finished rotated, I aimed my gun at it and pulled the trigger...
As the wind blows at me I steadied myself as I saw a building in front of me...
While the winds blew against me in my free fall, I steadied myself as I saw a building in front of me... {This edit makes the sentence make more sense.}
it folded in to a handgun...
in to => into
I made more darts and put it in and close the breech...
I made more darts, put them in, and closed the breech...
Well that's done...
Now I aim my gun at the building in front of me and pull the trigger...
Well now that is done...
I aim my gun at the building in front of me and pulled the trigger...
The Dart shoot out and penetrate the building leaving a hole and a crater behind...
The hole is big enough for me to go through so I take the shoot...
I brace myself and Enter the hole in the building...
The dart shot out and penetrated the building, leaving a hole and a crater behind...
The hole is big enough for me to go through...
I brace myself and entered the hole in the building...
What greet me was a wave of missiles and bullets flying my way...
greet => greeted
Use that debris over there as cover Lia!
that => the
As the missiles followed me it hit the debris and it exploded into millions of pieces while also making a cloud of dust around me...
As the missiles followed me, they hit the debris and exploded into millions of pieces which made a cloud of dust around me...
My red right eye glow as the claw reattached a little to the back...
My red right eye began to glow as the claw reattached a little further back...
I stretched my right hand behind me and...
Swing it to the front...
I stretched my right hand behind me and...
Swung it forward...
The claw came out and flew liked a boomerang...
liked => like
[quote]The flying claws slice the missiles into two as it hit another one and another one...[/quote]
The flying claws sliced the missiles in two and continued to slice more missiles...
[quote]Leaving a chain of explosion behind as it flew around the place...[/quote]
Leaving behind a chain of explosions as it flew around the place...
[quote]I heard an saw an explosion somewhere on my view but it seems different...
I looked there and saw three red fireworks exploding on the distance?...[/quote]
I heard and saw an explosion somewhere in my view but it seems different...
I looked over there and saw three red fireworks exploding in the distance?...
[quote]the claws you shoot out?[/quote]
shoot => shot
[quote]I looked at my Lazer Sword and swings it right as the bullets flew right at me...[/quote]
swings => swung
flew right at me... => flew at me
[quote]I evading some bullets as I swing my Lazer Sword around me...
Some bullets nearly hit me and it immediately active my skill...
I used that time to sliced more bullets coming at me...[/quote]
I evaded some bullets while I swung my Lazer Sword around me...
Some bullets nearly hit me, causing my skill to immediately activate...
I used that time to slice more bullets that were coming at me...
[quote]The missile did a couple of spins before hitting a building on the distance and explode...[/quote]
on => in
explode => exploding
[quote]I turned my body to the side and swing my Lazer Sword at it...[/quote]
swing => swung
[quote]The missile was cut in two and explode behind me...[/quote]
explode => exploded
[quote]I stretched my left hand and aim my gun at the missiles in front of me and pulled the trigger...[/quote]
stretched => moved
and aim my gun => and aimed my gun
[quote]The gun started turning in to it's original Railgun form...[/quote]
in to => into
[quote]Lia your serious going to do that?[/quote]
Lia, you're seriously going to do that?
[quote]I did a slide and evade a missile coming towards me...[/quote]
evade => evaded
[quote]I also use my time slowing skill[/quote]
use => used
[quote]that still have the sword on a thrusting angle...[/quote]
have => had
on => at
[quote]Made a giant crack on the sword till it reach the Handel...[/quote]
Made a giant crack on the sword until it reached the handle...
[quote]It didn't break the sword but still damage it greatly...[/quote]
but still damage => but it still damaged
[quote]The Giant Mech though didn't care and keep thrusting the sword at me...[/quote]
The Giant Mech didn't care though and kept thrusting the sword at me...
[quote]I take a deep breath as the giant Sword was a couple of feet's in front of me and...[/quote]
I took a deep breath as the giant sword was a couple of feet in front of me and...
[quote]Haft way through and I saw the Flaks aiming at me...[/quote]
Haft way => Half way
[quote]Well like I let you hit me!...[/quote]
Like I would let you hit me!...
[quote]I then focus all my energy into my legs and made a big crack on the giant Sword...[/quote]
focus => focused
legs and made a big crack => legs, making a big crack
[quote]I jump from where I was leav a brok sword behind and swinging my Lazer sword to the front in to a thrusting position...[/quote]
I jumped from where I was, leaving a broken sword behind me as I brought my laser sword to the front in a thrusting position...
[quote]On the cockpit...[/quote]
On => In
[quote]"Why...why can you just die already!?"(O)[/quote]
can => can't
[quote]alarmed sounded everywhere on the cockpit...[/quote]
alarms sounded everywhere in the cockpit...
[quote]as everything explode in front of him...[/quote]
as everything exploded in front of him...
[quote]the smokes are blocking his view...[/quote]
the smoke was blocking his view...
[quote]He only saw the flickering red light on the smoke...[/quote]
He only saw the flashing red lights in the smoke... {makes more sense since the alarms are going off rather than a single alarm}
[quote]O stretch his left arm high and every scraps of metal near him levitate...
He then stretch his hand toward the figure...
And every scraps flew towards the figure...[/quote]
O stretched his left arm high and scraps of metal near him began to levitate...
He then pointed his hand toward the figure...
And all the scrap flew towards the figure...
[quote]As the last piece flew O's hand drop to the ground as he silently looked at the figure in the smoke...[/quote]
As the last piece of scrap flew, O's hand dropped to the ground as he silently stared at the figure in the smoke...
[quote]Liana just stare at him...[/quote]
stare => stared
[quote]Liana stretch her gun and aimed at O's face...[/quote]
Liana aimed her gun at O's face...
[quote] I can answer any of your questions what about that?[/quote]
I will answer any of your questions, how about that?
[quote]Liana shoot O's feet with her gun...
It tore O's feet off as the Dart left a small Hole on the floor...[/quote]
Liana shot O's foot with her gun...
The dart tore through O's foot and left a small hole in the floor...
[quote]"Hahahaha well I try being nice KID!"(O)[/quote]
try => tried
[quote]Suddenly O's mask glow and...[/quote]
Suddenly O's mask began to glow and...
[quote]An alarms came off inside the cockpit...[/quote]
Alarms went off inside the cockpit...
[quote]As crazy as everything can get Liana slowly narrow her eyes...[/quote]
With everything as crazy as it could possibly get, Liana slowly narrowed her eyes...
[quote]now your sending a nuke at me?[/quote]
your => you're
[quote]this is the easiest way to finished things off right?[/quote]
finished => finish
[quote][Are you Shure your going to do it?](Elizabeth)[/quote]
Shure your => sure you are
[quote]"Hehe... If you think I'm going to die because your sending a nuke at me think again"(Liana)[/quote]
"Hehe... If you think I'm going to die because you're sending a nuke at me, think again"(Liana)
[quote]"Your the most craziest KID I ever face in my whole entire career"(O)[/quote]
"You are the most craziest KID I ever faced in my whole entire career"(O)
[quote]Liana and O steadied them self with guns pointing at each head...[/quote]
them self => themselves
at each head... => at each other's head...
[quote]there is someone even stronger then me out there kid[/quote]
then => than
[quote]Your still to weak to face him..."([/quote]
Your => You're
[quote]"Tell you what kid if you survived... Your going to become a hero you know?"(O)[/quote]
survived => survive
Your => You're
[quote]I can say your right on one thing[/quote]
your => you're
[quote]Liana smile at O...[/quote]
smiled => smiled
{Have a special of a cookie, popcorn, melon, and a pizza}
Great new homework to fix thx
is O dead yet?
also:
I never been
suggestion:
I -> I've
I -> I have
there someone even stronger
there is someone even stronger
a hero suit me
suit -> suits
Well can only know next chapter? I this he got hit point blank in the head with a mini Railgun....
part 2:
and close my eyes
close -> closed
alot of mayhem
(mayhem can't be counted)
suggestion:
complete mayhem
absolute mayhem
very chaotic
feet's
feet's -> foot's
What comes out from it's feet's are missiles...
suggestion:
missiles came out of it's foot
what came out of the opening were missiles
missiles flew out of it's foot
feet's
(same as before)
feet -> foot
swing
swing -> swung
I then pull the trigger
pull -> pulled
I saw five missiles explode in front of me as it hit the Dart as it then hit a building and made a hole and a crater...
explode -> exploding
suggestion: as it hit the Dart as it then hit a building and made a hole and a crater -> as it hit the dart, afterwards the dart went through a building leaving a crater as it impacted
(ok, craters are different then holes, mainly due to craters being formed by impact and holes are by the dictionary definition "a place or position that needs to be filled because someone or something is no longer there.")
(to leave a crater means that the dart stopped in the building
I look to the side
look-> looked
everything your self without me
your self -> yourself
[Ah! Use that debris over there as cover Eli! You should be able to use it to your advantage!](Elizabeth)
(made me laugh) (no hard feelings)
Eli -> Lia
I heard explosion right in front of me
i heard an explosion
@DanNepZen Suggestion :
Well, we will know next chapter. He was hit point blank in the head with a mini railgun...
@DanNepZen after this whole chase to beat O, I can conclude that he might have plot armour
@iamchangingthissoon thanks and I am embarrassed with my bad writing and grammar in English...
@DanNepZen don't worry, it cracks me up sometimes (no offence)(Eli calling for herself was weird and funny)
@iamchangingthissoon I might actually write that in the future for reference