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Sooooo I'm not at all used to writing action. Despite most of my stories having it...
I feel as if I'm Just the Guard! has...fallen off a bit, if you know what I'm saying. Maybe I'm just being a bit too critical of my work, but I'd like to know your opinions.
How are my fight scenes?
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Awesome! The best! Everything you do is amazing! Votes: 5 11.1%
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Eh. They're decent. Could use some work though. Votes: 28 62.2%
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Fight scenes? What fight scenes? It's just characters slapping each other with sharp sticks! Votes: 3 6.7%
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Don't ask me these things... Votes: 9 20.0%
Total voters: 45 · This poll was closed on Jul 3, 2020 06:13 PM.
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nice.
nice.
I like the fights
I quite like the descriptiveness of the fight scenes, but it appears I’m a minority
I almost feel like they're too in depth. You don't have to describe every twist and turn of the spear for every fight tbh.
Huh. Thanks for the feedback.
@The3Crimson3Kane I think it's a good thing early on in the book as Mr guard is adjusting to learning to fight and stuff, but it would be good to slightly blur the fights as he gains experience and skills. Usually in similar training type situations in other stories you'd see more detailed descriptions of cultivating, practicing, fighting, etc as the MC starts gaining understanding and then phase into merely mentioning what happens as the process becomes unconscious for both the MC and the readers.
Of course this varies between stories, writing style of author, etc but you wouldn't see a description of Superman's thought process of knowing to activate his flight, then use his laser eyes to destroy some concrete in episode 999 of a comic, for example. There's a sense of progression as the MC learns their abilities, basically.
There is also a high chance I'm talking out of my ass but I personally would get a little bored if the fight scenes end up written the same way 50 chapters later when the enemies are +20 levels and Mr guard skills are replaced with better ones.
That aside, I really do like the concept of the novel. I think the fourth wall-ish aspect of the hacker perspective is just within being not cringe, but having a respawning guard learning to defend this lvl 1 tutorial fortress is a concept I haven't seen before. Fun to read and I hope the chapters keep coming . Good work Mr crimson
@PaleWaffle Thank you for the feedback!
@The3Crimson3Kane not to turbo spam your chapter but I want to elaborate a little on my last point. It is a little bit jarring to swap between the guard trying to get an understanding of his surroundings and the hacker, who is casually enabling sentience to try and flex on his hacker friends. A bit more backstory of the hacker or something to kind of, flesh out that character would help I think.
In the end of the day though I'm some random guy on the internet. You should take opinions with a grain of salt, including my own. The story will turn out better if you write what you want to and enjoy writing compared to if you try to please every anonymous347 who has an opinion on the story. There's already that other guy who said he enjoys the detail of the fights. Vocal minority will not represent the majority of the people who simply enjoy reading the story.
I think I have lost track of what I was trying to say at some point. In, summary, there is a reason this story is #1 weekly trending.
@PaleWaffle It's cuz I post a lot. :/
But thanks anyway.