
Yang Feng watched on with his spiritual sense from a hidden part of the sect in boredom. He had seen this scene countless times.
The sect's annual recruitment process.
The bustling noises reminded him of when he himself first stood at the bottom of the gigantic stone stairs, awaiting the beginning of the ceremony. The teenagers, none older than the age of sixteen, stood nervously around, chatting with each other to dispel their turbid emotions.
Some of them would be accepted into the sect as outer disciples. A lucky few could probably even catch the eye of an elder and enjoy an easier life within the sect.
But most would not pass the recruitment process.
Yang Feng turned his attention elsewhere. He scanned the entire sect and sighed in reminiscence.
Thousands of mountain peaks stood high, each with its own collection of buildings and activities.
Countless disciples were cultivating, sparring, refining pills, or doing other acts that would further them on the road of cultivation.
But Yang Feng himself had already reached the end.
Reaching the Immortal God Emperor realm and becoming the respected supreme ancestor of the Great Heavens Sect, he had nothing more to accomplish.
All his enemies were dead, he had personally scattered their ashes to the winds. All his friends and companions were too, he had outlived every single one.
Now he was all alone, sitting on the cold throne of the world.
"Ancestor," a voice called out suddenly, distracting Yang Feng from his thoughts.
It was the Sect Leader, a man looking to be in his mid-30s but was actually tens of thousands of years old.
His name was Jian Song.
Yang Feng had watched him grow from a young teenager to the powerhouse that he is today.
"What's the matter?" Yang Feng sent a voice transmission to Jian Song.
"Elder Fan returned from her exploration of the secret realm and discovered an ancient relic."
Yang Feng frowned.
"Just this? I thought I told you not to disturb me over trivial matters."
Jian Song awkwardly laughed.
"We have no idea what it is, ancestor. The carvings on it are nothing like we've ever seen before. We tried to feed our qi into it, but it's like a bottomless well."
Yang Feng raised an eyebrow, intrigued.
"Bring it in."
Jian Song walked into the room, holding the relic. It appeared to be a black cube, coupled with strange markings and lines, faintly glowing white.
The markings appeared to be in another language, one that Yang Feng did not recognize.
Yang Feng was surprised. He had learned every single language under the Heavens, yet he had never seen this one.
Jian Song, noticing Yang Feng's interest in the cube, saluted and walked out of the room, leaving Yang Feng alone.
Yang Feng tried to decipher the markings, to no avail. The markings seemed to twist and turn, revealing new combinations every time.
He fed a little of his qi into the cube, for it to be absorbed completely.
"Oh?"
Even a tiny amount of his qi would normally overwhelm God-Grade spiritual weapons, yet the cube showed no reaction at all.
"Let's see how much you can handle."
The pressure in the room drastically deepened and the objects on a nearby table started rattling. A whirlwind of spiritual energy began converging around Yang Feng.
Torrential amounts of qi began to pour into the relic from Yang Feng's open palm.
The black cube showed no reaction at first, but after Yang Feng increased the pressure even more, it finally reacted.
The white markings on the cube began to squirm and merge together, forming words on the top and bottom of the cube.
These characters were in Yang Feng's native language, allowing him to read them.
The top part read:
REINCARNATION
While the bottom said:
SAVE US
One of the faces of the relic suddenly opened up and a bright light began to emanate from the inside.
Yang Feng tried to harness his qi to protect himself from the sudden attack, but found that he could not sense his qi.
Outside of his residence, dark clouds were forming and thick bolts of purple lightning flashed through the clouds. The daylight disappeared and it became pitch black.
The disciples watched on in fear and awe while the elders quickly took precautions.
"The Heavenly Dao?" Jian Song said, in quiet shock.
Back in his residence, Yang Feng realized what was happening.
The Heavenly Dao itself was restricting the flow of his qi.
"Even you cannot violate the fundamental laws set." Yang Feng said to the Heavens. "Or did you forget?"
The Heavenly Dao was not allowed to interfere with the actions and fate of its creations, otherwise it would suffer a severe backlash.
The lightning outside became more violent the harder Yang Feng struggled to move his qi.
Soon, the white light completely covered Yang Feng. The black cube dropped to the ground and slowly dissipated into nothing.
After the light slowly faded, Yang Feng was nowhere to be seen.
The dark clouds overhead dispersed and the daylight returned.
Somewhere in the Heavens, a sigh resounded.
excellent
Ok first thing first the plot is okay but the execution is falling short
The opening scene lacks a strong hook. It begins with Yang Feng watching a recruitment ceremony, which, while giving some background, does not provide an reason for readers to be invested. The protagonist is bored, but boredom is not a compelling emotional state for a lead character. The fact that he has already "seen this countless times" makes the reader question why they should care about this moment...
Maybe add some details like he could be casually predicting which students will succeed or mentally replaying past memories with a hint of melancholic longing.(The first time when he was a nervous young boy entering the sect)
Yang Feng sticking around the sect makes no sense. If he’s the strongest, why isn’t he off doing whatever he wants? Right now, it just feels like he’s there because the plot needs him to be, not because he has a real reason.
His boredom is also too basic. Just being "bored" isn’t interesting. If he’s really at the top, he should be dealing with something deeper—maybe he feels trapped, maybe he’s waiting for something, maybe he’s cursed and literally can’t leave. Anything would be better than him just sitting there for no reason.
The cube showing up should feel like a big deal, but since he doesn’t have any real struggles, it just comes off as a random event. If he actually had a reason for staying in the sect, the cube could feel like a turning point instead of just a way to move the plot forward.
To fix this, the story needs to give Yang Feng a solid reason for being stuck. Maybe he made an unbreakable promise, maybe something stronger than him is out there, or maybe reaching the top came with a price. That way, when the cube transports him, it actually matters instead of just being another thing he looks at out of boredom.
The main issue is Yang Feng’s character relying on the overused "bored peak cultivator" trope. Right now, he comes across as someone with nothing left to do, which makes him feel like a cut cardboard instead of making him purely indifferent, try giving him a deeper struggle that makes his journey into the new world feel more meaningful.
One way to do this is to shift his tone slightly—less of the detached "I’ve seen this before" attitude and more of an internal conflict about what it actually means to have reached the top.
1. The "I’ve Seen It All and I’m Sick of It" Problem
Yang Feng isn’t just bored—he’s done. He clawed his way up, crushed every obstacle, and now? Now he’s stuck watching a bunch of clueless kids trying to become the next big thing. It’s not tragic, it’s just... exhausting.
How to fix it:
- Instead of staring at the disciples like some wise old hermit, have him judge them.
"Look at them. So full of hope. In a few years, half of them will be dead, the other half will be washing dishes for the elders."
- When Jian Song shows up, his reaction shouldn’t be calm—it should be impatient.
"Please tell me this is actually important and not another ‘heavenly artifact’ that turns out to be a glorified rock."
- When the cube does something unexpected, it’s not "curiosity" that kicks in—it’s the first genuine interest he’s felt in years.
2. The "I Had to Fight for Every Step" Problem
Yang Feng didn’t waltz his way to the top—he bled for it. Every victory was earned, every enemy was a real threat, and now? There’s no one left who can challenge him. That’s the real problem.
How to fix it:
- He doesn’t just "observe" the sect—he’s searching. Looking for someone, anyone, who actually has potential.
"Not a single one of these kids knows what real struggle looks like. Pathetic."
- When the relic absorbs his qi, he doesn’t get "intrigued"—he sees a challenge.
"Finally, something that doesn’t immediately break. Let’s push it and see what happens."
3. The "I Want Someone Worthy" Problem
Yang Feng isn’t just waiting around—he’s waiting for someone who actually gets it. Someone who can look at the world the way he does, who understands that strength isn’t just about power, but the struggle behind it.
How to fix it:
- His disappointment in the new disciples shouldn’t be passive—it should be personal.
"Back in my day, I’d have chewed these weaklings up and spit them out before breakfast."
- When the cube reacts, there should be a flicker of something he hasn’t felt in centuries—hope.
"Something out there still has secrets left to uncover. Maybe this won’t be a waste of time after all."
4. The "I Miss the Fight" Problem
Yang Feng won’t say it out loud, but the truth is, he doesn’t miss people—he misses the battle. The real, desperate fights where his life was actually on the line. Nothing in this world can give him that anymore.
How to fix it:
- Watching the disciples train shouldn’t just bore him—it should make his hands itch.
"If I stepped in, how long would they last? Five seconds? Maybe ten if I gave them a head start?"
- When the cube starts pulling him in, he doesn’t resist—because finally, finally, something is happening.
"Wherever this is taking me, it has to be more interesting than sitting here collecting dust."
Instead of making Yang Feng just another overpowered guy who’s "too strong to care," give him that edge—make him restless, impatient, a man who’s been waiting for a reason to move again. And when the cube gives him that chance? He’s not just going along with it. He’s more than happy to do so