Sorry Guys
My motivation for this project has been slipping, and I think that's reflected in the speed of my writing. The recent quality of my work has been slipping because of problems I've run into and seeing that has dulled down my motivation even more. I can't write on this project anymore.
But that doesn't mean that I'm giving up on it. I'm actually really excited to continue the story now that I've finished all the setup. But if there's one thing I've learned, it's that I need to pace my motivation. So I'll come back to this project once I've learned some things and have gained aa fresh perspective.
In the meantime, I'll be working on a different fanfiction project, voted on by my discord. It will be a lot more tame, constrained, and focused. It will be based on Rick Riordan's Universe and I will be using his books as a guide, not just for plot, but also style, Though I obviously won't copy him 1-to-1. The focus of this series will be taking what I've learned with this series and using it to create something unique without bashing my brains in like I've been doing recently.
Sorry for letting you guys down again. But hopefully you like the new project even better if you're interested in it. If you have any questions, comments, or concerns, I would love to hear them.
structure is key my man. structure is key. and having folks to hold you responsible.
once you start succeeding your motivation will kick up again.
just don't give up on what you want to do.
that path leads to depression, and i checked it out for you, aint worth it.
;-}
Yes, structure is key. Unfortunately, the Hero's Journey doesn't work with the goals of this project, nor does its derivatives.
So I've divided the story into stages, and some of my expirments with the structure have been less fruitfult than others.
@Horizon42 I think sometimes in the telling stories can evolve from the original concept and this isn't necessarily a bad thing. You should take some time and see how you can incorporate the growth of the main character and continue your tale. It's really one of the most enjoyable stories. I look forward to seeing what you come up with!
I still hold hope that this and your other story aren't dropped. Aaannyways Thanks for the story.
Thank you for all the hard work. I really enjoy this novel and I am super excited for the Rick Riordan one as he is one of my favorite authors. Keep up the good work and take as much time as you need.
Thanks.
Blob Neutral
I've seen this on webnovel, not sure if you gave permission to post there or not. Either way i just wanted to put this here in case you didn't. Here's the link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/%C3%B7horizon%C3%B7_22989064705463905
I give them spiritual permission. It's flattering that someoboy would want ro repost this.
@Horizon42 it's a good story it only makes sense
So this is isn't dropped? Good. Also, good luck on your next project by the way.
Nope, just a hiatus.
Thanks, the new project is already starting off much better than this one did. In my opinion at least.
@Horizon42 thank you for not dropping the story I love this story and I feel your pain about the block I hope to read more content for this story or just from you in general
@Helluvaday thanks
I think there was a fundamental flaw in the story, its like you tried to cram several arcs into one long arc when making marvel stories there is a lot going on practically everywhere, the mc did not get the chance o setup a base after entering and then it was breakneck speed after that, no down time no personal time just one thing after another and cortana wasn't really much help to the mc. His base still doesn't have anything really going on, and the MC powers make it kind of irelavent. Maybe sit down and rethink the story and make a rewrite? If your not happy with the direction find what your not happy with while reading it and then change it or take note and think how you would want. I really liked the mc crossing over bit but the body snatching was well the story got really weird really fast. I was still following till the part the MC sister raped him and the following Matt Murdoch chat. It seemed forced jarring and made me think it only worked because the author said so.
Perhaps the beginning was forced, but honestly, the first 10,000 words require suspension fo do belief on part of the readers.
My main problem with the story was adding enough foreshadowing so that things would feel natural even when there were suprises. I did layer too many arcs over eachother, but from the beginning, this story was about me trying to push the envelope. How does one write lots of characters and storylines in a short amount of space?
It's an excercise, not a work of art.
Moreeeeee
plssssssssss
When are you planning to continue the story?
Still hate the sister, i liked the mother in the revival chapter and then started disliking her the next one xD
You have a few grammatical errors here and there if you're planning to rewrite it in the future i would suggest using Grammarly or another spellchecker and/or editors.
The story is good but i rly dislike the incest plotline, even if technically he's not rly part of the family. The MC seems to have given up in the last few chapters he's letting his "property" decide how he's going to live his life, his AI is blocking his cards and stuff, his mother and sister manipulating and him and his girlfriend. His sister even blackmailed him at one point.
What did he rly get out of the whole "marriage" rituals and what did the girls get out of it? I feel like there should be a chapter between the last two, because you didn't explain what he got after the 8 hours with the girls, the "birthright" as you mentioned it. If i got it right with the ritual they are binding their body and soul to the MC? Do they die if he dies? Do they get power from him? Is there any real reason for a man with a logical and scientific thinking to do whatever he's doing instead of just saying f*ck you to his "sister" and "mother" and leaving?
His personality changed so much from the 1st few chapters to the latest one,he seems depressed enough to say "f*ck it i dont care about anything" and just die right there. He killed around 16 people and a few vamps, he is cruel enough to torture people for information, smart enough to build a dimensional bridge from scrap, has the smarts to get whatever he wants from people on a higher standing then him, he sees others as pawns, yet his sister and now mother easily manipulate him, why? He does have the memories from the old Tyler but as he said a few chapters ago that he is not him.
He wants power to survive the future but all we see him do is f*ck around, build a company that wont do sh*t if he can't survive, an ai that has some daddy issues (why couldn't you just make her normal I don't get it...), and waist time around instead of going on a mutant and other supernatural ability heist.
If you have time i suggest you reading this novel:
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/36420/the-fastest-man-alive/
It's rly simmular to yours and you might get a few ideas for the future from it.
Oh and i suggest adding a charm aura (or something) to the MC that attracts compatible females, as an explanation why he is attracting so many females. Cuz there is starting to be a lot of them and all we know is that they want to jump on his d*ck but we don't know why.
I'm currently working on a much more tame story with very different focuses. I'll continue this one when i get fare enough into the new one. This story really took a lot out of me towards the end.
Alot pf the story hasnt been so much about the MC, but setting up the relationships and circumstances so that I could really dig into the story. The mother is there for Nia, the marriage pact thing is for the harem more than it is for the MC.
The Mc has changed in a lot of ways. He came to this grieving and depressed under the assumption that he could live freely, but when he stopped grieving, he realized the place he is in is much worse. He's distressed and on edge. Honestly, it's my fault for not showing that more explicitly.
The reason every character is insane is due to the goals of this project. None of the vharavters are going to stay how they are.
This story was spawned from the problems I saw in the other marvel story.
Hopefully I come back to this story soon, I might make a few chapters here and there, hut there are some things I'm trying to learn first.
@ExoticSenta I've thought about it, but I usually found that explanation boring, so I'm pursuing a combination of softer explanations.
I do like the idea that his abilities affect his relationship with his current involvements though.
@Horizon42
1. Good to know your planning to continue it. All in all its not a bad story.
2. You do need some explanation, the cliché one from Japanese novels "i loved him before and im ok with a harem" or "he saved my life, now im his" is over played and just doesn't work. Example would be Liz, like ok we know she had a crush on the mc some time ago and that she had enough of her current life, but going into a magical marriage ritual for some MC d*ck is a bit much...
A pheromon wont work cuz he could smell it. So an aura might be the best choice. But it's all up to you.