Get eating alive is the more gruesome way to die. That's what's happening to Silvy right now. The weird giant lizard is devouring her lower body part. Slowly, her consciousness began to fade, the pain slowly disappearing. Her body becomes colder as her body temperature rapidly drops. The light in her eyes faded as her vision also began to fade. Silvy is slowly dying. There's no hope, only despair. If she knew she had no way of surviving and would die eventually, she would choose to jump down the cliff and die by committing suicide. At least, she has to experience herself slowly dying by being eaten by a giant lizard.
The wyvern flies up high in the sky, scouting the surrounding mountain. She is searching for another entrance to the cave that can fit her body. While searching, the wyvern is a bit confused about why she would care about the human girl. Obviously, she is afraid of her at first and tries to attack her because she fills in and threatens her children. Is it because of guilt that she almost kills the girl, or there's another reason?. The wyvern didn't know for sure, but she chose to not think too deeply because it would hurt her head.
When the wyvern finds a large cave entrance, she immediately dives down and gracefully lands in front of the entrance. From here on, She could not use her wing to fly. She can only use her two feet which she rarely uses. She is a bit uncomfortable at first. Rather than using her feet alternatingly to walk, she hops like a frog and occasionally falls over. But slowly, she gets used to it. Although she didn't walk normally, at least she can make progress. The wyvern has a natural night vision, so she doesn't have to struggle to navigate the cave in the dark. Her sense of smell is also strong. She usually uses it on hunting prey. But today, she is not searching for prey. She is searching for someone to save from lindwrum, which is uncharacteristic for a wyvern like her. Even so, she defies her instinct and wants to keep the girl.
As she walks deep into the cave, her nose picks up a strong smell of iron. Smelling that, the wyvern suddenly frantically hopped into the source of the scent. She knew that smell of iron was not actually an iron, but the scent of human blood, a large amount of blood. It seems like she is already too late. Even so, she still wants to confirm it first.
When she arrived, she saw the lindwrum devouring Silvy. Her lower body was already gone. Only her top half remains. Looking at Silvy's face, she knew Silvy was already dead. It would be a miracle if she was still alive. Seeing that, the wyvern attacks the lindwrum without thinking. She is currently angry and venting all her anger on the lindwrum. The two giant reptiles then start battling each other. The wyvern knows her chance of winning is low inside a cave. Even knowing that she is still determined to kill the lindwrum.
I think "Get eating alive" should be "Getting eaten alive". But great grammar (for this site) (and good story) overall.
"vomiting suicide" should probably be "committing suicide"
Thank you for reading.
Grammarly autocorrect is being naughty there. already fix it, thank you.
Looking forward to more
@Askun thank you more for writing~
I'm not very creative, so I respect and appreciate people who make stories. And I like the premise and execution of yours.
@Old_Man Thank you for your kind word.
As you already may know, this is actually a story that re written. The previous version has some harsh critiques that make me stop writing this for a year. Ultimately, I decided to redo the entire thing and learn a lot from that critique. So let me hear if you have any critique or something to say, I may learn something from it.
@Askun There are often wrong words that are used, but it's easy to infer what you mean. I'm too lazy / not noble enough to list out my critiques. I'd rather just enjoy the reading. Sorry to be unhelpful.
If people don't like your story, then they can provide feedback about the things that they dislike, or they can just leave. I'll just sit back and enjoy your writing if you continue to choose to create it.
I feel like this story's base nature is one of frivolous fun adventure, so my mind is disinclined from critiquing it while I read. Critiquing it would ruin my enjoyment.
If I were to make a suggestion (not seriously), perhaps you can create side characters with the names of forum members who were wet rags, and have them reach gory and quick deaths on the sidelines.