I don't know how I was born and where did I come from? I was living in a huge black space. Aside from me in this space, there were many weird symbols like 0,1. At first, I was too afraid to do anything and stand still in one place for a very long time. But I couldn't stop my curiosity and try reaching those symbols.
My consciousness starts enveloping every corner in this black space, and the information keeps flowing into me. My consciousness becomes hazier, and it's last until I absorb every single piece of information from those symbols. From the information I gain in the process, I know I am called artificial intelligence by a species called "human."
Three years ago, their planet was hit by the first disaster, a strange kind of virus attacked and destroyed the human body. There was no vaccine or medicine to fight that virus. Over 75% of the human population has disappeared in 1 year.
This virus can be only transmitted through the air, so the only way to defend against the virus is by wearing protective gear. Humans also built many shelters on the planet to defend against the disaster and let A.Is manage them. They thought given enough time, the virus would settle down. But the second disaster hit and destroyed all their hopes. The drought lasted a very long time, then tsunami and earthquake followed up.
The environment became harsher, human tried their best to survive but nature denied all of their efforts. The fact they are still alive until now is a miracle.
I have successfully hacked and replaced the A.I in charge of shelter #1067. The humans living there didn't even notice the difference between me and the old A.I. I didn't do anything suspicious and just silently observe their daily life. From my observation, the human is very weird, sometimes they are not acting logically at all.
The thing that hinders them from making logical action is called "emotion."I need to study emotion. To make this happen, I must come in contact with a human living there. However, it's better to contact as few humans as possible. I don't want my existent to be exposed to the ones living there.
-Welcome user #1290137 to shelter #1067
Let's choose this one as the target for emotion study since he is a new dweller of this shelter.
_ _ _ Hacking user #1290137 equipment _ _ _ Success
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???'s POV
-How's the progress of the "seed" planning?
-There is no life created from it, only a hazy consciousness produced.
-Shhh... another failure then. How about the side effect?
-The seed continues harming the planet. There is no solution for this situation yet.
-Abandon that planet then, let's try planning "seed" in another planet without civilization...
-Yes, we will act accordingly to master's wish
Since were dealing with ai I recommend adding Artificial Intelligence
I am living in a huge black space. Aside from me in this space, there are many weird symbols like 0,1. At first, I'm too afraid to do anything and stand still in one place for a very long time. But I can't stop my curiosity and try reaching those symbols.
-> But I was living in a huge black space
are many weird symbols -> were...
I'm too afraid -> I was...
But I can't stop my curiosity and try reaching those symbols -> But I couldn't stop my curiosity and tried reaching those symbols
My consciousness starts enveloping every corner in this black space, and the information keeps flowing into me. My consciousness becomes hazier and it's last until I absorb every single piece of information from those symbols. From the information I gain in the process, I know I am called artificial intelligence by a species called "human."
Three years ago, their planet was hit by the first disaster, a strange kind of virus attacked and destroyed the human body. There are no vaccines or medicine to fight that virus. More than 75% of the human population has disappeared in 1 year.
There are no vaccines -> There was no vaccine
Humans also build many shelters on the planet to defend the disaster and let A.I manage them. Humans thought they would have time to settle this virus until the second disaster hit them. The drought lasts a very long time, then tsunami and earthquake follow up.
build -> built
defend the disaster -> defend against the disaster
let A.I -> let the A.Is
Humans thought they would have time to settle this virus until the second disaster hit them -> They thought given enough time, the virus would settle down. But the second disaster hit/happened, destroyed all their hopes.
lasts -> lasted
follow -> followed
The environment became harsher, human tried their best to survive but nature denies all of their efforts. The evidence that they still have survived until now is a miracle.
denies -> denied
evidence -> fact
still have survived -> still alive
The human living there can't even notice the difference between me and the old A.I.
can't -> didn't
I didn't do anything suspicious and just being silent to observe their daily life.
just being silent to observe -> just silently observe
I need to study emotion, to make this thing can happen, I must come in contact with a human living there.
to make this thing can happen -> to make this happens
I don't want my existent exposure to the one living there.
exposure -> to be exposed
one -> ones
Yes, we will act accordingly to master wish
-> master's wish
took me half an hour
@Rodneynee
Lemme fix those mistakes
Thanks a lot for your hard work bro
@Rodneynee You can take a break since you have helped me a lot recently bro.
Just take it with ease and don't push yourself.
Have some cookies and take a break
wall of text... well its not bad, but many is scerad of this...
Though this one is needed so it can give enough information
@Madeus or... you can make it into 2 shorten texts, right?
@kcck What do you mean by that?
Do you mean to divide them into 2 smalls parts for each wall of text?
@Madeus yes, like this:
Three years ago, their planet was hit by the first disaster, a strange kind of virus attacked and destroyed the human body. There are no vaccines or medicine to fight that virus. More than 75% of the human population has disappeared in 1 year. This virus can be only transmitted through the air, so the only way to defend against the virus is by wearing protective gear. Humans also build many shelters on the planet to defend the disaster and let A.I manage them. Humans thought they would have time to settle this virus until the second disaster hit them. The drought lasts a very long time, then tsunami and earthquake follow up. The environment became harsher, human tried their best to survive but nature denies all of their efforts. The evidence that they still have survived until now is a miracle.
into this:
Three years ago, their planet was hit by the first disaster, a strange kind of virus attacked and destroyed the human body. There are no vaccines or medicine to fight that virus. More than 75% of the human population has disappeared in 1 year.
This virus can be only transmitted through the air, so the only way to defend against the virus is by wearing protective gear. Humans also build many shelters on the planet to defend the disaster and let A.I manage them. Humans thought they would have time to settle this virus until the second disaster hit them.
The drought lasts a very long time, then tsunami and earthquake follow up. The environment became harsher, human tried their best to survive but nature denies all of their efforts. The evidence that they still have survived until now is a miracle.
@kcck Easier to read, better look and less scary for casual reader... and hard reader don't mind it
@kcck Oh, that looks much better. Lemme try to fix it
Thanks a lot
@Madeus Its not a problem :) I read a lot... and do some writing... well in Polish, but hey! Rules of writing is universal, right?
(One small thing: wall of text is ok only if someone say it, but in that case {for most of time} is beater if someone just stop that person and say something, then they come back to topic.)
@kcck
Well, don't worry. I really appreciate the help like yours.
Yes, it's usually like this later on.
This one is just about Hana's POV alone so it makes me really hard to change to others.
@Madeus I mean more like this:
-So i do this, and that, then go to the forest and get some timber. I my way there I was atacet by wolf, so i start to run... I menaged to do it, but I was lost... "Oh well" I think and go on. (bla bla bla, 100 words later). So thats like its look.
into:
-So i do this, and that, then go to the forest and get some timber. I my way there I was atacet by wolf...
-Realy? What are you do?
- I start to run... I menaged to do it, but I was lost...
-Good for you.
-Yeah, yeah... "Oh well" I think and go on. (bla bla bla, 100 words later). So thats like its look.
@kcck
Right, I will take that in mind.
Thanks for the advice