Mia, Amy and I wake up after getting some sleep. When I look at them, I can see they are pretty worried about the gigantic shadow that we saw last night.
-Mia, Amy. (Farah)
Both of them cease what they are doing and look at me.
-Sister? (Mia)
-What's wrong, sister? (Amy)
-I think we should move from this place. It's possible that "thing" will appear here again. (Farah)
The twins agree with my statement. They help me tidy up the camping stuff. After finishing tidy everything, we move out to find a securer place.
-Hah~Hah. (Mia)
It has been three hours since we started walking to find a new camping site.
- I think we should take a brief break. (Farah)
-Uhm. (Mia)
I notice the atmosphere of these kids is still tense because of the appearance of the "thing" last night.
I go near the twins and hug them.
-Don't worry. If that thing appears again, I will hold it back while let you two escape. (Farah)
I expect Amy and Mia will become more positive if I said that. However, this is the reaction I receive from them. Mia puffs her cheek while saying to me.
-We will never leave you behind, sister (Mia)
Amy also starts sulking after I said that.
-We are not cowards, we won't leave sister behind. (Amy)
-Ehhh. (Farah)
It's unexpected to see them react like this since I thought they fear that "thing." I can only calm the twins down after a while, and we resume our journey. After we walk for another hour, I can see a black dot in the middle of the crimson field.
-Is that a cave? (Farah)
-How come there is a cave in the middle of nowhere, sister? (Amy)
I shake my head.
-Since we're heading in that direction, let's have a closer look at it. (Farah)
-All right, sister. (Amy)
We gradually walk closer to the black dot.
-It's really a cave, sister. (Mia)
-Hence, I'm not wrong after all. Let's have a look around the cave. I think we can find something useful here. (Farah)
We gradually approach the cave.
-The things on the ground are... (Amy)
-... (Mia)
There are many human skulls on the ground. It's like a massacre happening here. I instantly check the life signal in the cave. I'm worried the master of the cave was the "thing" last night.
-Don't worry. There is nothing alive inside the cave. (Farah)
-Ah. (Mia)
The twins can only feel relieved when I inform them that.
-Let's check on the cave. (Farah)
-Absolutely, sister. (Amy)
We go inside the cave to examine what is inside there.
-It's pretty spacious inside here, sister. (Amy)
-Uhm. (Farah)
When we look around, we discover a corpse that has lost its lower body.
-... (Farah)
-That's person suffers a tragic death. May he find salvation afterlife. (Amy)
When we are about to turn around and leave. A voice suddenly can be heard coming out of nowhere.
-What are those kids doing here? (???)
-Eh? (Farah)
We try looking around to find the owner of the voice.
-Ahhhhh! Sister, the corpse is talking. (Mia)
I turn around and see the corpse that lost half of its body opens its eyes and look at us. I directly command nanomachines to turn into guns and point at the corpse.
-Calm down, I won't attack you guys. (Corpse Guy)
The corpse points itself and said.
-And do you think I can attack you guys in this state? (Corpse Guy)
-It makes sense. (Amy)
I instantly remind Amy.
-Don't drop your guard, Amy. (Farah)
I stare at the corpse.
-Maybe he can use his hand and attack us if we come close enough. (Farah)
-Hey, I can't do that. (Corpse Guy)
The corpse utters a deep sigh.
-What if I tell you I am not a monster but a challenger of god trial like you? (Corpse Guy)
-How could it be? You can survive with a body like that if you are a normal person. (Farah)
-What if I tell you about this trial design that way? (Corpse Guy)
-Eh? (Farah)
-Our group has found some hints from the past challenger. (Corpse Guy)
The corpse seems to take a small notebook from his shirt pocket and throw it at us.
-Don't worry. It's just a diary of a past challenger in this trial. (Corpse Guy)
I open the small notebook and start reading it.
Day 1: We have arrived at the trial. A crimson colour dominates the space. The mission is different from what I expected. We can barely bring enough food for one week. The sole source of water that we can find is the crimson lake. Somehow, I get an eerie feeling from that lake.
Day 7: We are out of the water; we have no choice to drink the water from the lake. However, a few others and I refuse to drink that water.
Day 8: The fight happens between the group against drinking the water at the lake and the one who agrees to drink that lake's water. A miracle happens, the one who should be killed in the fight can still walk like normal. However, his pulse and heart stop. He has become something unusual and being chased out of the group.
Day 9: We experiment and see that the one who hasn't drunk the lake water can stay alive even after his body is dead. While the one who drinks the lake water can die like normal people. Therefore, our group starts to drink the water from the lake.
Day 11: I see many unusual things since I drink the water's lake. I think I become abnormal.
Day 13: Our food is going to run out.
Day 15: The corpse of the one drinking holy water disappears.
Day 17: Hungry. I find meat today.
Day 19: Nothing left to eat.
Day 23: The monster appears.
On day 23's page, there seem to be many blood covers on the page. When I thought the diary would end here. On the following page till the end of the diary, the word "dead" is written on the page. It's all written by the blood.
-Ah. (Mia)
Ah-> sigh... ( this should be the twins)
Don't worry. If that thing appears again, I will hold it back while letting you two escape. (Farah)
Oh, come on. Don't leave the kittens behind
Fix
There are many human skulls on the ground.
There are a lot of human skulls. Littered on the ground
It's like a massacre happening here.
It's like someone has committed a massacre here ( or you can just remove "here")
I'm worried the master of the cave was the "thing" last night.
I'm worried that the owner of the cave. Was the "thing" that appeared last night
-Don't worry. There is nothing alive inside the cave. (Farah)
Don't worry guys/sis. There's nothing inside the cave ( I recommend adding sis or guys in here since it is a casual conversation)
Thanks a lot ya~ I will fix them once I get back from work tmr. My 4g data is running out TvT
The twin agrees with my statement.
The twin -> the twins
I go near the twin and hug them.
the twin -> the twins
I can only calm the twin down after a while, and we resume our journey.
the twin -> the twins
It's like a group massacre happening here.
massacre itself is already mean an act of killing a lot of people so i don't think group is necessary here
The twin can only feel relieved when I inform them that.
The twin -> The twins
That's person suffers a tragic death. I hope his soul will sublime from this world. (Amy)
suffers -> suffered
So i did some research on 'sublime' and it only has two meanings from what i have found so far:
1.extremely good
2.the condition of becoming gas from solid without becoming liquid first
And from what i understand after reading your sentence, what you meant was 'wishing the deceased happiness in the after life' so 'May you find salvation' might be what you need. Though i'm not too sure.
Don't drop your ward, Amy. (Farah)
ward -> guard
Ward is not wrong, though i don't remember you mentioning Amy holding/using a ward so i can't say for sure
Oh, that sound much fit.
I search for sublime since I thought it's the word make the soul happy afterlife
lemme fix them
@Madeus you should use cambridge dictionary since word to word translation can be wrong from time to time
@Rodneynee Oh, all right. I will use it next time
Corpse Guy has become an undead, right?
Is he rotten, dry or mysteriously well preserved?
Thanks for the chapter
He is not undead; he is like to become immortal but can't rengen his body. It can be considered as a curse.
His wound has closed up, and he is not rotten
Thanks for the chapter. Why do i feel that the corpse is the one, who written journal? And he still want some meat?
No, he isn't. Since he is alive with half of the body. While the one who drinks the red water turns into a mutant while attacking others.
On the other hand, the one not drinking can survive no matter what, even when their heart already stops.
His story will be in the next chapter
Here's some of my quick fix
Foolish sister! We will never leave you and running by ourselves. (Mia)
We will nevel leave you behind!.
Or
We will not run away and leave you behind!
Adding more seems inappropriate.
How can we have a cave in the middle of nowhere, sister? (Amy)
How come there's a cave in a middle of nowhere, sis/sister?
It is possible that I'm wrong. Well, we can have a closer look since we are heading in that direction. (Farah)
Well, it's possible that I'm wrong but, let's have a closer look. Since we're also heading in that direction.
Well enough, sister. (Amy)
???
It's a cave, sister. (Mia)
It's really a cave sis/sister.
Let's check on the cave. (Farah)
Let's inspect it/ check it out.
I think you should add more context in here.
When we are trying to turn around and leave the cave, a voice suddenly comes out of nowhere.
When we are about to turn around and leave. A voice suddenly can be heard coming out of nowhere
Don't drop your ward, Amy. The monster never works according to your common senses. It is possible he can run fast using by using his hand only. (Farah)
Don't drop your guard, Amy
Hey, I absolutely can't do that. (Corps
Hey!, I can't do that!
Woah ., Thanks a lot bro
@Madeus welcome . Just read the sentence or paragraph first after grammarly fixed the mistakes. Sometimes the words in it can break the meaning of the sentence.
@Wkppp Ah, alright. I have fixed it by adding more context and make the convo less awkward. Thanks for the advice bro
Thanks for the chap!
Spooky! ~
And the grammar is killing me
Thanks for reading
And Grammarly said my essay is 99 pts aside from those advanced mistakes XD
Can You point out some for me? I try to have a look again and fix a few of it already.