After facing the realization that I am in fact a girl, I had to endure being cleaned by the doctor looking man while being watched by my father.
After being thoroughly cleaned, they gave me to my mom, who picked me up and said something. I really need to learn the language of this place.
My mom sang a lullaby for me to sleep again. She sounds as angelic as she looks. The sleepiness that had finished just a while ago came back. I felt my mom’s warmth until I fell into dreamland.
Sometime later, after waking up, I was concentrating on people’s conversation, trying my hardest to understand something. After a little while I realized my name is Oriel. At least that was the name they called when I cried.
That is a cute name, I approve of mom and dad.
While I was thinking, I noticed a new person had entered the room. It was a boy that looked to be about 6 years old, and he was practically screaming my name as he busted into the room.
After receiving a lecture from mom and dad, the boy sheepishly got near my cradle and looked at me. Inspecting him, I quickly noticed that we were related. He had the same gentle look of dad, but his eyes shined with youth, just like mom.
After excitedly talking about a bunch of stuff, dad calmed him down while mom looked with a gaze full of love. He was probably my brother. I don’t know anything about him, but he looks like the guy that is the definition of rightful knight.
Hopefully, he doesn’t cause too much trouble…
Agreed, good story but short chapters. If you're going for a kind of rapid release of short chapters to kinda emulate time passing so we pass the baby stage, that would be neat.
I am still trying to find balance in chapter length, but because there is a lot of things to show in the beggining I am trying to release a bunch of small chapters so I can move on with the story. But thanks for reading it and leaving feedback I was in need of it.
The story is good but I think the chapters are a bit to small. maybe longer release and we get a chapter a week or something like that
The newer chapters are longer, and the plan is to release them every other day. Thank you for reading <3
It is good but the chapters could be longer
Thanks for the feedback
it's now time for a baby, who has no active life, to use 100% of his woke time and speedrun learning languages.
Reach for Oniichan! Give him a reward by being cute! Do it!
The mc is named after architecture, don’t know if you knew that.
https://www.dictionary.com/browse/oriel
It was just a random name I used, but cool
Thanks for the chap!
Once again, another bland chapter. The same narration setting just like the first chapter. I have a suspicion, so I ask... are you writing extra words intentionally? Length of the chapters are obviously important, but it is also necessary to move the plot along. Clinging to boring things that can easily be fixed into 2~3 paragraphs is wasted effort for both the author and the readers. I sincerely hope you will keep this in mind.
It was not really long on purpose, I had a lot to learn at the time of writing this, I still need to learn a whole lot. Hopefully I improved as much as I think I did on the newer chapters
@topoko Is this your first time writing a story/book?
@Imagine-R yes, it is written in the description
@topoko I see... do forgive me. I must've glanced over it, but forgotten. What a blunder.