I slowly got up to the stage where Todoroki was waiting for me. I gave him a smirk causing him to scoff back at me. He then began talking before the match started. “You told him to say that, didn't you?” I shook my head at him as my smirk grew into a full on smile. “Nope… That is just who he is. That is why I will help him achieve his dream… Because I know that he is more deserving of the title then I ever will be.” He looked at me astonished at the thought of someone not wanting the top, but to help someone else get there. I smiled and laughed.
“C’mon what I did is not the actions of the truest hero. And I would do them again. Because I want to help people, but I’m not good enough to be the face of what heroes are. I know he has those qualifications, and I want to help him reach that summit, and become the side-kick of the next #1 hero!” Todoroki was still stunned.
‘That is a goal nobody has wanted, or even thought of. He wants to be a side-kick? The only people who would want to be side-kicks to others would be for two reasons. Mediocrity… Or The true, honest, and full belief that the party you're helping is going to be the greatest hero in the world. Will Midoriya really become the next symbol of peace?’ Todoroki looked into the stands to see everyone looking at Midoriya who was covering his reddened face.
The whole arena was murmuring. Mostly with questions of ‘Who we were talking about.’ But I didn’t care. This needed to be said, so All Might and the rest of the pro-hero’s know where I stand. Also for Todoroki to know who he is up against. That I want Midoriya to fulfil his destiny, and I will help him on every step of the way. Todoroki got out of his stupor. Just as ‘Midnight’ started the countdown.
“Both contestants ready? OK! 3… 2… 1… GO!” As soon as she started the match Todoroki launched ice in my direction. It was trying to grab my feet. “2nd Gear!” ‘I can’t use too much charge before I may need it so this is good enough for now.’ I jumped over the ice and ran around it to meet up with Todoroki. Getting close I tried to grab onto him only to have ice push me back. Making distance I took a breath and collected myself. ‘The stage is getting frozen over. I will lose a game of attrition. I need to end this fast.’ My thoughts were cut from a question coming from across the stage. “Why aren’t you using your overdrive?” I smiled, “Why aren’t you using your left? I won’t be serious if you don't return the favor!”
He was stunned… As if realizing what it felt like to know that your opponent wasn’t trying their hardest. I continued to push him. “I’m a little like you. Thrust with a power I didn’t exactly want, yet having to use it in order to achieve my goals.” He had a look of disbelief on his face. “It’s true that sometimes I would rather not have had it… But since I do, I’m going to make the most of it! To help those in need, and to help my family make their dreams become a reality!”
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Don't really like how mc constantly downplays himself and treats himself like he's worthless....
Thats just how some people are. I guess if you never went through it, it is hard to understand why someone can have this mentality. Izuku also suffered from this, but he slowly recovered. Mc is caring for others, but to help him out if this mindset, he needs someone to care for him. Izuku had All might, then people like the Mc and Uraraka. But Mc has nobody yet really getting past his defenses to help him.
Ok I love this story truly but you are making the mc way to much of a stepping stone for midori he could do alot more as a hero than a sidekick for midori and you really need to get mc some help reading his constant outbursts while yes part of the downside of his quirk is as bad only because he is a bit*h about getting help at this point he will either die or have emotional out urt more often as he leaves it to fester
lol midoriya is embarrassed (rly cute how kaminari treats him like his little bro)
Becoming #1 With Stun-Gun Hero!!. Shouldn't there be Becoming #1 "sidekick"? In the title. I bet half wouldn't even read past this chapter with that title lol.
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This might sound a bit random, but I think overall, your writing has way more 'push' than 'pull' dialogue and character wise. In my experience, layering heartfelt and honest emotion next to playful banter, humor, casual characterization, and less serious matters, tends to make the emotional moments stand out better.
It's not that you have zero 'pull', thankfully, it just feels very little compared to the 'push'. I say push and pull, because that analogy relates to a ton of writing concepts, like conflict, battles, exposition/lore, power creep, and as I said, character.
Just my two cents on the series so far. Thankyou for writing!
Thank you for the advice! I'll go look up the concept, and see how well I can use it.
@Calvin_Waterson Ah, you might not find too much in the way that I phrased it then. You’ll probably find a bunch of Fight Scene advice instead.
I actually took the advice from a YouTuber named Etika when he was giving relationship advice. I just applied the same concept he talked about to writing, and found that it worked really well for me!
In all honesty, mc might be thinking, like hell i would deal with one for all, thats why he pushes midoriya, i would do that aswell.