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Arc I Prologue
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One day, she awoke from her dreams and found herself ...
Well, that was the question.
It was a simple question, just three simple words, where was she? But she didn't have an answer. The universe remained silent and fate was a cruel master indeed. They both ignored her.
She didn't expect that she would end up in a situation like this, but she did. And now she was here, wherever here might be. Whether this was heaven, or hell, she couldn't tell. So far both was possible, and it didn't make much of a difference. This place was terrible either way.
What she knew was that she was most likely deader than dead. And she knew what brought her here, or rather what got her killed.
Not that she would tell, but to make a long story short, she bit more than she could chew. It wasn't the first time. This time, however, the consequences were lethal. Many enemies, much honour. Too many enemies, too much honour.
She had got surrounded and that was the end of the story. Such things happen, even to the best.
But in her defence, the enemy cheated. They used space-time magic shenanigans, which for some reason worked. Usually, they backfire, but not this time. The magic worked much to her displeasure.
And that was how the sly bastards killed her. Now she was here, trapped in a limbo, waiting for something to happen ...
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What was this? Some kind of force ... pushed her?
She approached something bright, a blinding light in the darkness of boredom and monotony.
Was this her salvation? Was this the light she had yearned for? Was this the moment she had waited for so long?
It didn't matter. She grasped for the light. She had nothing to lose.
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A new sensation crawled over her unprotected skin. It was a frigid, uncaring and merciless coldness that invaded her weak body.
Her body shivered, and she missed the ever-present warmth she was ripped apart from with brutality.
She longed for the missing warmth, in vain. The warmth would never return.
She felt alone, alone in a hostile, unforgiving, frozen world.
Contrary to her expectations, she was still alive. Apparently, even dying was a surprisingly unreliable affair. She should have died, but she didn't. Instead, she survived.
Life never failed to surprise her.
Fresh air entered her weakened lungs, and she sensed a sudden urge … to cry. Why exactly remained a mystery.
A pair of caring hands covered her in a soft fabric. The fabric was warm. She liked it.
After a small eternity, her sight adjusted and, she gazed at the world around her.
Her eyes opened and a woman greeted her. Her radiant smile was filled with pure motherly love and profound happiness. The woman held her in her arms, caressing her.
The woman looked Asian, and what struck her was her unnaturally pale skin, her long black silken hair, her wonderful red eyes, her petite impeccable face. No scars, no wrinkles, no pores, no imperfections. It was almost scary.
Who was this woman?
Her tired voice tired overflowed with happiness. "You have the eyes of your father."
The eyes of her father?
"Even when he won't acknowledge you, I will. Your mother will always love you. You will always be my child."
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The woman smiled. "I give you the name Asami. Minami Asami."
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Whhhhhhhhhhhaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaatttttttttttttttttttttt!?
Asami's eyes widened as realisation dawned. This wasn't possible. This shouldn't be possible. A name, a name, a name. She was given a name.
Her limbs lost their force. A newborn girl cried as her entire world shattered to tiny pieces.
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She was born in an alternative dimension of Earth where magic exists (unless it exists in our own and we don't know about it. I personally think that's likely. ;) ) She's reborn to the Naruto world... the question I have is was the character male or female before? Given the tears at the end, I'm feeling the MC was a guy. The mana she senses is probably chakra. Being mana sensitive to begin with might make her a prodigy in the next world.
Hmm... in terms of technical skill, you probably need an editor, but no one is perfect nor do they expect it! No galloping I's to be found.
Your chaotic mind style is superbly executed. I talk with Trolling Trolls frequently, and that's his favorite style of writing. You write like that, yourself.
In conclusion..... meow!
Tears?
Wait a moment.
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*at the end of the chapter*
Tears? Why tears ... Ah, cry. Crying in the case of babies has a completely different meaning. No tears, just screaming.
And, yes, in this chapter I used the stream of consciousness.
@Assurbanipal_II I never heard that term before! Mine doesn't work like that, but maybe I'm strange. XD
I think about something, and then if it was flawed I correct it, and then correct and correct and correct and correct and correct until it makes sense to me.
@Rellawing "if a baby cries, it makes a loud noise because it is hungry or uncomfortable"
MacMillan
@Rellawing And stream of consciousness? Never heard? James Joyce? Kafka?
@Assurbanipal_II yeah, but your character isn't a baby in her mind... at least perhaps the intelligence will fade off and rest in the background more, but I don't know that yet! I thought she/he had a huge amount of control up until the name came. And then it was like THAT'S MY NEW NAME??!! SHIT! XD
Also... hmmm... it had to be an alt dimensional version of Earth for sure since your protagonist knows the word Asian. :3
@Rellawing Medical knowledge,
babies always cry after they are born as it a reaction of their respiratory system that has started working after the birth and their lungs are not yet used to breathing air. So, if you ever have a newborn that doesn't cry immediately, then you should be worried.
@Assurbanipal_II Makes sense! Your protagonist is clever! :3 She might have moved on to her immediate next life if she stayed quiet and placid while she thought things over! Giving in to impulse means good things!
Right?
@Rellawing She is as clever as a fox who’s just been appointed Professor of Cleverness at Oxford University.
Anyway, don't underestimate her intellect.
@Assurbanipal_II *gives her the Nobel Peace Prize and waits to see how much of this world she destroys* Kyaaaaa!
@Rellawing Why have I the feeling that you are already understanding her well?