
As everything around me fades to black I hear laughter coming from the people who should have been my teammates. In all my life I never would have thought that I would die in another world, especially by the hands of people who should know that I’m the reason they were having such an easy time in the dungeon we were currently in. Once my consciousness cut out my last thought was about the people who helped me when we were first summoned to this world and what their reactions will be when they learn what happened. After a while I felt myself waking up and the first this I saw when I opened my eyes was a vast starless sky and a beautiful full moon shining its silver light and illuminating the world. After getting lost just staring at the moon for a while I voiced my thoughts to the sky,
“So am I dead or is this a dream?”
{Unfortunately for you, your human life has come to an end.}
When I got an unexpected answer to my question I jumped up and turned around to see the most beautiful woman I have ever seen. She had long silver hair that seemed to shine like the moon above our heads. She wore a stunning dark blue kimono that accentuated her beauty and made her light color hair stand out even more. After recovering from my surprise, I noticed that the woman who spoke to me wasn’t human. Instead of ears on the side of her head she had a pair of fox ears and at her back were 9 long, silver tails. Looking into her eyes I noticed that they shone with a faint golden light. While I was trapped in my thoughts, she spoke to me again.
{It seems like you were purposely pushed into a trap by your companions and killed almost immediately.}
“So that really was the case, huh. Well, it’s not like I didn’t expect something like this to happen eventually” I said shrugging my shoulders.
{You are taking this surprisingly well for someone who just died} the woman said with a hint of surprise in her voice.
“Not really, I just don’t think my mind has had the time to really comprehend this whole situation. If we wait a while, I think I will start freaking out.”
{Fair enough, so while you are relatively calm, I will introduce myself, my name is Tamamo, and I am the Goddess of the Moon of this world.}
After introducing herself, she gave me a welcoming smile that instantly made my heart race faster that I ever thought it could. Shaking my head to get my thoughts in order I returned her greeting, “My name is Jason Strider, summoned person and former member of the hero’s party.”
{Its an honor to meet you, Jason. Now that the introductions are over let me ask you, do you want to start a new life in this world or move on to the afterlife?}
While her question surprised me a little, I was kind of expecting it. Back on Earth I loved novels like this and always secretly wished to find myself in a situation like this. “Before I answer, is there any demerit to either option?” I asked even though we both already knew what I would choose.
{Refusing would mean that your soul would be sent to the afterlife for a few thousand years after which your memories and experiences would be erased, and your now fresh soul would be placed into a new body as a different person. Accepting would allow you to keep your memories as well as any skills you earned while alive. The downside to this option is that your levels would be lost, you would need to start life again as a baby and in this particular case you would no longer be male.}
“All of this sounds fine enough but why the last thing?” I asked confused.
{All souls have an affinity for a body and the only body that has a good affinity with your soul is a female.}
“Is there a way to wait for a male body that has an affinity with my soul?”
{There is, but I don’t recommend it because you will be waiting for about 45,000 years and by the time that happens you would have gone mad.}
Mulling it over again in my head, I came to the conclusion that I’d rather keep my sanity and just accept the offer. “If the option to have a new life with my memories and skills is there I’ll accept.”
{Perfect!}
She said this with such a cheerful smile that it caused my heart to start racing again.
{Now that you have agreed I will go over the more specific details such as where and when you will be reincarnated.}
I nodded my head in understanding and waited for her to continue.
{You will be born in a hidden demi-human village in a forest on the borders of the Celestia kingdom where you were summoned. It has been two years since you were killed in the dungeon.}
“Two years! But we’ve only been talking for a few minutes.” I said shocked.
{This is my home in the divine domain, time flows slower here that it does there. Now hold still for a moment.}
As she said this, she placed her hand on my head and I felt a massive amount of power condense around us.
{Congratulations, the process was successful. You will now be reincarnated as a denizen of our world. As a small bonus I granted you my divine protection as well.}
“What kind of effects does that have?” I asked while feeling a warm sensation in my body.
{I’ll let you find that out on your own but let me warn you now, since you have received my divine protection that means you will be my partner for eternity.}
After she said those words I was left completely stunned. “What do you mean by partner. Didn’t we only meet just now?”
{That’s the rule the gods of this world follow. If we find a soul that we feel a strong connection to we grant them our divine protection and claim them for ourselves.}
“While I don’t particularly mind, I wish you would have at least warned me before hand.” As I realized what I was saying I felt my body start to heat up to an unbearable level and I started to feel extremely sleepy. Before my consciousness cut out, I could hear Tamamo saying something.
{Good luck in your next life, I hope you can make it an amusing one.}
After hearing this I completely blacked out.
So far so good!
A few tips for both this site and writing then!
Line spacing on this site is weird when you copy and paste text, it comes out as one block of text. Try double tapping enter at each paragraph when writing on your writing program, (Word, Open Office, whatever you use) and when you copy and paste, it will be fixed on the site, making it much easer to read for us. The other option is to go through the text, hitting enter at the end of each paragraph to fix the issue.
As for writing... people have differing styles and ways they write their story. If you are not already doing it, I'd suggest planning out your story ahead of time, before writing chapters. (be it two chapters ahead or ten, up to you) It doesn't need to be detailed, something like cliff notes on what you want to happen and where you want to go with it, something to keep you on track. Maybe this works for you, maybe it wont.
Last thing I can think off, is to experiment. There are many ways to go about writing, from writing chapter to chapter, (Which I find is an easy way to hit a writers block) to planning out in simple notes, to writing detailed descriptions of each chapter and character, writing lore and histories of the world to stay consistent, so on and so forth. But above all else, and most importantly, don't be afraid to have fun with it!
I look forwards to seeing more of this story. Thank you for sharing!
Thanks for your insight. I will take what you have said into consideration.
I have to agree. Text walls are daunting. Paragraphs are your friend.
Nice imagery, writing seems fine. Look forward to more. :)
@Paytoechip don't worry about fixing it unless you want to but I think SH has changed how they handle spacing since you wrote this one. Your next chapter is over spaced now. The paragraph gaps are huge.
Yuri let's go
*Tricks him into marrying her.
*Doesn't elaborate.
*Leaves.
inspred Arrifura and demon loli? if she started like as child cant revenge :(
demon loli...god i loved that one she was batsh*t crazy sometimes
edit: if its this one you mean - https://www.scribblehub.com/series/62666/living-as-i-please-as-a-loli-demon-king/
edit 2: dammit now i wanna reread it
@Asente yes this :)
This seems promising so far, i'm wondering if the protagonist will have an advanced growth thing because of the blessing, after all she missed 2 years in the real world.
Try to not get lured in the "well since i get reborn i can grind happily without caring of anything and get my revenge later" trope, many authors do that and viewers can't see the end of it. At the end, the revenge chapters are often boring and edgy af since the authors depleted their creativity in the grinding and making-a-harem stuff. (Seriously, don't start a harem, especially if the protagonist is in a relationship with a Goddess).
Less than 10 chapters where the protagonist adapts-herself to her new world is enough if well written, then you can start the whole revenge thing but don't rush it by abusing of time-skips, take time and make sure the protagonist's actions and goals are clear.
The best revenge stories are the ones where the main character planned their revenge, not where they accidentally see the traitors in a crowd, which trigger their anger or that typeof thing. Your main character is perfect for this because of her being a Kitsune, a species known as tricksters and masterminds behind evil schemes. Of couse, she'll be highly potent to mind games, illusions and magic thanks to her racial traits and also because of the Goddess' gift.
You could make some kind of world where races other than Humans are often ostracized and the protagonist tries to ally these races under the flag of the (soon to be wife ) Goddess of the Moon after being divided for so long via schemes and political stuff. Not being at war against humans and all but trying to just unite all of them
After 2 years, the group of betrayers could be strong but not strong enough to face a non-human being suddenly appearing out of nowhere after the fall of the "evil forces". The persons who summoned them then get scared and order them to kill the new "evil being" but then, the protagonist just crushes them.
Try to not implant too much modern things in a fantasy world such as planes and electronic devices. Simple firearms and old tanks from WW 1, modified with magic can be used for show in a war and to make the summoned group a little uneasy of the "evil non human races' new leader".
My life is simple.... I see yuri~ I insta-read~
this is the way
Ok start so far.
By the way @paytoechip is this a harem?(plsno)
It is not.
@Paytoechip yay. Yuri
(s)He got rizz. pulling goddesses has never been easier.
TFTC looking forward to seeing where this goes you've successfully captured my interest.
I like the concept and I am looking forward to future chapters, a small tip tho. might want to separate your paragraphs to make the text more readable and breathable. Hard to read a constant text without losing yourself in the text.
I agree. This is a really good start, but your text spacing makes it text wall, and it's hard to not loose your spot often.
But nonetheless, thank you for sharing your work and chapter! And I look forward to more of it~