I think many of you expected that seeing the long update time. For some time now I was thinking of dropping it, I just don't have fun anymore writing it, but thinking more about it I decided to put it on Hiatus and give it one more chance after I rethink the whole novel. I can't rewrite it in a short time since it is pretty long, that is why I will work on it when I have free time between writing NSS and The Book of Ra.
I'm not yet ready to just drop it, since I believe the core of the novel isn't bad, I just have to use my experience until now to improve it.
I can't give an estimate on the length of the hiatus, but I will keep you updated on progress.
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It's fine.. I, your fath- *cough* I will wait as I enjoyed it, but the unexpected and weird meeting with 'God'.
I think this is the novel, might be mistaken...
Thoughts on story:
To be honest I am really dad that you are taking a break from this novel. Once upon a time I was a huge One Piece fan. Watched in in English dub when I was younger and it first came out and then went on to Eng Sub when I started watching a lot of other animes. I had a love/hate relationship with One Piece. I liked the world, the devil fruits, and Zoro but I didn't like Luffy. I didn't like how childish he was. I didn't like how it seemed he got dumber as the story went on. I didn't like how in pretty much all of there fights they spared their enemies. To me it felt like a bunch of kids pretending to be pirates(which Zoro actually made a similar comment in the show). And so I dropped it. I will admit that I sometimes go on youtube just to watch Zoro's fight.
So with that in mind you've actually written a fanfict that has my favorite parts of One Piece with a Mc that is taking things seriously. I have really enjoyed it. Heck, I enjoyed it enough that I just created this profile to give this comment. You used my favorite devil fruit, you used my favorite One Piece girl(Robin), and you made something great.
Now with the Bleach argument I am kind of on the fence. I think its ok mainly because the story so far is focused on the characters and their interactions. In your story power is just something for the MC to protect his relationships. The only thing I don't like about the death god stuff is his sword and I bet I will get some "really thats your problem" comments on it.
My complaint is pirates don't use two handed weapons. They don't use greatswords or halbreds. They mostly used one handed swords and axes because of where they fought. They are fighting on packed ships or in the interior of those ships. If you swing such a large weapon what are the chances of you hitting your ally? What are the chances of you hitting the mast or another part of the ship and getting the weapon stuck? I think a smaller sword would have made much more sense for his occupation.
When looking over the comments I think a big issue some people had with the mc getting a bleach system as well was the complex system he got. What I mean by that is that if he made a wish to have a system would the "parasite" really have allowed him to take bleach into this new world? I have a suggestion for you if you ever decide to do a re-write. Perhaps push the bleach system and the parasite reveal back some. Wait until he first enters the Dead Sea(which I really liked by the way). Instead of a dolphin have him met a Davy Jones type death god. It is there that he notices the parasite in the world and in order to cut it off the death god "corrupts" the system. By going through the Mc's memories he finds Bleach which he likes so he models his death powers into a system like that. This would give his two anime powers different sources. Plus besides the sword how much is the MC really going to use the Shinigami's powers?
Really thats up to you. I like this story and hope you continue it one day for three things: rumble rumble fruit, pirate mc who is willing to be ruthless/kill, and mc's relationships. I don't care about the Bleach shinigami stuff really(besides the not so appropriate weapon). I do hope you continue this story at some point. Well I guess I will go try the naruto one. I had it saved as well. Personally with my love for the darker anti-hero type mcs a world of pirates is better than ninjas but I'll give it a try.
Best of luck,
Buu
p.s. No matter what you do there will always be people who dislike some part of your story. You need to learn what you can take and what you can ignore from those people. Some of the dislikes will have reasons and you can learn from them. Perhaps the author didn't do good enough of a job explaining something or the characters personality flips too much. Other times people will just dislike things because the story is not going in the way they(reader) wants it to. Remember you are the author. One person might hate something and another might love it. For me in this situation its more along the lines of something that I don't really care about but believe could be introduced better.
Ok take your time
Idk whether or not you did this due to reading criticising comments or because you have a grown a lack of interest, but as far as I'm concerned you have made a really good fanfic and I do hope you won't drop it.
Am i somehow connect with hiatus storys? Every story i read does the same
Take however much time to think about it!
I just reread my comment... And i sound like a maiden confessing her love
@Touya S-Senpai
@Orademo uhhhh... Yes?
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@Orademo heyo! Could you please tell us the possible time of this amazing story's return?
@Touya I don't have an estimate yet, it could be one or two months.