THE TRIALS: Path Toward Godhood. (warning: MATURE CONTENT) - SURVEY: HOW TO BECOME A BETTER AUTHOR.

SURVEY: HOW TO BECOME A BETTER AUTHOR.

THE TRIALS: Path Toward Godhood. (warning: MATURE CONTENT) by REDLAW

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Lol, I must be one of the authors who communicate the most with the readers in WN. I generally pass it as a joke in order to become closer to you guys but if you really think I am doing too much tell me.

Also, I had a test today and I aced it. I have a big headache because of the hundreds of pages I had to study yesterday but I am happy. As such, perhaps à short chapter may come tonight or a long one tomorrow.

Now, let's go to the important things. Why did I troll you again?

Well I was laying in my bed while reading some novels I really liked(PRACTICAL GUIDE OF EVIL. It's not on this platform.Try it I love that novel) and I began to have an existential crisis(lol). But yeah I began to ask myself. I am doing alright? Did I become better? Could I become better? What kind of mistakes did I make? Did I fall into the usual trap of called habits? Do I make too much filler? Perhaps.... Not enough cliffs ?

Yeah... I might have been a little drunk when thinking about all that. But now that I am sober (I think) I can't help but ask myself these once again.

As people are generally proud and blind of their own fault. I can't obviously objectively assess myself. So this where you came from.

STYLE :

GRAMMAR (error and beauty of the words) :

WORLD BUILDING :

CHARACTER :

FILLER? :

EPICNESS:

OVERALL QUALITY:

GROWTH OF THE AUTHOR:

Those are the point I want you to assess. I not only want to know what you really think of this story, but I also want to know if you want I have grown or regressed as an author.

After all, évolution can't be linear. Perhaps I have grown at some point and regressed in others. I need your opinion on this as well as how you think I could become better.

Be as honest as possible. Like I always said, I will accept all criticism as long as they stay polite.

Also, I need your opinion about the prologue. This one is optional.

I wonder if I should make some changes to it. Of course, I won't change the overall course but you get my meaning I think.

Thanks for your support. I know you all love me despite all my troll

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Hantaros· Mar 9, 2020

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STYLE : really good, I said it before but your story was one of the two that changed my opinion on fanfics

GRAMMAR (error and beauty of the words) : not bad, some minor errors here and there, but way better than the majority of web novels

WORLD BUILDING: As this is a fanfic(therefore occurs in the world created by another person) this is a bit harder to grade, but I really like the way your plot interacts with the original story

CHARACTER: Well, this is were you shine the most, in my opinion at least

FILLER?: the closest I have seen to filler in your story is your use of anime cliches for comedy, not my favorite type of comedy, but not terrible either

EPICNESS: ?

OVERALL QUALITY: I gave you 5 stars, so that was never really in question

GROWTH OF THE AUTHOR: Okay, this one is harder, I'm not as good in judging people as I am judging stories, but I honestly believe you are doing your best to improve and I thank you for that

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- REDLAW· Author · Mar 9, 2020
  
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- shadownssj· Sep 3, 2021
  
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  i agree on everything, i just don't like harem or romance in general, yeah i'm bitter
  
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Ruiso· Mar 20, 2020

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Stop cliff hangers and the rest will go nicely, the story is great and the characters are awesome, don't care to much about world building.

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Ruiso· Mar 20, 2020

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Was the maid's quirk the same as Lucy from Elfen Lied with the invicible hands that rips people to pieces?

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- REDLAW· Author · Mar 20, 2020
  
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  Yep. But in less overpowered. Otherwise that would be cheating
  
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- Ruiso· · Mar 21, 2020
  
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  @REDLAW even if less overpower... is the nerf related to the number of arms or the distance they can reach?
  
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- REDLAW· Author · · Mar 21, 2020
  
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  @Ruiso Distance, number and strength of each arms
  
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Quasetor· Feb 25, 2020

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STYLE :
It's fine I can read without stopping, although you should take some of the edge away.
GRAMMAR (error and beauty of the words) :
Some words are wrong or missing but doesn't break flow
WORLD BUILDING :
Builds on the old world however we never get to see other parts or know how the world reacts to situations in Japan
CHARACTER :
Kuroha is like a 2-d right now you can probably make him better by using the humanistic theory of the hierarchy of needs and model his personality on that ,and as his memories as splintered you can ignore some of those needs
FILLER? :
You should watch out on the tone of the villian interludes they feel awkward

EPICNESS: 8/10

OVERALL QUALITY:
Pretty good

GROWTH OF THE AUTHOR: great growth man keep it going.

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REDLAW· Author · Feb 25, 2020

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Thanks

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Gyphinz· Sep 14, 2022

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Style:Very good you flow well with your ups and downs in your story.

Grammar: I can't really comment mostly cause I haven't notices anything off-putting as of yet in your work.

World building: You do well bordering good. The problem is I think you cage yourself in thinking about cannon.

Character: Awesome I love your character building you actually made me not hate the little grape perv and that to me is masterful. However you come a little close to over complexity sometimes imo. However as of yet I think you haven't crossed the line too far.

Filler: I am going to be real with you man I skip your filler, I am of the firm belief filler is completely useless. In stories, whatever form they may be in Ln Ff manga anime I skip it all cause it literally means nothing, in the end game of the story.

Epicness: Your not really at epic parts of the story so there is not any way to judge. However I think you will make massive and vivid epic scenes to drive your novel up in "epicness"

Overall Quality: your not perfect no one is but a hearty 4.5 stars is my rating cause your good.

Growth: I can't judge this myself thats honestly only something you in the end can truly Guage looking across all your work

Hope this helped in any way -Gryph

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Richitzu· Sep 11, 2020

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En general la verdad que está muy bien pero en algunas partes se ve forzada la trama y algo rápido el desarollo de deku

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alexandria0· May 20, 2020

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Me gusta mucho la historia y los comentarios que dejas de agradan, espero que sigas

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Spazev· Feb 25, 2020

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Style: it is good but noting special. It gets what you want across

Gramar: some hikups here and there but nothing major

World buiding: you have most of it done already, but the parts you add are great

Characters: the caracters you have are great, but there isn't any major caracter growth you might have somethig planed but i don't know what you have planed.

You could try addig som internal conflict, here is an idea i have been working on:

Something that would fit well iny your current storry is to chalenge Kurohas ideals. You could introduce a character similar to him but much mor twisted, that way you can make kuroha reflect himself in something he does not like, and in that way make him doubt himself an his choices. The best way is to make the internal conflict progress together with the regular conflict

Feel free to add this, something else or nothing at all, it's your story.

Keep in mind though, I have never written a story of my own all i have done is reading a lot of storys and lisenig to other people talking about stores to take what i say with a grain of salt.

Filler: I actuality like filler I am weird that way

EPICNESS: you are extremely good att the actionscens

Growth of the author: keep it up, you are doing great

I have now spent half an hour in the midle of the night basically writing a book review... never belived that would hapen Blob Cheeky

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REDLAW· Author · Feb 25, 2020

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Thanks for the effort.

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Yamiyo· Feb 25, 2020

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STYLE :
Good

GRAMMAR :
Good

WORLD BUILDING :
Good

CHARACTER :
= +- (Kuroha went from Badass Ant-Hero to Naive Child)

FILLER? :
+- (Many meaningless fillers and interludes)

EPICNESS:
+- (It was better before)

OVERALL QUALITY:
Good

GROWTH OF THE AUTHOR: +- (It was better before)

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REDLAW· Author · Feb 25, 2020

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Thanks. Please could you be more detailed about the Kuroha going from badass anti hero to naive boy?

Same for epicness. Thanks

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Yamiyo· · Feb 25, 2020

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@REDLAW he became careless and emotional, and that takes some of the mature character

it made him look like a naive child and it made it seem less epic

(I use Google Translate to translate, sorry)

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REDLAW· Author · · Feb 25, 2020

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@Yamiyo I see. But he is a child. No matter how mature, no matter how much he went through. A child will always have some mentality of a child. I think that making him perfect from the start would be too boring since characters growth is necessary.

But I can understand how frustrating some of his choices can be.

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TypeFantasyHeart· Feb 25, 2020

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First step: read this whole thing like if they would test you

https://www.webnovel.com/book/10589139205070105/Book-of-Authors

second step, review all your knowledge of English

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REDLAW· Author · Feb 25, 2020

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My knowledge on English is mostly self taught. So yeah not easy. Perhaps once I have more free time I will take professional classes. Thanks for the link.

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TypeFantasyHeart· · Feb 25, 2020

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@REDLAW there are a lot of free pro courses online and other materiala. You just gotta look. Also your english is better than most, so you only need to familiarize yourself with the correct grammar. Try reading the link i gave you

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REDLAW· Author · · Feb 25, 2020

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@TypeFantasyHeart ?Thanks

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