: Modern day earth
I rose from the bed like Dracula has risen from his grave or the useless thing he sleeps in
wait does Dracula even sleeps .. yea who cares
sunshine for some is a start for a happy beautiful day, but me nah fuck the sun
if I didn’t need vitamin D I won’t ever want to see you again
''Rise and shine useless son ''
"oh.. hi dad good morning ''
''come down now its the afternoon and you are still sleeping .You need to think about your future''
And that’s the que to cut my sense of hearing for the daily lecture of being a hopeful addition to society and whatnot
-He's your father respect him-
with a sigh that came from my depth of my soul I closed my eyes to sleep again
"WAKE THE FUCK UP OR ILL THROW YOUR SORRY ASS OUTSIDE THE HOUSE"
"fine am coming down"
with a scowl in his face and a glare that wants to erase my existence he left
Chill dude you are the one who didn’t pull out when he should
-struggling to continue life -
will who isn’t people who want to live needs to struggle or else how will they enjoy life
-not all people have masochistic traits like you -
can you shut up I need to focus to not try to escape reality by closing my eyes
let’s see I need to bathe then wear clothes and do morning routine shit
After I went down for lunch, I sat on the dinner table gazing at the feast that I will devour
haa? hAAA? Where the fuck are my nutrients that my body will use to make energy and allow me to expend it to continue my day?
hmmm let’s not panic haaaa ooooooof deep breaths
Veles calm down
Ask the inhabitants that share your life abode
-ha? I don’t know -
-KillKILLKILLKILL-
what’s the psycho doing here shut him up brain
-ok-
I see my step-mother looking at me across the room so
I ask "Good morning my amazing mother you look as a lily in the winter''
she answers with a stern look in her aged face ''First thing young man it aint morning second you can have the leftovers from your meal yesterday we decided that we will not tolerate any mistakes from you again even if the doctors said that you need gentle handling we know you tricked him''
Why the hell is everyone around here doesn’t answer directly and needs to give a speech every time they move their mandible muscles or bones .. both?
-mouth you retard-
oh right
''kay kay I’ll take the frozen food and heat it bye''
let’s get out of this shithole
''it’s nice to see you leave once in a while Veles''
''no need to be sarcastic bye Second offspring''
yea that’s my sister who I and she have mutual understanding
which is both of us want me to disappear
I sigh again and leave the house
I don’t know where to go in this noisy city
hmmmm... need a quiet space where to go where to go
to the library we go at least there no one is talking but me
to myself
don’t get me wrong I like conversing with my species
what I hate is that people suck
but I love my friend which I have a lot of like dozens ok ... one friend
-He is the only one who seems amused by your babbling nonstop he might be planning on studying you-
not everyone has an ulterior motive to realize my genius and hear me preaching about the truth of the world
-sure bud believe whatever you want-
I enter the library and go to my usual spot
I frown and see a teenager that seems younger than me by a year or two
she has a brown hair with a tomboyish cut using her phone to text
My god look at those fingers movin'
she's a gold medalist in texting wow
just wow
she gives me a glance then return on smashing the universal record in typing
look at those fingers
they just blurred holy shit
''why are you standing there in a daze looking at me I mean I know am beautiful but be tactful a bit ''
I woke from my daze ''Hello female can I sit here while you go somewhere else''
''ha? just leave retard''
''miss I am actually medically proven retard, so you are now discriminating against me because you see me as a lesser human being''
I raise my voice for people to focus on us, and I see her being flustered and leaving because she doesn’t want to set here anymore
I sigh for the umpteenth time and set in my MY seat that is in the corner of the library and start reading novels
-just use the net -
I need to feel the books to get immersed in them
I leave the library on the outskirt of the city because of the text message I receive from my buddy
best buddy Damien he wants us to meet in a weird abandoned factory for something
ehh who cares I can’t go back home its only 8 pm
still can squeeze two hours for my bud bud
After walking for 20 minutes I give up and call an uber to drive me there
I pay those moneysuckers their pay and they leave
why isn’t there public transportation in this old fucking city
ohh I see Damien playin with a cat on the side of the road, so I sneak there to give him a playful scare
I got in three steps from him and inhale the living shit of the air surrounding me
''DAME DAME I MISSED YOU MAN''
with a yelp he flips and falls head first on the ground like he was planning a summersault but fails
miserably Haha such a funny dude
-that’s why people hate you -
c’mon that was a bro thing to scare each other
he glares and then he realizes that its me and just sigh and stands
''you finally came''
''that’s it? no why did you do that or stop being a child or anything ''
''what do you want me to say ?''
''I dunno something that makes you not suspicious by standing here and waiting beside an abandoned factory''
he flinched then stuttered a sentence that needs a fucking translator to understand it
who cares
''so why did you bring me here''
he holds my hand and went inside the factory
damn its dark and dusty with broken machines too old to replace or use
and then he stops and look at me with tearful eyes and
says''sorry Ve they threatened to kill my sister ''
wait what
is he having a breakdown right now ?
ohhh that’s up my alley I can help him
wait I never been in this side of the conversation huh
you live and you learn will lets try to calm him down
''don’t worry bud I trust that you had no choice'' and give him a pat on the shoulder
look at me world call me psychiatrist Veres from now on
""waaaaaaaaaaaaaahh''
-it got worse doctor retard -
I can see that
wait I cant see shit
-ohh someone hit you in the head, and you blacked out-
I think it's obvious (?) but try using a '.' at the end of a sentence.
Ok first off need to learn punctuation and your grammar reminds me of a 8 year old.
ohh(,) someone hit you (in) the head,(_)and you blaked (blacked) out-
This is your last sentance in the chapter it has 4 errors in it, if you count lack of punctuation.
thanks man appreciate it
wrote the draft on the site itself
just trying to see if I can write a story or not hope you read till chapter 3 and give any feedback you can
@comcom- keep writing! You will only get better and that is the real secret to good writing. Also as a reader, thank you for the content!