I am aware that this ending was kinda rushed and all that but you need to understand that by this point i have come to accept that I fucked up the story. Yeah it had it's moments where everything just seemed to be going right for it but my biggest mistake was the system. It would have been fine in say a multiversal type story but for a single one like this it got out of hand fast. By the time it came for zeus to be killed I realized that I was dragging out the inevitable. With that in mind I just typed up the ending I would have ended up with at this rate and called it a day.
As an author I've grown a lot since I've started so long ago. My grammars improved, not perfect mind you but improved. My story telling has also greatly improved as this was easily the longest story I have ever written to date and despite it's flaws was still considered good by almost all of you who read to this point. You may be asking at this point if I might ever revisit the Harry potter franchise? The answer is maybe, for now I want to explore other things in my writing and in the future may take a crack at a proper Harry potter story without all the flaws of this one.
With all of this said I am currently working on three separate stories at this exact moment, one of which some of you should be familiar with. I am of course referring to [A random pokemon journey]. It's a dark and semi-realistic take on the world of pokemon. The MC is also not a pleasant person for a good portion of the story but for the most part that is intentional.
After that I am currently writing [Naruto: Secret Sage] as well. It's about a guy reborn into the Naruto world as a sage. It reads like a diary or narration but that was intentional since I am testing that style out. The MC is OP from the start and only gets more so as time goes on but doesn't show it all that often, I suppose the story can be considered slice of life to a degree.
Finally I am also writing [Danmachi: Hell's Forge]. The MC is kinda insane but in a mostly positive way and changes things in the world by just being there. The story also features pretty interesting crafting stuff fairly often after the MC gets his falna if that's your jam.
If you are reading this from Royal road then unfortunately you will only find my pokemon story available since the site doesn't like fanfic writers having a pat reon. It wasn't a matter of selling copyrighted material either as that's not what my pat reon is for but simply the possibility of it. Anyways my pat reon exists so you guys can read ahead early and directly message me or take part in any of the polls I put up there.
I thank all of you for reading my story and wish you all a good life.
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Thanks for the story, I enjoyed it thoroughly. It is one of the more anticipated novels for updates I was reading. You could change the status to completed, so there is closure on this site. May you write smoothly and enjoy it fully.
Thanks for the story man, taking things to their logical conclusion for sure. I was however wondering if after the universe that Nick would have to contend with that universe's creator and/or throw off control of the system itself from his being.
Yeah, could've definitely continued with him researching both that Skyrim guy(can't remember his species) that for flung through the multiverse and his system... Hell it could even be considered a plot hole with the last paragraph saying the had nowhere else to go.
@BOOKW0RM (rereading and don’t remember perfectly, but had a thought) I kept thinking that nick could have created a bootstrap paradox to explain the system, or perhaps even his entrance into his own body. Would make sense and explain the system’s existence after nick goes multiversal for a while, as a post credits scene.
Thanks for the story.
I feel like after the race evolution over the summer holidays it became more rushed and escalated too much. I would have preferred a slower pace with more attention to the details
I've Ben reading it since the start and honestly got sad when Steve died
We had a good run with this one
Thanks for finishing the story.
I agree that mixing too much otherworldly knowledge caused the story to become a 'trainwreck'.
I loved this story and in my opinion where you went wrong was there was no intermediary between strong and overpowered. For example if you had introduced assassins creed with the order that expelled him it would take another leap of power to join the Isu and then you could have had the Gods be akin to danmachi or Percy Jackson. I would have also loved to see how you or if you could have introduced sci-fi into it like star wars or mass effect. Also thanks for at least giving the story an ending even if it is a bit bitter sweet.
Danmachi: Hell's Forge
I follow this one. Pokemon and Naruto I don't like their worlds unless the MC travels to them but only momentarily but if the story takes place in them I avoid them
Man it's over and what a journey it was.
Thanks for the time and effort Author and yeah while understandable the ending was a wee bit rushed .
Honestly I had more of an issue with the last paragraph than anything else.
You could have also made the final fight with Zeus a bit more epic. Get him some sort of hidden upgrade so that he wouldn't be that lame but it would have still been delaying the inevitable.
OK I'm not normally a fan of writing after major stories of fiction but this story with the Mc being beside and separate in the Harry potter universe is a pretty good one. I liked that nick had his own goals and adjenda while still solving the voldemort problem. Thank you for taking the chance to write it, it was good.