
I never thought that a world where man were so scarce could even be possible in my wildest dreams. And even more I am part of that world now.
Of course I was not that bad in my previous world. I graduated top of my class at 23. Worked in an international company. Made enough money to enjoy latest entertainment and games. Married a girl who worked in the same company, who was a foreigner by the way. I enjoyed her thoroughly, she was also quite lewd sometimes but we divorced after 3 years because of her career change decision which made her to shift to new york, for some reason she suddenly had to become a stand up comedian.
After that I had some girlfriends and even some affairs but that was all just fun, I even lean on prostitutes at some times. All in all I had quite a high libido in my life which seems to me is a mental thing since it came with me here and man from this world were supposed to be less intrested in sex for some reason. I guess in a society where man is encouraged and prefer to donate their sperm and not get involved in sexual stuff, of course leaving some abnormal pervy ones but they were very tiny-tiny bit.
Most families are supported by two females as partners. It's like almost all girls are default settings with lesbianism. There were some exceptions as male and female couples but they were quite rare because most man prefer to enjoy government paid privileges and donate their sperm since the more woman get pregnant by them the more money they could ask for.
My hospital room's door suddenly opened with slight sound and I saw tge same cute nurse enter again.
I looked at her questioningly even though I wanted her to come closer.
" Ahm I am supposed to check up on you and perform some test every few hours, master."
'hm, did she have to call me master ? Lol she seems bit young. maybe 20 something I guess.'
"Ah, okay do it then." I replied.
She came closer for some reason he legs looks like they are shaking. She checks up on monitor and equipment readings then comes closer to to do physical checkup with trembling hands. I can't help but chuckle a little which seemed to be a bad decision since her face was red from embarrassment. She tried to hastily turn around and walk away but I grabed her hand. I was vored anyway.
" I am sorry, I have just never seen a person so nervous before. I shouldn't have laughed. "
Nurse - no it's fine. I should have focused more on my work. It's not your fault.
Jake - why were you so nervous though? Is someone monitoring this room ?
Nurse - ahh no no, it's just it's my first month on this job and I have never touched a boy so beautiful as you.
She went even more red after saying that as if that was even possible. But she didn't seem to lie. still I try to check her thoughts.
' ah, he is still touching my hand. Wow its so manly touch, my god I am going to cum if this continues another minute. I even said all those embarrassing stuff.'
Ah she is quite lewd. Would she really cum just by my touch? Have woman really fallen so low ? Or is she just some well preserved virgin with dirty mind ?
I guess time to fing out. Maybe I should show some caution but she is so damn cute. Let's have some fun, I should be careful not to go too far though.
Jake - uhm I am just an average guy big sister. But big sister my hands are so cold for some reason I can't seem to warm them I even shut down the air conditioner.
Nurse - ahm maybe I should inform doctor lily about this, just one minute.
Jake - no big sister, it's not that big of a deal. It's just my fingers seems to feel a little cold. I think I need to warm them a little and it will be fine.
Nurse - ah okay. What can I do for you?
'Ahm Maybe I should offer to lick his fingers but that would make it wet and more prone to cold.'
Haha, I have something better plan for you.
Jake - let me touch a warm place on your body for a minute it will be fine after that.
' wait what, what warm place? The warmest place is..is..is....'
Jake - turn around big sister let me find the warm place.
She turns around like a little kitten. I lay my hand on her back and her entire body shudders.
Lol I wonder which one of us is really feeling the chill.
My hand move slowly towards her waist, then her tailbone and then I stop in middle of her ass crack.
' is it really happening ? Is it really fucking happening? A guy half my age is touching my ass ? What's he gonna do ? Will he place it inside my clothes ? Won't he find out how wet I am ? '
After waiting for a second on her ass and getting such response I decided to go a bit further. I slowly push my hand under her uniform in a very sensual way, then I let my hand go inside her pants. And finally I grope her naked ass through her panty. She seems to sudder again at this point. So I tease her a little further.
Jake - big sister, this place is so warm. But I think it will feel more warm inside. Should I insert them inside?
' what ! What ! What ! This kid wants to finger me ? I get it that he is just trying to warm himself but isn't this too much ? Should I let him ? I hope I don't cum instantly when he penetrates my holes with his tiny yet strangely musculine fingers. Ah fuck I am drooling !! '
Nurse - if you want to do it jake, you have my permission. Ahhm.
Even though she moans while saying that just how dumb does she think I am ?
I give her my purest smile I could muster and said " thank you big sister" and at the same time I insert my finger in her asshole.
"Ahhhm...ahh...ah"
' he chose my asshole? He is fingering my asshole? Why would he choose that hole ? Don't guys get all gross when asshole is mentioned? '
Ahh seems like she was not expecting it inside her ass, but that didn't stop her from cuming inside her panties after I fingered her for minute or so.
I could clearly feel her inside get all wet. Even her jeans seems like it has little spot on it. She covers it up hastily with her long uniform though.
Haha her face is so red, and so fucking cute. I wanna kiss her. But before I could fall that far. Her little page device vibrated and she hurriedly left my room without even saying anything.
It was cool, but it's a little too predictable. It wouldn't be more interesting if he was a little shy about this new moral difference and she was the aggressive one.
On the contrary, your option would be boring and even abnormal. The guy has direct proof of what the girl is feeling now, why should he be embarrassed about it?
Wat?
Is everything going to be dumb down, and the nurse seriously going to waste years of life plan and only to f*ck it up with a record in her case?
I like RSM as much as the next person but there's only so much BS you can take
Judging a smut after just 2 chapters ? And on the basis of what plot ??
@Insert_master Grammar aside, the writing style is reminiscent to your classic Wuxia/xianxia vibe, the plot predictable, the characters are generic one dimensional and the fact that you'd jump down the horni zone instead of establishing the foundation of your world's background.
First impression is important and if you fail to capitalise it then you'd missed out a lot of opportunities, think of the nutse for example, and think of it as a male of our world. why waste years of MD for a possible imprisonment via pedophilia and sexual harassment, assuming they have more or less the same culture and society as the modern girls of 1st world cuntries then the nurse doesn't have a favourable chance in the court.
See what I mean when you failed to enact the foundation of your world?
@IsekaI_Boi No, but you have your opinion and it may be valid. I just write as I feel man. I am not professional writer, I write for my own enjoyment. And sometimes details not what I enjoy the most about my work, if you know what I mean.
Anyways I am sorry I couldn't give you what you were looking for.
@Insert_master
Eh *shrugs*
It's less of a discouragement and more of a criticism to improve your works, I know my grasp for English sucks so I likely couldn't convey my message, just remember that if you write a character put your perspective in their shoes.
That way they wouldn't act so predictably or one dimensionaly
@Insert_master Think of it like this, He wants a cuisine from a good restaurant while you are serving burger and fries. Both are good but burgers and fries are for those who have just started to eat out. After having enough of that you start to crave the more refined stuff. Anyway, when writing just try to think, why would this character do this particular action or why would this character have this kind of thought and you'll do just fine.
@Zohan Did you guys not read my description for this story..? This is a wish fulfillment story I write just for my own "fulfillment of wish"... if you want to read a sophisticated story, here is my main novel without any nsfw and serious character development..... https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1112155/the-runic-alchemist/ But this one is like a slice of life but mixed with lots of sex... I have plans for it but not to the level that I thought out every single detail....
@Insert_master Nah, I didn't really read the description. I only saw the words 'moral reversal' and thought, 'Okay let's test it by reading 5-6 chapters." If wish fulfillment was your intention from the start then I apologize as it seems I have stuck my nose into something I shouldn't have.
@Zohan No, it's fine. I like talking to my readers. I would appreciate any feedback, everything helps in some way. Even this guy makes good points, maybe I was a bit too horny in this chapter...
@Insert_master hey, even some crunchy veggies feel good with meatie burgers.