I looked out into the corridor and found not the slightest trace of humans, instead it looked like a hurricane swept through the area!
'What happened, is this a hospital? Where is everyone?' I crawled forward while turning my head this way and that trying to find some sign of a person.
'Well, in a way it's good it's empty, because if anyone saw me, they'd probably just outright attack me.' Crawling into a room, I saw a corpse standing upright, wait no that's not right, but it looked towards me, however it didn't attack.
'But what the fuck! It's a zombie!' It was clear as day that what stood in front of me was dead, blood colored the front of its shirt as a scalpel stuck out of it's chest.
Forturnately, it didn't seem to have rotted much, and the meat could still be edible..
'Eh, why would I even think of eating that? It's a zombie for Christ's sake!'
[Ding. Find and consume 200 pounds of meat.]
'Excuse me? Who are you and why are you in my head? Besides, why should I listen to you?'
[Ding. Find and consume 200 pounds of meat. It is imperative that you complete the mission, or you will perish.]
'Huh? So you just throw out something like I'll die if I don't obey, and expect me to just obey? Because you thought right, I don't wanna die again!'
Crawling over to the zombie, I looked up at it and tried to figure out what to do to kill it.
Then recalling the movies I watched, I tensed the muscles in my tail and sprung up at the zombie's neck.
With a soft thud, I bit down on the zombie's neck, while he just stood there as if not understanding the situation.
'Look, I'm having an internal debate here, if you don't struggle, I'll feel bad...'
I hung onto it's neck and gulped the coppery tasting fluid that ran into my mouth.
Then it collapsed, without warning and we both hit the floor, it was slightly painful for me, like I was slapped.
Crawling towards the zombie, I chomped down on the back of the zombie and then thought of something that filled me with dread.
'Will I turn into a zombie because I ate one?' I started to freak out when a notification popped up.
[Ding. Xenomorph are a perfect life form and as such cannot catch diseases and infections.]
'Whew, good thing I'm a Xenomorph, my foot, I want to be human! Make me human god dammit!'
[Ding. It was well known that host despised being human, as a result that creator of the system chose you.]
'At least let me lie in peace!' Murmuring about an annoying system, I ate the body until not even the bones were left.
[Ding. Host has consumed 300 pounds of a life form, choose your evolution path.]
[Ding. Evolution paths available : Carrier, Drone, or Warrior.]
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Zombie appocalypse must be a downright buffet for a man-eating monster...
Also, maybe you could write the system text in bold? That'd make it more obvious it's a separate thing. As it is, it drowns a bit in the narration. Plus, it'd be more impactful when it first appears.
No. Nononononononono. Not in bold. Do not ever ask someone to write on scribblehub in bold. Better in cursive (or italic, name it however you want). Bold here is too bold. And it is pretty okay. It is surrounded in square brackets, which is pretty ideal for system.
I truly doubt there would have been 300 pounds on that body
Even if there was a zombie weighing 300 pounds, I don't see how a chestbuster could eat it all at once. This creature is the size of an eel.
300 pounds from one zombie? That's one Fat zombie... The average human weighs 137 pounds. The bones are 12-15% of this. Let's keep it simple at 12% 12% of 137 is 16.44 let's say 16 for simplicity. So one human has around 121 pounds of 'meat' so the zombie weighed around 2.5 times than the average human... Also the mission was 200 pounds but later changed to 300 pounds.
Hmm on further reading it says he consumed 300 pounds of a lifeform, not specifically 'meat'. But still the zombie would have to weigh slight more than twice that of the average human.
On further research the average(American) male weighs 197 pounds, but that's still half again to 300 pounds. I suggest you change the
[Ding. Host has consumed 300 pounds of a life form, choose your evolution path.] To 200 pounds
And
[Ding. Find and consume 200 pounds of meat.] To organic matter.
Or you can stick with 300 and mention the zombie us fat/muscled.
I like the interaction between MC(don't know the name I think) and the system
funny that they complained about not being human then the system mentioned they were chosen because they did not want to be human to shut them up
Can you please add spaces between the lines? That's easier on the eyes and better to read. Other than that it sounds pretty good :).
I like the fact that you included the carrier.
Not many people know of them nowdays.
No editing? Really? I got a headache reading this.
:O
Thanks
Xenomorphs don’t eat