Lava, after accepting an early death, is now fated to live the longest!
After losing her new mother, Lava was taken into a human orphanage and finds a new family to care for.
Threatened by the pending demon invasion, the Prazia kingdom funds orphanages to squeeze every unknown talent from its citizens.
Lava must now deal with the responsibility of defending her newfound home and comforts.
Having strength doesn't make you invincible, no matter how strong you are, those you care about will always be your weakness.
Reality can be dark, and not everything will just fall into place perfectly.
Oh, and for anyone that's here for a non-human MC I should mention that MC does get a human transformation right off the bat, but she hates it and pretty much refuses to use it whenever she can get away with it.
I also can't stand when monster reincarnations give the MC a transformation and erase the whole point of the story.
But since my magic system is so flexible I couldn't just not give my MC a transformation.
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Keep in mind this is my first ever attempt at writing and until like ch.23 it's pretty much bland because I was just flying with no plan and rushing too hard.
Now that I have a clear picture of how I want to end this I'm so sad because it's a little too late to go back and rewrite the first part, thus I don't have time to world build on the same level as most isekai anymore. (When I initially started writing I was too afraid to actually try to world build since I doubted myself too much.)
The beginning chapters are really bad at pacing and description, and I did a lot of redundant stuff trying to come up with a way to drive plot. It wasn't until past ch.23 where I started getting ideas and improving.
Nice story, nice wordbuilding, nice idea, lot of potential but poor in the execution.
Things go simply too fast, Lava for exemple becomes friend with Ria in two lines.
When Aya discover that Lava is a dragon we don't even have a reaction and so on.
I feel that a lot of things are rushed and rather than shown they are summarized and it makes a great damege to the story.
I would suggest a rewrite to achive the full potential of the story, because with the same ingredients, same ideas, same plot and same characters, but a better writing style (showing more than narrating) it would be much a better story.
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