Hyuga affair happened, and somehow Hinata got kidnapped. She's lost. She's the dead Hyuga princess.
A Naruto manga fan-girl gets throw in the body of a supposedly dead Hinata. Stuff happens. She watches from the sidelines, trying to manipulate events to her own ends.
Just another Naruto fanfic.
Proofreader: CakeEight (after 3.10)
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Writing style is intentional. Can't guarantee a perfect reading. English is not my first language and there will prob be cringe. If you see them, please point them out for me. <3
Warning:
This fanfiction contains dark themes, including violence, trauma, and psychological manipulation. Any romance is a slow burn and primarily focuses on emotional connection, not physical intimacy. No explicit content will be shown.
Any semblance of romance doesn't happen until very late in the story, and certainly not while the cast are still children.
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It takes inspiration from other fanfincs. Specially two:
Dreaming of Sunshine, by Silver Queen
Naruto: The Outsider's Resolve, by FictionOnlyReader
If you haven't read them, go for it. They are way better than this one.
It's a really well-written story with a concept that intrigued me up to the last chapter. The characters' power journey and how she grew up was exceptionally pleasant to read. It was entertaining and kept my attention that I didn't realise I already caught up with the story. I particularly loved the one bit in the chunin exams when she was exposed to some of the memories from Hinata's torture under Orochimaru; I would love to see more of that.
It's pretty great outside of the lack of a particular bond with the other characters. It honestly felt like they were just there with nothing else to do. There weren't stakes for their character, no particular development. Her fan-girling didn't help that case, placing them on a pedestal with no further room to connect. It would be great to see how they hang out, learn some sort of oddities and experience small conflicts here and there.
Other than that, the story is exceptional overall. I recommend anyone who stumbled upon it to give it a read.
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A very well written story. Well mixed soft and light-hearted moments with dark and creepy stuff.
I want to complain about being OP too quickly, but I can't because it's only relative to the peers, no Jonin in kindergarten bullsh*t like you see normally, and best of all, all the strength came with a very hefty price. In fact, I would rather choose to be without both, really. No cheats, no systems, no otherworldly entities. Everything in-world.
Writing style is great. Stellar for a fanfiction, really. Examplary. Chapters are long, rarely includes other povs. Probably so rarely, that might as well not at all do it.
Characters have some depth, but not really explored much. If anything, I don't like the fan-girling over the characters.
Would recommend.
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Okay, first of all, the story is entertaining, and I would recommend it. The grammar is good, and its one of the few good Naruto fanfictions with a female MC. I loved the first arc and would give it a 5/5 The progress the MC makes is also quite good. Not to slow, not to fast. At least for now. The writing style itself is also a bit different from the usual, but I quite like it, as it helps with immersion.
But there is one thing that bothers me. The depiction of the female characters in the story. I wouldn't even say that the girls in the story were one dimensional, they just don't play any role at all. To be fair, the original author of Naruto also wasn't the best at portraying a female character beyond a supporting character, so there is more source material for the guys, but in my opinion, this is the point where fanfiction has the opportunity to shine. Well, this story doesn't do that so far. So when MC shows her interest in some female characters, and made a few remarks (mostly in her mind) about it, it felt like misplaced celebrity worhsipping. I mean, she is fangirling some characters but doesn't even try to get close to them (even on a friendship basis). Another thing is, that the story, mostly follows the original time line. But I guess, we slowly get to the time where we will see more butterfly effects. All in all, I hope that the female characters and side characters in general get a bit more screentime and depth. Until then I can only give a 4 star overall score. This may change as the story progresses.
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An enjoyable and well-done tale in Naruto.
The style is good.
The grammar needs some cleaning. But nothing that hinders. A wrong word or two.
The characters are well done. Naruto characters are not deeply explored. But I prefer that in fanfiction. That does not mean that they do not have depths, they also grow. It is just that we follow the MC's first-person POV. As for the MC. I will just say that she is still growing and finding herself. Otherwise, she forges on and is cute.
Story-wise things are good. The author has smoothly added his own things while at the same time the original story goes on.
There are two things to note about this story.
First, it follows the original plot. Just with the MC involved. I find this good. It is a fanfiction. Also, there is the aspect of fate for some events in Naruto. Which makes it logical. This does not mean the MC can not change or help things. Nor does it restrict the MC.
Second, the shortness of how it is written. This is not bad nor does it take anything from the story. It does require some foreknowledge, maybe. I have found that I enjoyed the fact that we get to events somewhat fast.
Either way. This is really good and is something I want more of.
This is a full 5-star fanfiction. Anything below 3 stars is a lie. 4-stars maybe works, it is fanfiction.
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A pretty good Naruto fanfiction, it does lack some depth and character development, but who knows what the author is cooking.
Story also feels a little too fast-paced.
Edit: still reading, it's very good so give it a shot.
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This is one of the good ones. The author manages to strike a really nice balance with this story in a bunch of things.
There's enough darkness to keep things on edge, but not so much that everything seems bleak and hopeless. MC is pretty strong for her age and a bit ahead of her peers, but definitely not overpowered the way you see in most fanfics. She was not an adult before transmigration, so she's just the right amount of childish, serious, and hardworking without being annoying. She also actually does things to change events, so this doesn't feel like just another retelling of the original story, but the changes aren't so dramatic it becomes unrecognizable.
Add that to some good writing and grammar and you end up with some really enjoyable fiction.
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This fanfic is a very interesting book of an experimented on Hinata/ OC trying to make it in the Naruto world and I think it's fantastic and fun! Well written fight scenes, on point reactions to stuff by established characters, interesting path to power, a powerful but fallible protagonist who does not ridiculously outpace her peers, some truly surprising emotional growth by many characters, yummy pastries, and enough twists to keep it fresh. The protagonist is also a big ol' nerd which makes me love her even more and I'm exited for the where the story will go next!
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really well written out, and its nice to see a self insert actually trying to reasonably interfere with plot instead of just somehow magically having everything work out it their favor
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the grammar of the story is pretty good but that's really only good part of this story. First chapter nerf's the MC by erasing "hinata's" bloodline which is nonsensical given who was experimenting on her. The next issue is author's lack of logic use when it comes of the why's ninja's use tight fitting clothing. The last issue that was glaring with the story that I read to was proceeding to follow a stupid trope where the mc's chakra doesn't subconciously strengthen her muscles like it should. The body itself and core soul is the same and only has "hinata" remembering a past life so in no way shape or form should her chakra not passively flow in her body to nurture her muscles and organs.2/5 author's lack of foresight and logic use ruins the story.
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