Currently on the first chapter and I am having trouble continuing. This seems like a good story from the prologue but the following two semi-prologue chapters are hard to follow and the constant use of "a certain" when we already know or don't really need to know the "certain" object or character is somewhat infuriating to me. I will continue to read and will change my review based on such.

I got through chapter one and started on chapter two, but I seriously cannot continue as the writing is pretty bad. Use of two adjectives that mean the same thing, repetitive use of "certain" and naming ging's that are not at all important, and poor choice of dialogue breaking. These factors lead to a hard-to-follow story.

This story would be pretty good from what I have seen, but it is in need of major editing. 

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