as of ch 18. I rate this story a 2/10. 

this story has more telling than showing, missing and lacking character development MC and otherwise. The character growth tag is a lie, the only growth shown in personality is the author telling us "ah I'm this way now btw". The only noted natural progression (if you can call it that) is MC accelerating some stockholm syndrome in a human woman he kidnaps. Who only sometimes is a woman because the author has issues with the ever so basic gender pronouns of he, she, him, her, etc.

yeah not a good read atm. Author has a lot of work to do to clean up this mess. Probably rewrite and renumber chapters of this story and include more to attempt to even make some natural progression between characters. Or just scrap it all in favor of a rewrite.

potentially it could be a 5/10 or even a 6 if the author ups their skills. The progression of events aren't as forced as other things. But imo the use of proper foreshadowing is missing. There are some decent explanations of how their tribe works before it becomes relevant, but other times shoe horned in right as it become relevant. Hmm, I think if this author became more campy and went to town with the slice of life elements and not rush to the smut, things could improve a lot.

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