Readers beware, there is uncensored hand holding within... You have been warned!
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You know what’s great? Turning eighteen.
You know what’s not so great? Opening your eyes to a room you don’t know, followed by the world's most intense headache.
This is how my story started. Where it goes from here is anyone's guess.
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This is a Pokemon fanfic about a girl that gets brought into the Pokemon world from Earth.
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This is my first time writing a fanfic so take it easy. Helpful criticism is appreciated and I may ask for suggestions but in the end I am writing this because I want to. I'm not sure what tags and genre will encompass this story but I will update it as it evolves.
Updates every two weeks!
Discord: https://discord.gg/TeV3KB8Ueh
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This story is beta'd and edited by: Decaded
Cover image generated by AI. I plan to commission artwork if I can reach 100 chapters.
its an interesting story so far that develops wel no OP at start and interesting character development
story pacing is decent nothing to fast and slow pace
with gacha is fun and the cake in this story is not a lie
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Story so far is well done. The plot moves at a natural pace, the battling is well described (and getting better). The characters development is quick (but still natural) and r-18 doesn't involve plot so you can skip it if you want. Really well done.
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I love this story, it's the best Pokemon story with a female protagonist I've found so far.
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The story is a very fun read, even with the darker undertones it has. Grammar and writing style are very good, with no major continuity problems.
The reason I am only giving four stars is mostly pacing and in-world problems I had with the story. For pacing there is just no training. The main party trains sometimes a week before gyms, even though they should have around a year to finish the journey. There is just no reason for jumping from gym to gym. The cultivation aspect is fun, but runs into the same problem: an entirely unguided cultivator crossing 2 (maybe 3 depending on how we count) major realms in 2 weeks if I am counting correctly is really unrealistic.
The other problem stems from the worldbuilding of the law enforcement. According to the novel even if you are literally lethally wounded (happened in recent chapters) by an evil organization that everyone knows is evil, you can't really fight back in any way that causes lasting damage, or you get arrested. It's always weird for me when authors make the world far darker than in the original material indicated, but keep forcing the good guys into the same idealistic peacekeeping method. This also implies that the police force is ultra competent when pursuing the ''good'' guys, but utterly useless when chasing after the actual criminals. This hasn't appeared in this fic yet, but there are already underlying tones that point towards it, with the Jennys already interrogating the MC even when all she does is help them, while rocket attacks just continue.
Also just remembered that even with the really dark undertones it has the Pokemon Professors are still utterly incompetent. A few Rocket grunts are robbing pokemon from the proffessor, and he does nothing about it. There is no major penalty for criminals, so they could just go ahead and assasinate most pokemmon professors in a region, crippling any kind of research, and face no major consequences for it, and these professors have no strength or protection to do anything about it.
Altogether a fun and immersive read with deep character interactions, interesting concepts and a fun way of integrating cultivation into Pokemon. The fic is mostly slice of life, with great pokemon battles with awesome custom moves that actually push the bounderies of pokemon, varied teams for gym leaders so far and competent teammates and gym leaders. The only negatives are the selective incompetence of police, and unrealistically idealistic punishments for any ''good guys'' compared to the dark background of the fic, and some minor pacing problems.
Looking forward to the updates.
PS Wonder how Surge fight will go with his military background in war, his already established cruelty when the supposed rules already punished the MC for using a too powerful move.
PPS: The gatcha is entire comic relief with only 2 cultivation methods being pulled and a pokemon that seem to have mattered so far, out of like 30-40 pulls, so no need to worry about OP stuff from that.
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