So here my 2 cents on this story. In the beginning the chapters had a decent length to them and felt well paced but then the chapters took a very sharp decrease in length which in turn trough of the nice pace the beginning chapters had. It feels like we should be in the late 30s in chapters at most instead of at 71. My suggestion would be to set a word count and try to get chapters in that range. The combined chapeters should just be put under as one chapter for a start. I also feel the the MC should have asked way more questions about skills and it also seems pointless that he kept all those skill points just to spread them out like he did. I thought he was going to pick a few skills and pump them up as why else stock pile them? Any way, its an enjoyable read and I would would recommend anyone to give it a try.
A comedic take on an isekai+gamesystem+xianxia story which stops just shy of parody. Well writen, and interesting. I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes from here.
I guess I'll start off by admitting that I did not honestly believe I'd be able to get through all 71 chapters of this - but I did, because high chapter count aside, it was only about 62K in total and written in the sort of shallow, fast-paced way that makes it easy to just breeze through it instead of savouring the experience, as I would something truly good.
That is not to say that everything about this story is bad. However, I find myself agreeing with the comment left by another reader, Nulzilch, on Chapters 68 to 71: It's a bit boring, certain aspects of the world are inadequately explored, and the way cheats are used is nothing revolutionary. I didn't really care much for the characters or the setting, and the comedic aspects usually weren't all that funny either. I failed to find them... compelling, so to speak. Instead, I'm quite "meh" about most of this story.
Like other readers and reviewers have already pointed out, it's also an issue that the chapters keep getting shorter and shorter, and it feels as though the pacing gets progressively worse over time.
Another thing that I personally (and grammatically) took issue with was the multiple instances where "." ought to have been a ", ", like in this brief excerpt from chapter 11:
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"Come with me, Lai Peng." Clark said after he set his foot on the ground.
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Use a comma. "Come with me, Lai Peng, " Clark said...
All this aside, there was one genuinely funny moment in this story, and nothing that came after really managed to top it. And it was this, found at the very end of chapter 1:
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Something exploded atop the boy's head and the last thing he saw made him dumbstruck on the spot.
"Truck-kun?" This was his last thoughts before the world turned dark.
GAME OVER.
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And had this story moved on to become a genuine parody, I do believe I would have enjoyed it far more than I did this.
It's a decent read, so give it a chance.
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So here my 2 cents on this story. In the beginning the chapters had a decent length to them and felt well paced but then the chapters took a very sharp decrease in length which in turn trough of the nice pace the beginning chapters had. It feels like we should be in the late 30s in chapters at most instead of at 71. My suggestion would be to set a word count and try to get chapters in that range. The combined chapeters should just be put under as one chapter for a start. I also feel the the MC should have asked way more questions about skills and it also seems pointless that he kept all those skill points just to spread them out like he did. I thought he was going to pick a few skills and pump them up as why else stock pile them? Any way, its an enjoyable read and I would would recommend anyone to give it a try.
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a mix of fast-paced and slow-paced writing blended together with the unique choice of setting, love it
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A comedic take on an isekai+gamesystem+xianxia story which stops just shy of parody. Well writen, and interesting. I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes from here.
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I guess I'll start off by admitting that I did not honestly believe I'd be able to get through all 71 chapters of this - but I did, because high chapter count aside, it was only about 62K in total and written in the sort of shallow, fast-paced way that makes it easy to just breeze through it instead of savouring the experience, as I would something truly good.
That is not to say that everything about this story is bad. However, I find myself agreeing with the comment left by another reader, Nulzilch, on Chapters 68 to 71: It's a bit boring, certain aspects of the world are inadequately explored, and the way cheats are used is nothing revolutionary. I didn't really care much for the characters or the setting, and the comedic aspects usually weren't all that funny either. I failed to find them... compelling, so to speak. Instead, I'm quite "meh" about most of this story.
Like other readers and reviewers have already pointed out, it's also an issue that the chapters keep getting shorter and shorter, and it feels as though the pacing gets progressively worse over time.
Another thing that I personally (and grammatically) took issue with was the multiple instances where "." ought to have been a ", ", like in this brief excerpt from chapter 11:
"Come with me, Lai Peng." Clark said after he set his foot on the ground.
Use a comma. "Come with me, Lai Peng, " Clark said...
All this aside, there was one genuinely funny moment in this story, and nothing that came after really managed to top it. And it was this, found at the very end of chapter 1:
Something exploded atop the boy's head and the last thing he saw made him dumbstruck on the spot.
"Truck-kun?" This was his last thoughts before the world turned dark.
GAME OVER.
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