For the introdution of the MC and the way they got reincarnated, I think the old one did it fine. Not ground breaking but good enough so the reader get the gist of things.

Overall, good story. Good character with an interesting way to introduce them. MC is sorta dumb in the old version, (im hoping that Zin make a development on that part now that they had a chance to rewrite this)

That being said, there also exist some anime trope that also think that could use a change.

So far, I like the pacing. It doesn't suffer the same issue it has in the old version as the story is too fast at some point. Now every thing is going at normal pace.

Looking back, the interaction of character is kinda short for some character. Now here, author does make a longer conversation which in my opinion makes a better connection for the MC to everyone else.

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I do hope the war arc takes a longer time to come and both mc's body had the chance to be prepare

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And that's all I can compliment or complain as of the time. Now write more for me Zinless, or I will write my own MC with mutiple bodies story.

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Corty

Status: chapter 34: perfect student

Sep 27, 2024

An interesting, unique, and well-executed twist on being reincarnated. We get one, well, two protagonists this way, and the way it shows us how it really feels to exist in two bodies is what makes it extra fun to read.

There are many cultivation stories where the MC uses clone bodies, but we never really see how that would function or just get some generic method copied from Naruto. That is not the case here.

The whole premise is well thought out and built up nicely and although it is still early in the story, I have confidence that it will work out just fine, because the quality of the story and writing is superb.

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Advancer362

Status: chapter 53: tired from waiting

Nov 15, 2024

Compared to the previous draft, this is far, FAR better. I love it, even more so than I did before. The interactions, povs, are much better, much more human.

The pacing has improved, extremely so. The previous draft felt a bit too fast, too rushed to get to the action. Now, there's more suspense, hype.

This is an overall improvement to the story. And once again, as a sucker for these unique premises, one of the few times I gave a review.

The world feels much less black and white now, something I am appreciative of. And I hope this grayness continues, to display a living world.

My heart is in a state of turmoil when I realized I caught up. I need MORE!

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AresianEuropa

Status: chapter 33: recovering

Sep 26, 2024

One of the few stories (that I know) where this kind of unique genre with multi-body protags are executed well. I'd say it redeems itself well with the new writing styles that have evolved from the original draft, as all of the characters now feel more developed as a whole, and the narratives introduced have made the story more encouraging/interesting to read. Recommended for those that want a somewhat light-hearted isekai adventures with a unique fun twist in mind!

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Creo

Status: chapter 38: a lost war

Oct 9, 2024

My 2 pet peeves as of ch. 38 are syntax errors which make it a bit hard to read (and most can be fixed via a syntax checker) and Karyb and Feyt's family treating each other as equals which is weird for a noble and commoners to do as I would expect more authority from a duke.

Great, funny, very original story otherwise. Character interactions are compelling and fun, borrowing Corty's words, the twist is interesting, unique, and well-executed, the MC is fun to observe. 9/10 which I'm sure will become solid 5/5 with time

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