Surprisingly well-written, Deshy! Congratulations on pursuing what makes you happy. Not everyone has the privilege to do so, so please cherish your creations. :) That said, I have some constructive criticism that I hope will help improve the quality of your work. The synopsis is 50% amazing, 50% "meh." What you’ve done really well is introduce the plot with a neat excerpt that summarizes the story nicely! However, from there, you provide way too many detailed explanations and foreshadows of what’s to come in the novel. For me, this somewhat took away the excitement of reading and following the story, as I felt like I had read almost the entire plot within the synopsis. Additionally, please fix the grammar in the synopsis and avoid repeating the same information multiple times. :D Now, coming to the important part - the chapters themselves. While I haven’t read past chapter 3 (there are 11 released as of now), I’ve noticed a common trend in your writing that I’d like to comment on. The writing itself, especially the internal monologues and emotions, is captured well. Personally, though, I would prefer a more conventional writing style in some parts, as certain sections feel like something you might write in an English exam. This occasionally kills the vibe for me. However, this could also be a matter of personal preference, as the tone and register don’t quite match what’s typically used in novels of this genre. Additionally, some parts of the story (up to where I’ve read) feel rushed, almost as if you’re not fully engaging with the writing. Certain details also seem out of place, as if they were added purely for the reader’s context but don’t actually contribute much to the story itself. Despite these minor critiques, I’ve really enjoyed my read so far and am excited to see where you take the story. I have high hopes and look forward to following your journey (as a reader). Cheers! :D

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