The story is pretty good so far but you should focus more on the MC. The POV is changing so much at one point that we don’t even know what the actual f*ck is going on.
could be better. Very short chapters with so many things happend and MC accepted everythink pretty fast, so straight while I trying to imagine. It feels like a summary of huuugee story.
In my opinion; if you want to keep chapters short, then you should arrange it that way, you cant just cut a chapter to three chapters, there could be soo much beautiful details about high-world with different races from other fictions, it could be interesting but from first chapter to 27 (where I dropped) I couldnt find a moment to imagine while MC gets stronger in every line senselessly and no tension at all.
It all started after I received that weird email…
What? Click the boxes to select the body type?
Want me to select a starting point?
Let me put in the name and be done with this, it’s getting late…
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The story is pretty good so far but you should focus more on the MC. The POV is changing so much at one point that we don’t even know what the actual f*ck is going on.
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So far it has been a good start. I'm liking what is written and I can't wait for more.
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Follow our (very) op MC that finds himself in a new world, with stronger humans, monsters and giant creatures.
Very short chapters but story is fast paced as well.
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could be better. Very short chapters with so many things happend and MC accepted everythink pretty fast, so straight while I trying to imagine. It feels like a summary of huuugee story.
In my opinion; if you want to keep chapters short, then you should arrange it that way, you cant just cut a chapter to three chapters, there could be soo much beautiful details about high-world with different races from other fictions, it could be interesting but from first chapter to 27 (where I dropped) I couldnt find a moment to imagine while MC gets stronger in every line senselessly and no tension at all.
Best wishes for author.
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