Max Jones. Playboy, Philanthropist, and most importantly a Hedonist. As a human, he chased all of the joys he could in life, not afraid to experiment with new avenues of pleasure. However, when one venture led to his untimely death, he suddenly awoke to his vision being just dirt and air, with darkness stretching on beyond that. What would become of him now, when the world he knew and the body he was so familiar with becomes a thing of the past?
This is my submission for the Adventum contest. I am using the theme reincarnated as a dungeon core.
The story is pretty good but seems to be in indefinite haitus but is interesting. the main character is not a bis*xual turned into a women's body (starting to get old and seemingly more trans than bi and more lesbian but most seem to not connect the dots) or futanari (which is basically a women with a d*ck but They're still a women? Confusing?) but is a dungeon which means they're endless possibilities of gender identity and s*xual identity and it seems that most of these kinda of stories are all yuri and lesbian and the men are just not the focus in love? And are just s*xual and leftovers. Which is confusing are they bi or bi-curious or are they trans and lesbian but just a tiny bi or pan. Maybe there's a label for that. Arghh! So confusing. is this a Bi spectrum thing? Well I'm ranting and this story made me question a lot... wish everyone makes it clear how bi their characters are like from 1/10 jk. Edit: maybe bi-gender and pan-gender or somewhere close to pan but more attraction to women and more gender fluid. Or just always questioning? And even on the non-binery spectrum???
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Honestly, a pretty good start. It could definitely use an editor or two, but overall the grammar is pretty good. The story starts off slow, we’ll have to see how it develops. I can’t wait to see what this author does!
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