Its so Good I read everything in 2 days.

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ok the good is that overall therir aren’t to many mistakes in english now for everything wrong

first and easily the worst. You have all of dc to explore and you choose generic hidden monster world there are countless of these and they are beyond stale

next you have all the charecters in dc and you choose some ocs with the charecter of wet cardboard 

then we got the “relationship” with generic elf a. They have known each other like a month and are completely ok with being magically linked to each others mind. Is she two because otherwise no one would feel comfortable with the actual mind  control. (Just because some one can break away doesn’t make putting emotions into people less mind control)

finally the open relationship. They are terrible just the worst had one in real life wanna know a secret everyone got jealous they were just awful being single is a much more pleasant experience. Stick with friends with benefits don’t catch feelings. My real problem though is how he gleefully told her it was fine that she continues literally whoring herself out if they start a closer relationship. That’s not hyperbole that’s how the conversation started she sold herself to him for some dumb statue.

speaking of his statues the concept that his artistry makes him special in a world where people can spend thousand of years on a hobby is just laughable 

maybe it gets better after chapter 20 I doubt it the problems I have seen pretty intrinsic to the story  or in the case of the open relationship you seem to have a problem with harems  instead of writing a meaning ful relationship or a string of them you make the same mistakes of a harem in having the girls be bland show pieces except the MC is just a cuck.

that wasn’t hyperbole your charecter is a pathetic cuck. He is pathetic because he latches onto a woman he doesn’t know the slightest thing about because she’s hot. He’s a cuck because he endorses a woman he is interested in to go get laid by other dudes. That’s the pathetic stuff this charecter does when he is playing a game 

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This story is one that brings me joy like actual joy but it also gets me deep in the feels and I'm not afraid to admit iv cried during some of the more emotional or just plain epic moments. This is the type of story that even though you don't see a notification it has a new chapter you check just in case I'll probably never be able to forget this story as it is without a shadow of a doubt the greatest story iv read. 

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This novel made me imagine if I have the dream engine of my own, what kind of setting iam gonna use, best VR story that I have read so far

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The relationship ruined it for me the MC and his girls are in a open relationship meaning they can screw other people outside the relationship as much as they want. Friends with benefits would be better even if not by much, but these are supposed to be love interests. How am I suppose to take the romance seriously when the love interests where probably riding another dude just an hour or two before? To me it makes the interactions feel disingenuous. It doesn't help that MC is pretty much forced to accept the polyamory by one of his support AI and he's just ok with it.

The author uses the excuse that the MC and most of the women are not human and that is why they like having s*x with whoever they want. What about the ones who are human? They all just so happen to also be polyamorous? To me it just feels like nobody is loyal, making it hard for me to begin to care about them. Anytime a love interest appears old or new It's hard to stay interested. If the MC had just one girl devoted solely to him I could accept the relationship.

Despite the fact that the author says that the romance is not a big part of the story, it really is even if only 10% of the story is romance that is still over 150, 000 words and some chapters are full of it. It just kind of drags down the rest of the story. You can't ignore it, because the romance comes up over and over again anytime they appear. 

The rest of the story is pretty good, my favorite part is that he can turn in to a lizard man. Most stories if they can transform it's always werewolves or dragons. I can tell the author has a lot of talent, the chapters are pretty well written and tend to be around 10k - 20k words each. The fight scenes are fun and the characters are well written. I would love it if the romance was different or just plain gone, but I've been burned by stories before and now it's hard to trust that we won't see a love interest screwing another dude.

If you can get past that you will probably love it.

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This story is amazing.

1. Chapters are huge

2. Characters feel real (not one dimensional on reasons for doing something and when someone likes or dislikes someone you have a pretty good idea of why that is the case)

3. Story seems cohesive (I cannot find any flaw without actually trying to find a flaw, which I have not done as that seems like a waste of my time)

The main character is not afraid of killing without falling down the murder spree rabbit hole that seems to happen a lot in novels

The main character is kind of treating the world like a real-world and behaving like a non-insane adult, Which I think is a good idea as I cannot imagine how someone could go into a full dive VR game and happily be an ass and murder people left and right, when the world based on your senses, is no different from your original world (and frankly I am not sure if the author is planning on keeping the world as just a game but if I actually think about what it would take to make a full dive VR game that has a universe alongside multiple realities (so multiple universes) I cannot imagine it being anyway feasible anytime soon, so I am pretty sure the world is actually real)

When the main character started having s*x I was a little apprehensive as a very high majority of stories go down the drain when s*x comes into play, as that suddenly becomes the main focus and you are just reading smut (which if I wanted that I can go to sites specifically for that) but I am happy to see that the s*x is not a big focus and did not lower the quality of the story

I honestly am not sure how I feel about the willingness to have s*x with multiple people, my main concern with regards to that (assuming everyone already knows you will not stick to one person (so no cheating)) is getting an STD which I honestly do not think any of the characters seem like the type of people who would have one and I am sure you can magic it away, but that brings to question if magic exists why can't there be magic viruses? Or a magic STD virus? So that concern will always be there as I do not realisticly think it is a good idea to be willing to have s*x with a bunch of people even in a magic society as I see no reason that viruses also could not use magic to where you cannot just magic them away

It is also nice that the main character is not an "everything with a vagina belongs to me" type of person, and can actually have a functioning relationship  with a male, and a functioning nons*xual relationship with a female

Basically not an Isakei protagonist (and as this is taking a while I will stop here)

Edit 1. It is also nice that the main character is not a person who wants multiple people but refuses to let any of them see another person if they want (so again not a wish fulfillment Isakei protagonist)

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Great novel so far, an awesome idea with amazing execution. My only problem are the slight spelling mistakes, such as your instead of you're. Or que instead of queue, due instead of do, which i've only seen once. The spelling mistakes are only minor and don't take anything away from the story, and could be understood since you post chapters that are ~10, 000 words frequently. Keep up the great work.

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This story is so awesome, I finally made an account just so I can say how awesome it is.

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Happy 50! This story is so great. I love seeing the magical side of the DC universe through the authors eyes. The changes that the author made to cannon make sense in story, and the characters feel real, with believable motives and with good character development.

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It's worth reading.

This would be the only thing I wrote if I didn't see people doing reviews but reading less than half without even reaching certain points that made their outrage just stupid.

Are you dissatisfied with virtual reality? Read more.

Fulfillment of desires? Read more

Cuckold?... Read the damn definition of a cuckold and don't be silly. The type of relationship is already indicated in the synopsis. 

Not to mention a warning, have you ever seen a man who offered to marry every girl he had s*x with or just talked to? I'm talking about reality, not a whole bunch of fictional characters who might be doing this.

This is a slow work in terms of plot development, revealing the character of the protagonist and answering questions. But the fact that it is slow does not mean that there is no development and change.

I'm on chapter 130+ right now. And I am glad that I read this work. This is the best fanfiction I have ever read. And I want to see how this story ends.

I only noticed 2-3 plot errors in the whole story (unused elements) (shaogoroth creation, wings from "adaptation" (from dream), dominance (from dream/debatable)). There are 2 more possible mistakes from the chat: cosmic awareness (error with cd) + the attitude of hawks to the creation of N-metal (question for canon experts).

For 1.5 million words, there are only 5 errors that can still be challenged. This is rare and worthy of respect.

Advice to readers. Each chapter is approximately equal to 4-5 regular size chapters. Read the work at least up to the Rolf Desk Master, and then draw your own conclusions. The only part that confuses people is the romantic relationship of the protagonist, everything else in the work is almost perfect.

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