So, a 2-star rating - must mean it's bad right? Surprisingly both yes and no.

It is "properly written" as in the text flows well and the grammar is good.

The system is quite tailored, but not really playing a role in the story - It lies unused until it needs to appear. There's barely any fighting, as it's not really an action novel - which is fine, especially since there are no random annoying bonus thugs introduced for no reason. Fights just happen when a problem needs to be solved.

No, the problem which makes this a 2-star goes deeper. The stupid way this is written from start to finish.

Let's just put a few of the following points into perspective:
Another world > s*xmancer (power from lewding girls) > Make a brothel? > Make your harem work in brothel?
Ok, that's weird and won't really work, next:
ALL demi-humans are subhuman slaves and monsters > Let's make a monster harem > Let's make a monster brothel > Let's buy slaves > Let's feel bad about them being slaves > Let's have the girls fall in love with MC for... quite bland reasons? > Let's give the MC pseudo-mind-control powers and let him be OVERLY self-conscious about it > Let's say "I don't deserve you" every chapter.
Ok, there are about 10 things wrong there, so let's unwrap. Why have non-humans be subhuman trash in society when you're gonna have a 90% non-human harem and "brothel staff"? It might sound "convincing for the plot", but it's really just useless and serves no purpose.
Why have them all be slaves or worse and have MC buy them or save them if he's going to act as he does after the fact? In fact, he SHOULD act like that as what he's doing is just as bad as what he thinks it is. He's literally buying slaves and grabbing poor people off the street, feeding them, and having s*x with them, in that order.
There's also serious confusion up to this point what the point of some stuff is. The system is probably going to be useless due to low action, which makes it mostly pointless. "Romance-Harem-Pornnovel" doesn't really mix. choose 2 out of 3, but never all of them, It's like water and oil, they look quite similar, but they're totally not the same, and any interaction between them gets awkward real fast.
Why even add the "suggestive mind control" into the story if the main character is going to be a bitch about it? It just falls into the "nono" category of stuff you should avoid in literally any and every novel type.

Basically what I mean to say is this: You created a story where the MC is self-conscious about his every action, feeling that he's useless trash that no one can like while EVERYONE loves him. Every girl in the story is considered to be subhuman trash, either a slave, a thief, about to be executed or in a similarly sh*tty situation before the MC "Heroically comes to the rescue", charms them up, s*xes them, and then feels self-conscious about having s*xed someone who struggled to eat bread 2 days earlier.
Did that make sense to anyone? Well, I hope it didn't.

What I think you should've done: Have the MC explore the world a bit from the start. Find his harem members through journey instead of search and perhaps split the brothel and the harem into 2 categories. Make the society a mix of races rather than human superiority. Written the relationship parts in a more lighthearted/comedic way just like you did with the king.

The reason it's not a good novel even though it could easily qualify for one is that you built it on a house of cards. Every ground pillar of the story is so fragile that you have to balance all the aspects you want in the story, such as Brothel/System/Relationship/Morals/Story progression on a tightrope when in reality you should've never included some of them from the start.

The main quirk of this should be the brothel, but how is this going to function in 50+ more chapters? Is he just going to buy more slaves, s*x them, and put them to work like it's normal? I think the brothel part of this story is where the main problem is. It's impossible to write, weird to read and there's no long future to it. TL;DR: It's got a good flow to it and is well-paced, everything else is just built to collapse due to the world it's written in and how the main premise completely clashes with the genres of the novel.

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While a general rule I’ve set for myself has been to read at least 10 chapters, I feel I have enough info to form an opinion. If anything, I’ll come back and update my review at a later date if I feel it’s necessary  

I can easily say I’ll continue reading. The author has an interesting take on the isekai genre and has decided to take their time building their world with the first bunch of chapters. I look forward to what the author will be putting out for their story. My only issue with the story is that it feels a bit like wish fulfillment/a self-insert MC. I’m not criticizing the author for this, just pointing out that that’s one of my biggest takeaways so far.

My main qualms with the story have more to do with the technical side of things. Some awkward sentences, tense change problems, and possibly a lack of editing passes before posting chapters have left some typos and misused words behind. These are all fixable and a natural part of any authors growth in the craft. 

I will also point out for the author, be wary of how your describe your characters, both male and female. I can see that giving in depth descriptions will be necessary for the future of the story, but being mindful doesn’t ever hurt anyone. Make your characters actual people, regardless of gender or how they identify, and your story will be enriched for it. 

Also, I hope you kill Kamil down the line. But that’s the grim dark fan in me. Lol. 

You’re doing something right so far. Keep doing it and your story will be fine. 

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Hello author, the story has followed a very interesting pace I hope great adventures.

The only sadness is the low frequency of releases, other than that it has been a lot of fun so far.

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I really really really like the story.I'm not good at reviewing something. But this one is good!

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Writing could use a second pass, but there isn't many mistakes that will make you stop if you have read stuff online for any amount of time. Fresh perspective, nice writing style, all status boxes are on their respective places. Very readable.

Prologue length was nice, not too short not too long, and it managed to introduce the system and world concisely. I can only hope that the actual main story is also like this, not rushed while also not dragging.

If I had to find an issue, it would be the writing speed. :/

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There isnt alot of chapters yet, but it's looking promising!

The same (transported to another world with game mechanics) that we have all seem, but with a few changes to spice it up. The only thing that I have to

criticize is the weird agression of the boy to the teacher in chapter 5. It felt very forced.  

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