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Overpowered Death Mage In Another World
Overpowered Death Mage In Another World
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In a world of VR-MMORPG, I am feared as Death Mage. In the biggest war of VR history I died pathetically at the beginning of the battle but instead of respawning, I'm thrown into a different world.

Wait, I am in my game avatar with all the skills and max level. What? My level is far greater than people of this world.

Along with my servant Amelia, Village girl Myra, Adventurer Claire, and other beauties, I'll start my adventure and build my own empire.

Note: This is my first novel, there might be some mistakes. Feel free to give suggestions and constructive criticism is appreciated.

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ActionAdultAdventureFantasyHaremIsekaiLitRPGMatureRomance
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Adventurers Alternate World Antihero Protagonist Aristocracy Beautiful Female Lead Dungeons Fantasy World Game Elements Gore Guilds Handsome Male Lead Kingdom Building Kingdoms Male Protagonist Marriage Multiple POV Necromancer Older Love Interests Overpowered Protagonist Polygamy Protagonist Strong from the Start Ruthless Protagonist Sword And Magic Transported into Another World
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  1. Chapter 26Aug 24, 2020
  2. Chapter 25Aug 20, 2020
  3. Chapter 24Aug 12, 2020
  4. Chapter 23Aug 10, 2020
  5. Chapter 22Aug 9, 2020
  6. Chapter 21Aug 1, 2020
  7. Chapter 20Jul 29, 2020
  8. Chapter 19Jul 27, 2020
  9. Chapter 18Jul 24, 2020
  10. Chapter 17Jul 22, 2020
  11. Chapter 16Jul 19, 2020
  12. Chapter 15Jul 17, 2020
  13. Chapter 14Jul 14, 2020
  14. Chapter 13Jul 11, 2020
  15. Chapter 12Jul 10, 2020
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      Seems interesting, I hope this wont turn into hardcore smut with s*x scenes every chapter because that would literally suck. I dont mind some once in a while but too much will kill the novel and dont , for the love of this good start, make every girl he meets fall for him.

      Anyway keep the good work :) !

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      Pimgd
      Status: chapter 5

      The writing is... bad, in multiple ways.

      The plot consists of an Overlord copy at the start. I think too much is copied; rather than being inspired by Overlord, I feel the author copied sections whenever they weren't sure on how to proceed.

      As a result, you have the first female subordinate, which is human, yet she treats other humans as an inferior race. Why? Because that's what Overlord characters did. 

      Supposedly, the novel takes its own path later on. I guess you can treat this as "reimagined fanfiction" and it will work. Ainz doesn't exist, the world is actually different in a few ways, etc.

      The other side of the bad writing is in the actual phrasing of situations. This could be my personal preference, so I'll show an example.

      Spoilers for chapter 4.

      Spoiler

      The next morning I was sitting in the dining room having breakfast. There was some kind of pork dish with bread it looked somewhat luxurious according to the standard of the village. I guess they are not holding back to treat their savior well.

      "I haven't formally introduced my self yet. I am Lyla Lockwood and this is my daughter Myra Lockwood, " milf blondie said with a smile.

      "Hello, I am Myra Lockwood, nice to meet you, " Myra said.

      "No need to stand on ceremony beautiful ladies can call me Max, " I winked at her causing her to blush.

      I could feel the burning gaze of Amelia piercing my back. Ah, little flirting with other women can make her jealous.

      "I have decided to make this village my territory and you will be acting chief when I am not around, " I pointed at Lyla.

      "How could I take this responsibility it's too much of a burden for me. Besides, you have to convince villagers, " she said with fluttering eyes.

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      What's going wrong here, in my opinion, is that the author has the right phrases, but not the right execution.

      "There was some kind of pork dish with bread it looked somewhat luxurious according to the standard of the village."

      This sentence doesn't flow well to me. It's missing commas and may need to be split up.

      ""I haven't formally introduced my self yet. I am Lyla Lockwood and this is my daughter Myra Lockwood, " milf blondie said with a smile.
      "

      "my self", could be "myself", but whatever. Labelling her as "milf blondie" is just lazy writing on the authors part. Or maybe just disgusting objectification, your choice.

      The most damning section has to be the last bit:

      ""I have decided to make this village my territory and you will be acting chief when I am not around, " I pointed at Lyla.

      "How could I take this responsibility it's too much of a burden for me. Besides, you have to convince villagers, " she said with fluttering eyes."

      This is completely devoid of emotion.

      I guess the protagonist is casually tossing the position at Lyla. But her response feels like a draft. There is no shock, no surprise, no pause, just an immediate refusal. On weird grounds too - "too much of a burden" - is the job of acting chief a tough job?

      Another reason is added: "you have to convince villagers". It's not even a full sentence.

      Now, normally, or at least on popular novels, you'll see typo comments that point this sort of thing out. But there's too many of these "draft lines".

      Just in Chapter 4 we find...

      "Later villagers were gathered in open ground, I think this is usually where important announcements are made."

      "People started to discuss among them some were supported and some were hesitant."

      ""He's right he is the one who saved us. He is powerful mage worthy of our loyalty, " one guy on crowd said."

      The reason I'm hammering on this so much is that when you decide to copy (or be heavily inspired by) another novel, you need to nail the execution. The plot has already been penned for you. You just have to make the small adjustments to slot your own character in. There's tons of Harry Potter fanfiction out there, and it's fine, because in each of those stories, you can get lost in a world of magic.

      This novel isn't like that. I constantly trip over lines that outline the story rather than tell it.

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      MrCrazy
      Status: chapter 9

      I like the concept of the story but the romance and some of his actions are cringy. His servant is great, her feeling carried over from game world and make sense. The mother is f**ked, her husband that she had been with for at least 18 years died and not even 12 hours later she is acting like a blushing mess and holding hands with MC. Like wtf. Im not saying she should reject him given the time period but no way should she be liking him so soon. The daughter is all over the MC by the second night, sleeping in the same bed as him.

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      Yurekli_Kedi
      Status: chapter 12

      A novel with a good main plot. It delivers pretty much everything it promises. There are some inconsistencies in the behaviours of the characters in a few cases. Furthermore narrative and depictions are not perfect, and if you are bothered by grammatical errors, even though most of the sentences with them are comprehensible, beware that there are quite a lot of them- important edit here, errors get very scarce after the 12th chapter. But with time I am sure the author can improve the story and his skills. Aside from those probably temporary issues, there is an interesting plot. And as a personal opinion, as far as I have read, even though I don't like the idea of it very much, the harem kept on slowly intensifying. So in the future you will probably get captivated by this story if you are a harem fan. And accompanied by author's growth, this story might just turn into gold. I recommend that you read it

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      Melkord
      Status: c0

      great job the begining is intersting and promise a lot  but just is the begining so I don´t have much to say but good start

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      BRENYNW
      Status: Chapter 26

      Why did you stop making chapters. It is a great story.

      It starts out like an Overlord takeoff, which is fine. Kind of interesting to say the least. I am glad that you pulled away form that though. It added a better vibe. Setting the MC up for a war with the noble is an amazing touch. If you were still writing I would have added this to my daily list to check on new chapter releases.

      I believe that as a reader it is a very good start.

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