Not a hate comment mostly, didn't read that far to form a real opinion, but from the very first section everyone is like : they have returned, why did they return, return this, return that. Like, they didn't return. Somehow not a single person has gone into this small piece of land that has been considered forbidden or something, and when some kids come into that place and find people living there, why does everyone say they have returned? Nobody returned. It's like if you broke into someone's house, left and then everyone starting shouting about a neet returning into the world, wtf?

Also, they didn't do anything really impressive to those kids, just sent some cool air and they sh*t themselves, like really?

Also, this "millions of years" is literally an incomprehensible amount of time. Saying some one lived that time, spending most of it in complete isolation (not all) is so stupid (and it's not like they cultivated or meditated for that time from what was said). And do not go with the "but they are cultivators!". They behave like humans, talk, flirt, etc like everyone else. They do not behave like beings who lived more then ten thousand lifetimes. At all. They are basically gods (and I do not mean the powerless ones depicted in most stories). Gods transcend human understanding and to try to confine them to a humans understanding is a folly.

The story would loose nothing and would be way more realistic if they were, maybe, a few thousand years old. From the reaction of the people we can assume cultivators don't really love long lives or they would not react to them the same way, and making them millions of years old doesn't even get you any significant "historical" leverage, because any information from that time would become completely and utterly useless. Like what use would be knowing which neanderthal tribes lived where in today's world? None.  So just reducing the length of time for a factor of like 100 would make the story make at least some semblance of some sense. 

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save your time, good premise, and starts off ok, but it quickly devolves into random AI slop.

there are a bunch of chapters that are just repeating chapters worded differently.

this is not even AI assisted, I think it is likely all just AI output copy and pasted.

my suggestion to the poster, is to take this as an outline of a story, pick out the plot points you want, and then actually write the story.

would have loved for this to have been a decent story, good GL cultivation stories are rare.

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