The story has an ok premise but poor execution. The grammar and spelling are fine. No major errors and easy to understand. The world building is ok, lots of holes but still early in the story so maybe they could be filled in as the story progresses further. The characters are VERY lack luster and underdeveloped. They all seem to be just there. The MC is just a murder hobo. The level system in the story needs to be developed more as it is, it just feels too out of place and not fleshed out with what it really does for the MC. Yes it makes him stronger but have it defined better in the worlds type of strength. It almost feels like the “system” gives the MC his own type which really breaks story feel. Better planning of the flow of the story could help as some plot points and character interactions feel forced.

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