She was my childhood friend...
After we both entered high school. I finally noticed that I fell in love with her.
I was so happy when she felt the same. But we had to hide our relationship because of my family.
From that day we became a couple. But now a lot of terrible things are happening. Like how one of my close friends died by getting stabbed.
I need to figure out who is the culprit behind everything. I hope my hunch isn’t right.
Theme: Organized crime
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This novel is my entry for the Metus contest.
A story of a seemingly clueless protagonist being isolated by her yandere girlfriend. My Evil GF has a fitting dark comical vibe throughout the story thus far and has the potential to become a gem. I for one find this kind of story fun and cheery while having the undertone of sin floating throughout the air. I hope the writer dives deeper into the psychological as the story reaches its further chapters.
There are critical grammatical errors that do need to be sharped up to help this gem continue to shine. At times, the dialogue tends to come off as unnatural which could potentially break the immersion of the reader. So, I suggest taking a few extra moments to fix the chips in the reading for better flow.
All in all, I recommend this story so far for someone who wants to enjoy an interesting slice of life tale with characters who all seem to have unique backgrounds.
I, for one, hope to explore where this fun yet dark rabbit hole spirals as the directions this story could unfold are still endless.
Thank you for your time.
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