Just created a list about some of the characters and their
descriptions. Some of the stuff is copied from the book, so I apologize for
inconsistency with grammar (will look into improving it in the future.) There
are or might be some spoilers. Ps if you find something wrong or missing, point
it out, and I will try to fix them. Hopefully, it will be helpful.
MC – Dark Soul
"Aile
White" / Shadow - He had a natural wavy black hair. His eyes were
mat-black with a circle of white at the centre, around the iris. Realistic
snake tattoo on his body and a tattoo of man in dark colour with red veins at
his chest.
Duke White
He has short brownish-black hair, dark green eyes, a small
moustache and a well-kept goatee. He
looks like he is in his mid-thirties. He had an average build and is usually
dressed in a long black overcoat with red patterns on it. He looks very high
class.
Hazel
A beautiful young woman. She had purple eyes, beautiful long jet-black hair and a
proportional face with a tinge of red, making her appear very charming. (Duke
White's wife?)
Sara
The
beautiful childhood friend of Aile, with purple eye and black curly hair-
shoulder length. (Hazel is her mother?)
Hunter
An old
man who follows duke white, the butler of duke mansion. A middle-aged man, with
a bit of silver in his hair. He had black coloured eyes with a bit of yellow
mixed with them, making his eyes look captivating. He had shoulder-length hair
and a bit of short stubble. His face had a friendly and inviting look. He was
taller than average. His clothing was a nice black suit knee-length, with gray
comfortable pants. He could be
considered an above-average, happy-looking middle-aged man.
Violet – Hunter's Daughter
A cold and aloof girl. She has black coloured eyes with a
bit of yellow and violet mixed with them, making them captivating. Her gaze was
cold. She has shoulder-length violet hair and a beautiful uniform and smooth
skin. She was older with a more mature body.
Marcus
A
mercenary, burly, eye patch on the right eye, if he could describe him in one
word, it would be menacing. He had a proportional face, but it had a few scars.
His hair wasn't too long and roughed up, he had a sharp gaze and a frown that
looked natural on his face. He had a strong muscular build highlighted by his
stretchy clothing. He didn't have any facial hair. If not for the scars on his
face, he could be considered handsome.
Maids
Aile's beautiful maid, she is an
orphan. She had a superb figure and an uplifting personality. She looked very
young; she appeared to be 18 years old.
Aile's maid, Diana, was Marcus's
wife, and they had been married for 2 years. She was beautiful; she had long
brown hair. Her eyes were royal blue, they could easily be mistaken for black.
However, if light directly hit them, they would show their beautiful blue
colour.
Children - Ellie and Danny
She had a little daughter
(Sophie); she seemed to be born 7 months ago. This was approximately the same
time as Aile and Sara.
She had an athletic build
highlighting her curves. She had reddish-brown hair tied in a ponytail, and she
had an icy personality. She contributed little to the conversation. She had
tight leather clothing, and if one looked at her, they would assume she was an
assassin.
Emily's daughter, she became
Aile's friend. She would spend all her time in Aile's room when it was her
mother's turn to take care of him. She like her mother did not like to talk too
much, she was very smart, and Aile enjoyed her company, as she did not act like
a child. She was called Sophie, and she was someone Aile adored very much.
Fiona was the young mercenary's
wife. They had just married for a day when he left on the mission with Marcus.
She looked very young. She had shoulder-length silver hair. She had light blue
eyes, her eyes had a bright gleam. From the way she talked, she seemed
confident and very smart. Fiona had a magnificent body, and she dressed in a
white dress, making her look very attractive. She seemed to have a lot of plans
to improve, gain power and not just stay as a maid.
Continuation of Part 1.
Xue
Aile saved her from Jack Oxe, Xue
was exquisite. She had beautifully braided brown hair, brown eyes and a cute
face. Xue had a fine-looking petite build and was wearing a charming red and
black dress. She looked around the age of 16. She looked like a modest person,
with many possible admirers and people chasing after.
Beshoy
A Bandit, Beshoy and his trusted
men, who are called "Team Eagle," are the maniacs that like to torture
and kill people. Beshoy was around 1.8 m tall. He had a small thin build. He
had black hair that was in the initial stages of boldness. His left cheek had a
burn mark, it made his left side of the face scrunched up, making it look like
it was stuck in a half winking state.
The King
He had slightly long black hair
with dark black eyes. He had a tall stature; he was physically large that gave
him an aura of authority. His movements were swift and with purpose. As soon as
he arrived, he swept his gaze, making eye contact with the nobles. His look was
very domineering and made everyone feel a sense of oppression.
Prince Yegon
–Fat tourist – friends with Aile
they spread rumours
Princess Alice
Definition of Beauty, she wants
to be a bandit with Sara, close friends of Aile. Aile saved her at the northern
garden.
Duke Noland
He has crusty yellow teeth. He was a short chubby man that
was middle-aged but had an ancient aura about him. If one looked at him, they
could immediately see a person with a lot of history and secrets. His face,
character and demeanour said something mysterious about him. Two Daughters
Laila and Leia.
Laila
A
beautiful countenance, dressed in a purple dress moved ahead with grace. Her
feet barely left the ground as she moved towards the noble and Aile. Her
beautiful lifeless eyes looked ahead, as Laila walked forward in a determined
fashion. She did not have much emotion visible on her face. Only showing a
slight smile. Her crystalline greyish iris and serious face showed a resolution
to go ahead. As she walked, her dark brown hair gently danced.
Leia
A beautiful
girl resembling Laila, she wore a multi-coloured skirt and vibrant articles of
clothing. She too had beautiful brown hair resembling Laila. Her eyes seemed
black, with a tinge of brown in them.
Zero -
One -
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Three -
Four -
Just going to be brutally honest. For all that there's a decent plot here, there are an absurd amount of 2-dimensional leaps in logic. Weirdly uncomfortable dialogue and a mix of either too detailed thoughts that drag things out or too vague thoughts that gloss over personality and leave us with 2-dimensional characters. Both could probably be fixed by following the "show don't tell" saying. As with almost all reincarnation stories that don't time skip childhood, you'll find scenes where a small child is doing adult things like interacting with bandits and no one realized he's a child. In one case I'm sure they'll say its because he "made his voice deeper."... A child's attempt at making their voice deeper is laughable at best. And thats ignoring the size issue. So among that and other similar issues, it feels like the author is just rushing plot points rather than thinking about what would make sense. Lastly, the author goes on and on in comments where people say things similar to what I've mentioned about how chapters 1 through 30 are just him starting out and it gets better and more edited afterward, and how he'll eventually go back. One, it doesnt get much better afterward, two it doesn't really matter if it gets better afterward when the first part turns people away. So I'll say that unless the author isn't concerned about reader retention and is just writing to practice writing, they probably need to get their priorities sorted out.
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This novel is one I am looking forward to. With the inclusion of a reincarnated soul (though given memory block ugh) alongside noble intrigue, this is an interesting novel. The MC is always cautious and isn't prone to outbursts when things go his way. Instead he endures for the right moment to turn that situation into his advantage. I hope to read more.
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I like the background build of the story a lot, the character building is better than most novels, looking good so far!
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