Hmmm, aside from the smut scenes I'm enjoying this a lot. The smut scenes could use a little variation, instead of just a bunch of groaning (though in real life usually there's just a bunch of groaning depending on the partners involved) there could be a bit more action. When I say action, I mean really get into the nitty-gritty of the details. Sure, you could just slide right in, or you could slowly grind your way in, feeling every fold of flesh as the moist warmth takes you in (conversely, you could feel the heat slowly enter into you as the thick rod of flesh pushes its way deeper, stretching you little by little as it slides and buries itself in you). Something like that. Get more detailed with the smut, and you'll excite your readers.
Grammar: 4/5
Story: 3.5/5
Writing: 4/5
The grammar is fairly good, it could use a few variations on wording to make things easier to read (well, easier on the eyes, but word variation tends to make things more confusing if the reader isn't very versed in context reading). The story itself takes a trope and uses it as a bare-bones setup, which is very good, and takes us for a different kind of ride (though the smut seems essential to the story for the beginning it could have been executed better). The writing is nice, I can get a pretty good feel for the author's word flow (which usually takes about 15 chapters for me to get) so I started the review earlier than I usually would.
Overall, I really like where this is going, and look forward to reading more.
This novel has Tsundere, Yandere, Glasses Girl, Slut, Kuudere, Tall Girl, Tanned, Tomboy, MILF, Dark-Skinned, and lots more!!
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For three years Calix has suffered from the Backla
Hmmm, aside from the smut scenes I'm enjoying this a lot. The smut scenes could use a little variation, instead of just a bunch of groaning (though in real life usually there's just a bunch of groaning depending on the partners involved) there could be a bit more action. When I say action, I mean really get into the nitty-gritty of the details. Sure, you could just slide right in, or you could slowly grind your way in, feeling every fold of flesh as the moist warmth takes you in (conversely, you could feel the heat slowly enter into you as the thick rod of flesh pushes its way deeper, stretching you little by little as it slides and buries itself in you). Something like that. Get more detailed with the smut, and you'll excite your readers.
Grammar: 4/5
Story: 3.5/5
Writing: 4/5
The grammar is fairly good, it could use a few variations on wording to make things easier to read (well, easier on the eyes, but word variation tends to make things more confusing if the reader isn't very versed in context reading). The story itself takes a trope and uses it as a bare-bones setup, which is very good, and takes us for a different kind of ride (though the smut seems essential to the story for the beginning it could have been executed better). The writing is nice, I can get a pretty good feel for the author's word flow (which usually takes about 15 chapters for me to get) so I started the review earlier than I usually would.
Overall, I really like where this is going, and look forward to reading more.
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