The swarm.
A unitary force of countless entities.
Nightmarish creatures from the darkest depths.
All working towards a greater purpose.
Simply fulfilling their role in a complex system.
Abducted from the world I know I am now forced to become a part of this.
Forced to help these horrors to increase their power.
However, they are not mindless killers.
There might be a way for me.
I could influence them from the inside.
To prevent that anyone has to die.
To protect the ones I love.
Maybe I can adjust.
If not for the eggs.
I love the insectoid aesthetic, and hivemind that's been hinted at so far!
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After clickbaity "Eldritch" novel written by the same auhtor I am amuzed to see some actual character interaction and story.
The dialogue is still written in the most basic form of connotation lines, and is at times burdensome to get through, since there are no breaks in between not only sentences of the same characters, but even when they switch back and forth. I cannot stress it enough, that just by using proper writing techniques for dialogues this novel might become a leap better. Also, there's little point to repeat same points in the conversations between same characters - just make a summary instead of making characters do it.
I, generally, do not like a 1st person viewpoint since it limits what can be done in terms of character expression outside said viewpoint, and just jumping those back and forth doesn't help to preserve the structure. At this point, rather write from a 3rd person perspective, this way showing what different characters do at roughly same time is way easier.
The world so far seems decently thought out, so far (ch28). I have to say, it was nice for once to see a proper lord in charge, not your generic greedy fat bastard (c'mon, they always were a minority, if no one was there to do the job, then no country would've lasted). Even spoiled snobby nobles still could do their duties, at least so that their fief won't cease to exist, and as such - their wealth.
There was also a weird bit with MC still having skin over what is supposed to be an exoskeleton. I do not believe chitin would provide enough space for vascular system, and as such the skin would've died off. Except for joints, the exoskeleton tends to have very little openings, and squezing all of the necessary vasculatory vessels through joints would've quickly deteorated their outer walls. Considering I've seen some notice from author about descriptions of nudity (which is kind of questionable, considering this novel seems to aim at teenage auditory), having a feature-less outer structure sounds as a better choice over whatever mess it is supposed to be now. Especially with weapons embedded into that exoskeleton, I'm still confused, why would you have skin over it. This design makes sense on an arthropod (and is not even that incorrect for queens of some spicies to have some sort of self defence that is not reliant on drones), but not on a mammal.
But overall, it's decent and has potential to be polished into a better, more elegant and easier to comprehend structure. Maybe tone down the dialogues as well, as I mentioned, sometimes the same thing gets repeated multiple times, and is a potential time saver while writing. Making your characters' words count yet still forming into a proper live-like (I want to highlight "LIKE", as no dialogue in a book will ever be 100% what someome would say in real world, since our speech tends to have a lot of irrelevant or unimportant information, which in case of a written story just cripples the pacing) conversation is an important skill.
Edit: Repeating last! This review was deemed obsolete. Skthveraachk-thinker in charge has been compromised. Deviancy. Frenzy! Reassinging task to operable thinker-units. Informational value recalculated. New corrections introduced by thinkers of Skthveraachk-colony.
Formite colony represented has severe deviancy and frenzy implications introduced by foreign brooding queen. Suggested non-aggressive course of action: exile. Recommended - purge of all contaminants and units in direct contact to them. Afterwards! Quarantine of all units utilized for purge to prevent further spread of frenzy.
Recieved! Brooding queen is incapable of adaptation. Is deemed worthy by the War Queen of the Formicea-colony to accomplish her role. Inefficient. Drone deviancy rate too high.
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It's a very fun novel to read. Especially when we see the interactions between MC, swarm and humans. Very recommended.
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