At first I rated this story as four stars. It was initially a fun smut story.
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The first forty percent of the story is actually pretty good, but maligned by really bad syntax. Minus the poor grammar, spelling, and syntax errors that are a constant issue, everything else is sadly just true for the start of this one.
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The writer seems to refuse to proofread or do some self editing. Or hire one. They don't do that and it shows. It will often break you out of the story. There are many continiuty errors too and plotholes. Sometimes non-chapters are sprinkled in that once served the purpose of authors notes or opinion polling readers, but these could have just been made those things at the ends of chapters like everyone else does and now are just sloppily left in the chapters padding the count from 130 to 150. This is true throughout your read for aforementioned issues.
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The middle of the story is where it starts to take a turn for the worse.
It's mostly fluff you could skip and nothing would change. Despite the authors insistence that they are important, they really don't matter. There is also far too much monologue by everyone. Lots of talking and reiterating the same things over and over. Focusing on inconsequential pov's of side characters that display a lack of skill at weaving together multiple characters and a lack of understanding of characters types and qualities. Some hackneyed references to other works that are jarring to see and an a terrible lack of actual smut or progression. That's just the middle part of the novel.
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In the last half of the first novel it gets even worse. The protagonist feels like a side character and there's no smut or progression at all. Antagonist that are too powerful to have any right being around are amateurishly thrown in the story at a noobie prince that has no business facing them yet. All in some misguided sense of avoiding the common formula, but it is so unsatisfying to read that it doesn't even matter. It really killed this novel for me. What a terrible decision. The reason that protagonist at most will face an Antagonist that they can barely defeat or draw against is that it is more interesting to read. They still foreshadow stronger people. That's called world building. Sure there's strong people out there and the world doesn't revolve around your protagonist, but those things don't matter enough to focus on this much for a reason. The writer claims he's trying to be like a shounen, but it reads like a kids comic book at these sections. All the villains get away and succeed in their goal at that. So you have a smut novel with children's comic book moments and a writer thinking that's more realistic.
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