Born a man, Taylor, worked hard to achieve her dream of being a woman. Until she was brutally murdered by a transphobic group. Her tormented spirit was given a second life as a 'Vampiric Succubus' by a so-called death goddess named Izanami. She must overcome the trauma of her murder, learn how to accept her new reality, enjoy all the pleasures that come with the body she’s always wanted, and survive, for the world is not a game. Now, if only she could find a way around the pesky language barrier.
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This is my first attempt at writing a story. Check the Forward for details. Thank you for looking at my story, have a wonderful day! ^.^
P.S. If it's not clear in the blurb, this story will focus a lot on Lilith's mindest and dealing with the new world and her new self, emotions and what not that will go on as she tries to accept this new world, and come to terms with it as well has her powers, and the fact that she has, and will kill people.
I plan to experiment with a lot of things as I write, since this is my first story I really don't know what it feels like to write anything, so I'm going to try some of everything I can think of. From dark stuff touching upon horror, to light slice of life things, and whatever else comes to mind.
- (20) Girls’ Day OutJan 11, 2021
- (19) Two of a KindJan 11, 2021
- (18) Reflection of a MonsterDec 8, 2020
- (17) Hope for Happiness & Blind RevengeNov 24, 2020
- (16) Cafe DismayNov 21, 2020
- (15) Fallen God From Another RealmNov 12, 2020
- (14) “I like it when you smile, please don’t be scared.”Nov 17, 2020
- (13) Lilith used Seduce and it’s Super EffectiveNov 17, 2020
- (12) 1st, 3rd, 6th, 7th, 9th, 11thNov 10, 2020
- (11) Emerald Eyes [v11-08-20.3]Nov 6, 2020
- (10) Achievement Get! First SpellNov 2, 2020
- (9) “Welcome back, dear.”Oct 31, 2020
- (8) One Fuzzy Caterpillar & Two Mysterious Deaths, with a side of LunchOct 28, 2020
- (7) Should I Stay or Should I Go?Oct 25, 2020
- (6) Can’t Run Forever [v11-27-20.4]Oct 22, 2020
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Hiatus - Updated Jan 11, 2021
Last updated 3 years ago
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- 36 dropped
The story premise looks nice the story is heading a nice direction as well but the MC is portrayed as a mentally ill child, intentional or not I dont know?
The MC gets stuck in an unknown world and becomes careless and gets caught so they can do experiments on her, she escapes somehow by luck noone was watching her or the building she was in.. next she talks to her goddess and instead of asking for help or normal questions she throws a tantrum like a child.. after she escaped from her captors she spends 2 days playing with a RC car and a caterpillar that she finds cute and wants to pet all the while rambling nonsense in her mind about useless stuff and "memes" meanwhile her captors are looking for her.. then she gets a plot armor gift from the goddess and the MC spends a whole chapter on rambling internal thoughts like a mentally ill child. I could barely read through it
Note despite my complains I enjoy the story because I love succubi but the mental ramblings are serieusly offputting and annoying
One example
I can't help but 'Squee!' out loud, but... quietly. A soft squee of glee, mind ye! Ahem. Where was i? Ah yes. Magic Basics! Tutorials! Excite, Much, Very. Enough memes it seems my dream is real so I no longer feel so tragic, now onto the MAGIC!
That was a hard rhyme ok. Don't you shake your head at me, yes you, I see you. Erm, actually forget that. I didn't say anything. We were practicing magic! Yes! Exactly!
Here another:
'Since when were you careful since you got here?' my brain retorts to me immediately. Ok, sure, you got me brain, you're right, I'm a bumbling idiot, but you're the one controlling me so it's your job to not be dumb! Are you happy now? That's what I thought. Now we both just feel bad. Meanie.
As for you, yes you, reader! Don't say a word. I know I'm dumb, and I'm not talking to myself, you are. Pffffft~~! K.O. 4th Wall In my imagination a chibi version of myself punches through a small brick wall, collapsing it. 'Ok, Lilith, ' I think to myself, 'enough talking to your imaginary audience ok? FOCUS!'
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