Almost all the characters personalities are mostly completely different than what they were originally in Naruto. Not only that, but the dialogue also doesn't have any distinct personality either. They all pretty much talk the same lol. No idea if in future chapters MC actually has any real worthy opponents, but from what I've read so far MC doesn't break a sweat fighting anyone. However, some moments between MC and her harem girls are cute which does make you want to keep reading to see more interactions between them. Mediocre tho fr.

It's a VERY simple story where MC is EXTREMELY strong and gets girls.

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Commissar.Twin

Status: finished.

Jan 26, 2023

Alright, so, out of 5 stars, I rate this a 4.5-4.8. I don't really have any major criticisms other than the fight scenes becoming a bit boring. Just felt repetitive after a while and I just began skimming them to skip towards some character interaction or the more excitable events and fights.

So to properly begin:

The humor is top class, 5/5 hands down, no questions asked. I f**king love the humor and so far, this is the most hilarious fic I've read in this platform. Yunas personality makes it even better too, it goes so well and it's smooth af.

The characters are good. I've seen a few complaints about how these children are getting together and what not, but honestly, I don't understand it. If you want to complain about children getting together in f**king Naruto, then start complaining about how they're child soldiers. Raised to kill at birth, like bruh, they're probably more mature than we are since they probably get a confirmed kill when they're 14 during flipping peace times. Its just Lowkey fusterating hearing people say how the romance bugs them the wring way, and not how, oh idk, they're f**king child soldiers indoctrinated to be tools of war to be used and killed for the benefits of others. Rant aside let's continue.

The characters are well done, I love Yuna. I love her Love mates, and I love how Sasuke, Naruto and 3rd Hokage was done. Especially sasuke, it's honestly hilarious how he ends up.

The story is pretty good, I havnt finished Naruto, nor do I plan too, but from my knowledge it stuck to the main story, just with the added benefit of Yuna Chaos. And let me say, the story has sone great added benefits of just being flat out chaotic as that is Yuna. Some went wrong? It's Yuna. Cake in the face? You know it. It's Yuna.

Fight scenes weren't bad, hell they were good in my opinion. But I don't think you'll come reading this novel for the fights. It's not my driving factor, and like mentioned, they get repetitive after a while.

The English is good, just a few spelling mistakes here and there, but that's normal. The Writing Style is good too, no complaints and I quite like it. It shares parts of all POVs a little bit like Dune, but not as info packed where you gotta stop every paragraph just to digest it. Hell, it's mainly just Yuna with the other MCs here and there.

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Kiyuta

Status: completed

Aug 25, 2022

If you're wondering to yourself "why should I read this story?" then here is the answer you're looking for: because I like it.

My taste in novels is perfect, thus all other opinions on the matter are invalid.

You can try to stop and look away, but you will just end up tasting cake.

Reading this is for your own insanity, nothing more, nothing less.

That is, of course, unless you're satisfied with boring clichés and cardboard cutouts characters; if so then this novel isn't for you.

Sensical nonsense aside, looking back to the series I finally remembered a development (Hinata) I initially didn't like, but in the end Maerry resolved it in a great way, so I'm really glad I stuck with this novel.

About the grammar, don't worry about it, it's mostly perfect by now. If you spot any errors that was missed, if you kindly point it out it will be fixed.

Come join us in the right side!

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Mahem

Status: completed

Aug 23, 2022

One of the best novels I have read. That being said, the fact that this is a fanfiction does not take away from that. Most fan-fiction turns out to be horribly written or has awful story-telling. This one does not, of course it gets help from the fact that it is a fanfiction of a well known and liked manga/anime, but it has its own perks as well.

The main character Yuna isn't just a 2 dimensional OP character that feeds off of s*x, fear, and cake. She has her own likes, dislikes, and story.

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I immensely enjoyed the background that we got, especially in regards to her first love betraying her. It makes sense why she is so over the top about everything, as in my opinion, she went insane at that moment. I think the toll of the cultivation world + the betrayal is what made her snap, and thats why she is the way she is. She has never fully healed, at least maybe not till she came into contact with her wives in the novel and slowly began talking to them about her life.

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There is much more that could be said about this, but honestly I won't so I don't spoil more. THIS is one of the best novels I have ever read, and thank you for putting out this masterpiece.

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Streakking

Status: chapter 560

Aug 2, 2022

One of the top 3 fanfics I've read. Its a great take on the narutoverse and original story. Great characters that are very likable and different to original counterparts. Its well written and above all else FUNNY as ****, haven't laughed so hard in a long time. Looking forward to any future works!

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Nahmate

Status: cfinally

Jun 12, 2022

Read it. No seriously read it. Unless you are someone who just despises the idea of comedy or light-hearted tone in fiction there is nothing stopping you. You don't need to know anything about Naruto (I certainly didn't), you don't need to know anything about Xianxia, this is just amazing fun adventure.

There are some minor problems I could name, such as some jokes are starting to border being overused

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hur dur Inoichi mad for example

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but as I said these are minor problems and work of this length is nearly impossible to be perfect

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DigimasterHiro

Status: ctalking with shibuki

Sep 4, 2021

First, I have to say that I never read fan-fics. My Novel Updates account has 10 lists with 500 books I'm reading in it.

I decided on a whim to give this a shot when I saw the cover and title recommended to me... and Immediately binged the whole thing in 2 days, followed by making an account here just to put this in a list and track what chapters I have read.

This FanFic has joined my top 5 WN's. It has blown my mind. The Naruto characters I know and Love now have new personalities but still fit somehow, then OC MC is awesome, the new series of events contain ideas which solve some of the Major Naruto plotholes, and the story is alternately awesome and hilarious on a regular basis.

Seriously Maerry, Kudos to you.

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Sylvie

Status: crowd manipulation

Apr 14, 2021

I rarely read fanfictions but this was really amazing! The author managed to preserve the flow of the original manga/anime perfectly despite changing a few things (Sasuke was completely trashed but who ever cared about him anyway........ except maybe Sakura.)

The MC, Yuna, has a really interesting character and the changes that she brings about can truly be seen and are very creatively done. It is a must try for anyone who liked Naruto.

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flow

Status: anko mitarashi

Feb 7, 2021

Im not even fan of Naruto or fanfics, but this turned to be one of my favorite stories here. Everyday I keep checking multiple times to see new chapters, and when Im reading I cant stop the grin on my face, loving it.

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Novelty

Status: Complete

Jan 25, 2024

If some one is looking for the sause chapters they all have lemon in the title also thus is a master piece of a novel providing constant laughter and a well paced story 😀 I highly recommend it to anyone looking for a good naruto fan fiction or just novel in general. The characters also arnt like the original they will ether kill there enemy's or drive them into insanity which is hilarious 😂

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